Another poem for dVerse Poetics 2:00 a.m. prompt, offered by Anthony. I am a night owl and write the majority of my poems at night. Many of them are titled with the date and the time of composing.
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Black night sky:
I descry through blacker branches
The hazy moon behind clouds.
Flakes of snow falling
Like dust or wet stars.
Each dims out
One.by.one.
May 19, 2015 @ 18:51:18
Love those “blacker branches,” especially.
May 19, 2015 @ 21:48:55
🙂
May 19, 2015 @ 19:49:24
So delicate.
May 19, 2015 @ 21:48:16
Thank you.
May 19, 2015 @ 21:57:00
Welcome.
May 19, 2015 @ 19:54:33
I agree with Dell Clover…delicate indeed!
May 19, 2015 @ 19:59:00
Nice allusion between the snow and falling stars. The falling stars could be wishes which ads weight to them all winking out.
May 19, 2015 @ 20:57:19
That is a happier thought than them melting and dying 🙂
May 19, 2015 @ 20:13:20
I like this very much.
May 19, 2015 @ 21:47:44
🙂
May 19, 2015 @ 21:36:11
“Wet stars” … beautiful.
May 19, 2015 @ 21:46:45
Thank you.
May 19, 2015 @ 21:44:04
Love it, but this gave me pause, “Like dust or wet stars.” Makes me smile. You paint wonderful images, Kanzen. ❤ ❤ ❤
May 19, 2015 @ 21:46:29
Thank you very much. I just wish I had your talent.
May 20, 2015 @ 16:38:54
I don’t know about that talent stuff, Kanzen. We all have something and we use it the best way only each of us can individually. ❤ ❤ ❤
May 20, 2015 @ 16:40:50
This is true. But your talent for fiction prose is extraordinary.
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May 20, 2015 @ 17:15:26
You make me want to weep. I still don’t see it–not because it’s easy–it isn’t. It’s because of the struggle to get it the way I want or which works best . ❤ ❤ ❤
May 19, 2015 @ 23:01:34
“One.by.one” is such a wonderful way to show separation in quick succession. The pause is there, but slight, which I am enamored with. Beautiful words. “One trick pony” my arse!
May 20, 2015 @ 10:02:57
Thank you. I borrowed, with permission, the de.vic.e. from a friend who is a wizard with flash fiction. She often uses it for emphasis though, different from how I often use it. She mainly uses in her comments or emails. I use it exclusively in my poetry but she is sweet soul and more than happily said to copy and she herself cannot remember where she picked it up.
May 20, 2015 @ 00:33:33
The way you describe the fading stars in snow is glorious.
May 20, 2015 @ 09:59:30
Thank you. I love to watch the snow fall.
May 20, 2015 @ 11:09:04
b e a u t i f u l !!
May 20, 2015 @ 11:10:01
ah… a fine night owl poem ( from another night owl )
May 20, 2015 @ 11:12:28
unique white snowflakes
fall to their destined places
not to hide my sins
May 20, 2015 @ 11:29:54
🙂
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May 20, 2015 @ 14:30:56
Yes.. the impermanence of sky at night.. is perhaps a Universal
understanding.. that all changes.. and nothing.. not
even stars.. remain
the same..:)
May 20, 2015 @ 23:17:54
love the “wet stars” description of snow! We actually had a bit falling here over the weekend…I guess that’s what I get for living in Canada!
May 21, 2015 @ 08:59:14
Another beautiful piece, which just nails it.
May 21, 2015 @ 10:39:17
Thank you!
May 21, 2015 @ 21:12:06
This makes me sigh. Beautifully done!