d’Verse Poetics – haiku – kisame 樹雨

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Summer is winding down.  The dog days of summer are slowly starting to melt into early autumn.  The Japanese have over 50 – FIFTY – 50 words for rain.  Today I am using one of my favorites:  kisame 樹雨.  This is the rain that drips from the tips of tree branches.  I have used the traditional haiku for this.


summer passing – tree
branches weep rain tears
lost in pond below


shutterstock image

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44 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. MarinaSofia
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 14:14:29

    Ah, I do not want to think of the passing of summer yet… your song has just that touch of melancholy, the acute sense of transience that is so characteristic of Japanese poetry.


  2. Mary
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 14:39:42

    Ha, we are having such a nice summer that I do not want it to end. I empathize with the branches weeping rain tears.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 15:03:44

    I really like the scene of those raindrops swallowed by the pond. Seasons here are still not end of summer, but we are starting to have some night…


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 06, 2015 @ 16:09:48

      I have insomnia as it is. I’d go nuts with all that light. But ‘d like to visit and experience the differences. The nights are getting longer here. Another sign of summer ending.


  4. Glenn Buttkus
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 15:14:21

    Here in WA state, generally we get an Indian summer clear into October, lots of sun, but temps in the low 70’s; my favorite time. It has been high 90’s here way too much this summer. Bring on the kisme, I say.


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 06, 2015 @ 15:56:29

      You are lucky in your weather. We’ve had heat indexes of 103F – 108F daily and I am heartily sick of them. Our Indian Summer will go to mid-November. Last Thanksgiving Day was 76F. I eagerly await the first frost.


  5. kanzensakura
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 15:15:06

    Summer will truly not officially be over until September 1 (American Labor Day). But you can see green pumpkins in the fields, gardens winding down, early fall crops starting to ripen. but events have given me the feeling of mono no aware.


  6. Sanaa Rizvi
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 15:29:12

    Poignant yet beautiful poem 🙂


  7. Madeleine Begun Kane
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 15:53:26

    Lovely haiku!


  8. charliezero1.wordpress.com
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 17:03:44

    A strikingly beautiful haiku.

    Love it my friend. 🙂


  9. lupitatucker
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 17:17:54

    I weep along with them. Summer is a wash of beauty. Lovely haiku.


  10. Grace
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 18:27:13

    50 words for rain- wow ~ I admire the haiku of summer passing & rain tears ~


  11. skyraftwanderer
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 19:17:19

    that’s a beautiful haiku right there.

    それは美しい俳句です。 - it’s been a while since i’ve tried japanese, so if it’s wrong, ごめんなさい!


  12. Victoria C. Slotto
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:05:06

    Toni, this just gave me the chills. Imagine having all those words just for rain. It makes me want to learn that language as I already have love affairs with their poets.


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:16:46

      Isn’t it incredible? Tenkuu – rain from a cloudless sky. Keiu – rain that occurs every 10 days….for example. Names for early summer, late summer showers in the morning, at night. Very specific names. Part of the nuances of their culture. Part of why I get bent out of shape when people misuse haiku. Yes, I am a pain. An artist did an exhibit on 20 of the named using clear acrylic bottles Beautiful. Google Nendo. He is the very handsome artist. I think you will like it.


      • Victoria C. Slotto
        Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:27:00

        I wonder what they would call the rain we’re getting right now–a few drops on the windshield. Just enough to mess up the car. Thanks for sharing. I will google Nendo. Sounds wonderful–I love installation art.


        • Victoria C. Slotto
          Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:28:27

          By the way, I like to adhere to the exact rules for haiku–so many without respect to season. Oh, and I was guilty of the same years ago.


          • kanzensakura
            Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:40:19

            I was too years ago. Around 1980 I entered into a long term relationship with a Japanese. I had a deep love of the country but that changed it into something deeper, more pure. We have respect for sonnets, ghazal, villanelle…why do we think it is okay to shred haiku? We make much of respecting other cultures, people. But we trample on this. I know Victoria. You understand. Thankfully.


        • kanzensakura
          Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:34:02

          Maybe hariejitkusame – brief light rain maybe liuu – light drizzle.

          Nendo, rain bottle will get you more specific images. They truly are lovely. Installed at Objet d’ something in Paris.


  13. kelly
    Aug 06, 2015 @ 20:19:55

    Just lovely. I’ve been entranced of late, once again, by haiku and the powerful compression of meaning in so few words. Well done.


  14. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 00:30:54

    Nice picture – in words and visual.


  15. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 01:50:17

    A perfect haiku, which almost brought me to tears. Summer has a way t go yet!


  16. scotthastiepoet
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 06:40:00

    Lovely work, Hayes – all kudos to you… With Best Wishes Scott


  17. Gay Reiser Cannon
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 10:29:49

    Summer late to arrive in TX this year is going full blast..will be 105F today. Though this is a beautiful, wistful poem finely executed!


  18. Jenny Herner (@jennyherner)
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 11:43:46

    A simply lovely shower of words!


  19. katiemiafrederick
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 11:56:08

    Write a poem in 10
    consecutive letters…
    emoticons and
    IT ALL
    out when ALL
    is said


  20. Mohana
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 12:25:31

    This is incredibly pretty!


  21. kaykuala h
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 12:36:26

    Tearful to some for the passing of the summer sun and the summer rains. Autumn is not that bad as a striking season in its place though



  22. Abhra
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 16:23:20

    Wow, interesting to know that they have 50 words for rain – must be very difficult to remember all of them….the transition from summer is beautiful.


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 07, 2015 @ 16:36:15

      They have no problem with remembering. Japan is a rainy place and they love talking about the weather. Not to mention their nuances about the seasons and that their haiku are based on seasons in nature and the first line of haiku has a (or should have) a seasonal word to denote the when of the observation on nature. Many complicated concepts! All these years later, I am still learning.


  23. Desmond, Anthony (@iamEPanthony)
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 16:43:06

    This makes me sad to think of summer passing… ugh, I love the rain weeping from the trees. *weeps*


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 07, 2015 @ 17:03:47

      You all have some hostile winter weather up your way. When I visited during different winters though though, I never minded. I am looking forward to fall. I know many people grow sad at summer winding down becsuse they see the end of the year approaching.


  24. Kathy Reed
    Aug 07, 2015 @ 20:17:26

    Love this…we love the rain in the Pacific Northwest…and we have the best summer ever…but we would like the normal rain to return…lovely haiku.


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 07, 2015 @ 20:21:59

      We have had an unusually wet summer here in the southeast. Between the wet and heat, we are like a bunch of cranky crabs jn a steamer. I am looking forward to fall.


  25. mishunderstood
    Aug 08, 2015 @ 13:43:30

    I admire your respect for haiku and that you openly share your knowledge of it with us…
    …and wow, how beautiful that there are so many specific words for rain! 🙂


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