Two Haiku and One Poem about Wind

Utagawa Hiroshige 1797-1858

Utagawa Hiroshige 1797-1858

I.
The spring moon watches
The wind blowing at night – plum
Petals drift gently

II.
Spring wind comes blowing
Tossing sparrows to the sky –
Wind bells clang loudly.

水の花 Mizu no hana: water flowers
Heavy blossoms pull down the branches
Of trees by the river.
Higher blossoms weep down their petals
Upon the surface of the river
In which the submerged blossoms drown.
Dead leaves cover the earth
beneath the trees.
Sharp winds blow
Removing the corpses of winter.

 

Today at dVerse Poets Pub, the prompt is to write poems inspired by the wind.  Come join us at 3:00 pm EST!  http://dversepoets.com

 

44 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 12:49:47

    I love the wind tossing sparrows, somehow there is a playfulness here that I admire.. I think the second one is my favorite.. 🙂

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 17, 2015 @ 13:47:54

      Mine as well. We had a gusty day yesterday and it seemed to be tossing everything about, rippling across the grass and my neighbor’s chimes were soooooo loud. My heavier wind bell just sort of hummed and at one point, began to clang. That is a heavy wind!

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  2. The Course of Our Seasons
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 13:24:00

    Spring is definitely in the air! Loved the sparrows tossed to the sky. I am so intrigued by haiku and appreciate your kind explanation of the form. Thanks!

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  3. MarinaSofia
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 15:33:43

    Very seasonal. Although we are still a long way from plum blossoms over here, but it’s getting warmer, primroses and crocuses are out, it’s certainly spring. A dreamy first haiku (very classical), the second joyous and playful as a spring lamb!

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  4. claudia
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 15:38:22

    removing the corpses of winter… that is what the spring wind does to perfection… love all of them…

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  5. Mary
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 15:45:18

    I especially like the same thing that Claudia liked ‘removing the corpses of winter.’ So much of the litter of winter is blown away with the strong winds. Wind really does refresh the environment this season of the year.

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 17, 2015 @ 17:14:07

      I wrote this from a memory of being in Japan. The Oi river was flooding but higher up on the bank, a wind was blowing and literally sweeping the dead leaves from under the trees. it was a beautiful sight.

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  6. Linda Kruschke
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 15:47:25

    I like the second haiku best because it holds so much hope of spring, but they are all great. Peace, Linda

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  7. billgncs
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 15:48:56

    I especially liked the visual of the birds being tossed into the sky – It reminded me of the swallows that dart and swoop along the Missouri

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  8. Glenn Buttkus
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 17:56:55

    Actually, I liked the poem best, it had more billow in its sails, more meat on its bones. Nice juxtaposition of form though. Like Claudia & Mary, I think your last line is killer; a short poem unto itself.

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 17, 2015 @ 19:06:21

      Thank you. My haiku are always very lean. but I love this poem. it reminds me of a time in Japan. The Oi river was flooding, pear trees on the banks were in full bloom and many had become flooded. It was cold! Higher up on the banks, a truly sharp wind was blowing and literally blowing away the dead leaves from the around the unflooded trees. it was so wonderful.

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  9. Grace
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 17:57:04

    I love the sounds of the haiku – petals drifting, wind bells clanging ~

    I love that wind removing the corpses of winter – sharp imagery ~ Thanks for your enthusiastic response and comments ~

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  10. bmiller007 (@bmiller007)
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 18:30:11

    I am a little glad those corpses are moving on…there is a tenderness in the haiku that are cool…particularly like the playfulness of the wind tossing sparrows into the sky…

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  11. Delaina Miller (@DelainaMiller)
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 18:46:17

    What a wonderful additions your haiku and poem are to tonights prompt. So great to learn of your poetic voice.

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  12. ayala zarfjian (@ayalazarfjian)
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 20:08:47

    wow your ending just great. Lovely poem.

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  13. Trini Lind
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 21:12:19

    I love these so much!! 🙂 ❤

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  14. seeker
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 21:49:13

    … removing the corpses of the winter. Powerful ending!

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  15. Bryan Ens
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 21:52:58

    “Tossing sparrows to the sky” – love that line!

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  16. Daedalus Lex
    Mar 17, 2015 @ 22:56:13

    Love the image-driven quality of your poems!

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  17. Bastet
    Mar 18, 2015 @ 00:57:56

    Fantastic … I enjoyed both the haiku and the poem … the last line of the poem is such a beautifully stark image … a real a-ha feel to it!

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  18. Kathy Reed
    Mar 18, 2015 @ 07:03:13

    Spring, sparrows, blossoms…..then drowning, death and corpses….nature doing what she does best. I like the second haiku most.

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  19. Kathy Reed
    Mar 18, 2015 @ 07:05:51

    I like the spring, blossoms and sparrow…contrasted with drowning, death, corpses..nature doing what she know best….I like the second haiku best. I might have entered this twice.

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 18, 2015 @ 12:27:01

      Doesn’t matter. The second haiku is stronger than the first and has more action in it. Thank you so much for reading and then taking the time to comment. And while the flowers are drowning, the wind is clearing out all the dead leaves and such so more growth can occur. nature raking its yard.

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  20. Myrna Rosa
    Mar 18, 2015 @ 11:34:16

    I like them all. The poem stands out to me most because of its last line which is so strong and true. Good writing.

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  21. Jennifer Wagner
    Mar 18, 2015 @ 16:41:35

    Lovely seasonal pieces, Kanzensakura~

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  22. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    Mar 18, 2015 @ 17:17:40

    All of them are gems – but my favourite is the last poem.

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