Ice Prints – tanka 短歌,

icy prints

footprints in the ice
melt and leave no trace behind
impermanent lives
wash down the gutter and merge
becoming one in the sea.

12 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Mar 02, 2015 @ 14:38:28

    Perfect: “…impermanent lives…” You’re on a roll!


  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Mar 03, 2015 @ 08:17:39

    The thought of footprints merging with the sea is quite intriguing…


  3. Victoria C. Slotto
    Mar 03, 2015 @ 16:10:33

    The concept of transience, impermanence dominates my thoughts now as I age…my poetry, too. This is so well expressed.


    • kanzensakura
      Mar 03, 2015 @ 16:14:40

      Thank you so much. I felt this impermanence when my father died 30 years ago. Something always so stable and there suddenly was not. I’ve often looked at city streets, at the footprints and then thought of the Titanic. One of the surveyors that searched the ruins saw hundred of shoes on the ocean floor – their bodies/skeletons had long since been eaten, washed away in the currents, yet, behind were all these shoes. I saw his photographs and wept because of all those lives, those shoes were there as mute reminders of people who were there and suddenly, were not.


  4. dani
    Mar 03, 2015 @ 17:11:06

    very, very nice! you are one of the few modern-day poets i’ve seen who use the pivot line ~ i love this as the two haiku and the tanka and your third line is stunning!


  5. Grace
    Mar 03, 2015 @ 19:01:09

    Becoming one with the sea, love that ending ~ I too admire that cut in the third line ~


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