Koyo 紅葉

leaves softly falling
watching them I think of you
I hold one to my lips

8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. David Emeron
    Oct 24, 2013 @ 03:25:25

    I think I like this one best thus far. Each line, a subtle thought, stands delicately on its own

    Reply

    • kanzensakura
      Oct 24, 2013 @ 08:04:04

      It is a deeply felt and one of those “accidents”. I was pondering my Saturday walk in the woods. I leaned against a persimmon tree and stood there in silence, except for the aki no soe (voice of autumn) watching as its leaves floated around me to the ground. Deep thoughts, flickering memories. I held out my hand and one rested against my palm. Once could say all of this in a longer poem, and maybe I will at some point. But this haiku was all I could bear. I work hard at wrapping line. This one wrote itself as I penned the line in my journal. Ahhh, she said. it is an accidental haiku.

      Aki no soe is one of those specific terms: voice of autumn – the sound of rustling leaves, song of seasonal birds, autumn rains against the roof, the odd cracking of a branch in the forest, the last few crickets.

      Reply

  2. David Emeron
    Oct 24, 2013 @ 03:28:13

    I have wondered, here and there, if perhaps haiku, in particular, are too short to contain wrapped lines; and keeping that in mind as an additional constraint, makes me ponder my words more deeply and thoroughly.

    Reply

  3. SirenaTales
    Oct 24, 2013 @ 13:43:48

    quiet, tender, wistful, lovely. thank you

    Reply

  4. Eva PoeteX
    Nov 04, 2013 @ 03:55:30

    This poem melts my heart. Your haiku evoke such profound emotion!

    Reply

You've heard my voice, please let me hear yours. Let the conversation begin!

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s

%d bloggers like this: