dVerse Poetics (2) 02/02/ 2:00 a.m.

Another poem for dVerse Poetics 2:00 a.m. prompt, offered by Anthony. I am a night owl and write the majority of my poems at night. Many of them are titled with the date and the time of composing.

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Black night sky:
I descry through blacker branches
The hazy moon behind clouds.

Flakes of snow falling
Like dust or wet stars.
Each dims out

30 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. whimsygizmo
    May 19, 2015 @ 18:51:18

    Love those “blacker branches,” especially.


    May 19, 2015 @ 19:49:24

    So delicate.


  3. Mary
    May 19, 2015 @ 19:54:33

    I agree with Dell Clover…delicate indeed!


  4. X
    May 19, 2015 @ 19:59:00

    Nice allusion between the snow and falling stars. The falling stars could be wishes which ads weight to them all winking out.


  5. mia
    May 19, 2015 @ 20:13:20

    I like this very much.


  6. thotpurge
    May 19, 2015 @ 21:36:11

    “Wet stars” … beautiful.


  7. Let's CUT the Crap!
    May 19, 2015 @ 21:44:04

    Love it, but this gave me pause, “Like dust or wet stars.” Makes me smile. You paint wonderful images, Kanzen. ❤ ❤ ❤


  8. el34ax7
    May 19, 2015 @ 23:01:34

    “One.by.one” is such a wonderful way to show separation in quick succession. The pause is there, but slight, which I am enamored with. Beautiful words. “One trick pony” my arse!


    • kanzensakura
      May 20, 2015 @ 10:02:57

      Thank you. I borrowed, with permission, the de.vic.e. from a friend who is a wizard with flash fiction. She often uses it for emphasis though, different from how I often use it. She mainly uses in her comments or emails. I use it exclusively in my poetry but she is sweet soul and more than happily said to copy and she herself cannot remember where she picked it up.


  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 20, 2015 @ 00:33:33

    The way you describe the fading stars in snow is glorious.


  10. Sumana Roy
    May 20, 2015 @ 11:09:04

    b e a u t i f u l !!


  11. billgncs
    May 20, 2015 @ 11:10:01

    ah… a fine night owl poem ( from another night owl )


  12. billgncs
    May 20, 2015 @ 11:12:28

    unique white snowflakes
    fall to their destined places
    not to hide my sins


  13. katiemiafrederick
    May 20, 2015 @ 14:30:56

    Yes.. the impermanence of sky at night.. is perhaps a Universal
    understanding.. that all changes.. and nothing.. not
    even stars.. remain
    the same..:)


  14. Bryan Ens
    May 20, 2015 @ 23:17:54

    love the “wet stars” description of snow! We actually had a bit falling here over the weekend…I guess that’s what I get for living in Canada!


  15. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
    May 21, 2015 @ 08:59:14

    Another beautiful piece, which just nails it.


  16. divalounger
    May 21, 2015 @ 21:12:06

    This makes me sigh. Beautifully done!


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