dVerse Poetics – Contradiction

At Meeting the Bar today at dVerse Poetics, Bjorn wants us to write a poem using “antithesis” as the poetic device.

M45, the Pleiades Cluster (92mm 5DII)

“Begin at the beginning… and go on till you come to the end: then stop.” ~Lewis Carroll, Alice’s Adventures in Wonderland

Truth is a contradiction:
Warped truths lies hidden –
Pretty lies flaunt themselves.
Within us –
Deepest darkness,
Light of hope.

We sail on a voyage of life
That only ends at death.
Progression regression,
Knowledge ignorance,
Joy sorrow,
Deepest darkness,
Light of hope

End of the voyage
We disembark and
Cross the bridge
To another world.

In the darkness
The light of the stars
Remind me of the love
I believed would melt the darkness


38 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Linda Kruschke
    May 14, 2015 @ 16:47:56

    This is beautiful. I love the “deepest darkest Light of hope.” Peace, Linda


  2. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    May 14, 2015 @ 16:57:27

    A shining example of writing to the prompt! Some lovely images.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 14, 2015 @ 17:32:44

    I find it interesting how just putting those opposing words together spans up a whole new space of images, and that could be a core of the poem where we can add the layers Claudia described.. loved the deepest darkness light of hope.


  4. Suzanne
    May 14, 2015 @ 17:54:04

    This has a very soulful beauty. I liked it a lot.


  5. Mary
    May 14, 2015 @ 18:03:22

    Toni, I really like this one a lot. Truth definitely is a contradiction oftentimes. The question oftentimes is ‘Whose truth?’ and one person’s truth contradicts another’s. I liked the idea of ‘progression, regression….’ through our life’s journey. This also gives us the picture of what life is really like…nothing straight-forward, lots of back and forth, ups and downs. Antithesis really works well with your theme.


  6. Let's CUT the Crap!
    May 14, 2015 @ 18:32:19

    This is awesome. The most haunting lines are the last two, “Remind me of the love / I believed would melt the darkness.” ❤ ❤ ❤


  7. wolfsrosebud
    May 14, 2015 @ 18:38:23

    do like how you use light and dark


  8. Glenn Buttkus
    May 14, 2015 @ 19:06:06

    Very clever using words of opposition together, dispensing with the set up of line & coital language. Your whole final stanza was killer; the unique quality of your choices makes it intriguing.


  9. Victoria C. Slotto
    May 14, 2015 @ 19:55:55

    Especially like that last stanza–writing philosophical poetry can be such a challenge–and you met it!


  10. C.C.
    May 14, 2015 @ 19:58:04

    In the second stanza, I love the pairings of the two opposing words, two words after two words after two words…..this is so very effective. Brilliant. Also, the idea that you, like so many of us, believed Love would melt the darkness….wow! What a way to put it….so profound and so thought-provoking. This is so gorgeous and on point to the prompt 🙂


  11. Gabriella
    May 14, 2015 @ 21:07:24

    Beautiful poem, Toni. I love the last stanza. These lights shine particularly vividly in the darkness.


  12. katiemiafrederick
    May 14, 2015 @ 21:17:53

    Ah.. yes.. darkness is pervasive.. and part of light..
    and i suppose the best way to light is
    from within.. and never relying
    on others to light dark
    for us..
    and then.. just
    a joy in now.. as
    light US


    May 15, 2015 @ 02:18:49

    LOVE this.


  14. el34ax7
    May 15, 2015 @ 05:16:27

    I love that you took me on a journey through contrasts. It was contemplative and not didactic, which was most nice.


  15. annell4
    May 15, 2015 @ 14:24:26

    Yes, your piece seemed to include ‘everything.’


  16. whimsygizmo
    May 15, 2015 @ 14:28:41

    Love the quote. Always delighted to enter Wonderland.
    I’m particularly drawn to the dichotomy (and deep truth) of this phrase: “Joy sorrow”


  17. Irene
    May 15, 2015 @ 15:44:56

    Yes..about truth, and why we don’t believe when told that there are no absolute truth,..though I still believe that love melts the darkness..and once touched one’s heart stays there forever….


  18. georgeplace2013
    May 15, 2015 @ 19:30:52

    I do love that final stanza. I’m glad to know a love that melts the darkness.


  19. MarinaSofia
    May 16, 2015 @ 01:52:12

    Like everyone else, I particularly appreciated that final stanza and so much that is unsaid and that we might guess at about that love which melts the darkness…
    Very yin-yang feel to this poem – of course, since it deals in contrasts.


    • kanzensakura
      May 16, 2015 @ 09:49:46

      Thank you. I felt that final stanza was itself a contrast to the rest of the philosophic words above it. I am proud of this one but have flagged it for more work – maybe. Periodically, that darkness melting love shows up. It inserted itself into this poem and I let it stay.


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