春雨 shun u (gentle spring rain) tanka

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copyright KanzenSakura

copyright KanzenSakura

Spring Rain gently taps
Tender Green and begs a dance
While clover blossoms
On holiday enjoy a
Rainy day at Puddle Lake.

copyright KanzenSakura

copyright KanzenSakura

50 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Bryan Ens
    May 21, 2015 @ 17:48:52

    lovely personification…I like the idea of rain begging a dance!

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  2. DELL CLOVER
    May 21, 2015 @ 17:58:03

    Your poetry is so light and feathery–and I agree with Bryan, love the rain begging a dance.

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  3. Gabriella
    May 21, 2015 @ 18:04:26

    You make the rain sound and feel pleasant even though I am not a fan. I am already bracing for the coming days when we will get rain.

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    • kanzensakura
      May 21, 2015 @ 18:49:06

      This was trully a gentle rain. I can just see my plants smiling at the slow soak. At least it isn’t fu u – ice and rain!

      Sent from my Samsung Galaxy Tab®|PRO

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  4. Mary
    May 21, 2015 @ 20:03:54

    Ah, I love the way you describe how the clover might enjoy a rainy day! It resonates with me. Love the name “Puddle Lake.”

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    • kanzensakura
      May 21, 2015 @ 20:24:13

      They were all massed together, nodding and swaying together – having such a wonderful time. it was a joy to stand and get wet and watch them. The big ones and little ones – all together. They did look like they were on holiday.

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  5. Linda Kruschke
    May 21, 2015 @ 20:25:44

    This made me smile. 🙂 Peace, Linda

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  6. divalounger
    May 21, 2015 @ 21:09:29

    This is really lovely. I love the smaller forms, especially the Japanese forms–Thank you for your visit to my blog today!

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  7. Let's CUT the Crap!
    May 21, 2015 @ 21:27:01

    The beauty of your pieces is that they are always light and airy, gentle and understated. ⭐

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  8. Glenn Buttkus
    May 21, 2015 @ 22:37:50

    Tanks are cool; should call for them on MTB at dVerse one day; more substantive than just the bare bones haiku, & yet not overly verbose. Yours felt & looked terrific; made me hungry for Asian food.

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    • kanzensakura
      May 21, 2015 @ 22:48:39

      Haiku are often considered “unfinished” even though they are. Classic haiku and tanka are my favorite forms of poetic expression. I disabled the spell check on my tablet because we often disagreed 🙂 . It may be fun sometime to do a renga to see all the different “endings” we come up with. I will sometimes embed a classic haiku or tanka in a poem. Maybe next MTB we can have a ramen bar to munch on.

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  9. Glenn Buttkus
    May 21, 2015 @ 22:38:56

    Tanks are cool, but tankas are cooler; (spell-check changed it without my notice).

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  10. Madeleine Begun Kane
    May 21, 2015 @ 23:21:25

    Rain “begging a dance” — what a great image!

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  11. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 22, 2015 @ 00:15:13

    There is such movement in your tanka.. The dance of course but the clover at puddle lake.. That’s really something.

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  12. MarinaSofia
    May 22, 2015 @ 00:43:02

    A sweet, playful tone in your tanka today – that’s the only right way to deal with depressing ole rain! Charming!

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  13. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    May 22, 2015 @ 02:40:19

    Your rain was a much gentler experience than mine! Lovely.

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  14. andysmerdon
    May 22, 2015 @ 02:40:58

    beautiful. thanks for sharing 🙂

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  15. Sumana Roy
    May 22, 2015 @ 09:48:36

    feeling so cool and refreshed…we are burning here in India…ugh…

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  16. vbholmes
    May 22, 2015 @ 13:33:00

    I enjoy rainy days, and your words and photos express the mood so well. Lovely.

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  17. Victoria C. Slotto
    May 22, 2015 @ 13:58:22

    I suspect we both find our inspiration in observing those minute details of nature. This is so peace-filled.

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  18. annell4
    May 22, 2015 @ 14:20:45

    I liked your poem and the images you selected.

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  19. Grace
    May 22, 2015 @ 14:49:21

    Admiring the tanka, specially the rain begging a dance ~

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  20. billgncs
    May 22, 2015 @ 16:06:25

    What were they doing ? Making tadpoles 🙂

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  21. Hannah Gosselin
    May 22, 2015 @ 20:58:01

    One of my favorite sounds…the gentle tapping of rain and I love the way it looks in the woods when it just begins…how the leaves all begin the dance of rain. 🙂

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  22. Mustang.Koji
    May 22, 2015 @ 23:03:08

    I must say this is much better than “pitter-patter”!

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  23. katiemiafrederick
    May 22, 2015 @ 23:49:28

    Ah.. i too.. love the sprinkles of rain
    on tender green.. where green
    is brighter.. with crystal
    drops of light..:)

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  24. Bastet
    May 23, 2015 @ 01:21:04

    Bravo! this is so delightful … it makes me want to sing in the rain! 🙂

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  25. C.C.
    May 23, 2015 @ 22:13:02

    You captured the beautiful simplicity of nature perfectly 🙂

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  26. hypercryptical
    May 25, 2015 @ 17:38:01

    A holiday at Puddle Lake – I would love this! Oh for the joy and freedom of childhood – I would jump in and splash like crazy!
    Anna :o]

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