d’Verse Poetics – Echo Verse

Mary is our bartender today at d’Verse Poetics.  She has given us an interesting prompt today:  echo poetry.  The line below echoes the last word in the line above. We have some interesting and varied responses to this prompt. Come visit us to read the creativity of the linked poets and as always, please feel free to submit your own and comment on the poems. And please, tell your friends!    http://dversepoets.com/2015/08/13/meeting-the-bar-echo-verse

Being heartily sick of the summer heat, I have delved into my second favorite poetry form – tanka – but with the echo twist and…..icy trees!

copyright kanzensakura

copyright kanzensakura

 Tree Bones
snow covered tree bones
bones
rattle tangle in cold wind
sinned
Icy plum tree shivers
quivers

huddled birds are silent – no
snow
sound except the bones
moans

29 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Laura M Kaminski
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 17:32:31

    Oh, marvelous! Enjoyed.

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  2. Gabriella
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 18:02:19

    I had never really thought about this but it is true that in winter those bare trees evoke death and crack like bones especially when snow seems to have muffled all other sounds.

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  3. Mary
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 18:05:35

    Really a ‘cool’ poem for a hot day! I like all of your lines very much. The ending struck me as especially excellent. I really like the idea of tree bones & the last echo – bones/moans!

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  4. Sanaa Rizvi
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 18:09:49

    The chill from the winter does seep into the bones. Excellent write 🙂

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  5. Glenn Buttkus
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 18:46:02

    Your tanka has become flawless echo poetics;& your last line & echo is killer. There seems to be a lot more diversity within this form than I had expected. The magic seems to emerge in the echoes.

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  6. Desmond, Anthony (@iamEPanthony)
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 21:56:44

    My bones crack and pop in the winter like an old guy. lol. This really reminds me of the icy and chilling atmosphere of the winter: the howling winds and moaning trees. Relaxing and a bit creepy at the same time…

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  7. Sumana Roy
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 23:51:21

    aaah…this poem did cool me down on such a hot day…love the description of the winter trees…and bones/moans….

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  8. mishunderstood
    Aug 13, 2015 @ 23:58:29

    Tree bones….you had me at tree bones. 🙂

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  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 00:48:37

    The sound of trees moaning, like an icy threnody.. Ghostly good.

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  10. MarinaSofia
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 01:38:49

    I could feel the chill and hear the crackling moaning sound of the ice on the trees. Ghost-like atmosphere – very good!

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  11. Grace
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 08:27:41

    Love the short echoing words specially no/snow and bones/moans….very cleverly done Toni ~

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  12. Kathy Reed
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 11:05:10

    On the chilly side as we all experience warm summer, and your tree bones are lovely indeed.

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  13. Victoria C. Slotto
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 14:59:00

    What a great idea–to combine forms. And it worked so well. It’s hot, dry and windy here today–perfect conditions for wild fires. So scary.

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    • kanzensakura
      Aug 14, 2015 @ 15:58:54

      That is scary. We rarely have wildfires. Up in the mountains, rarely. We have had so very much rain, the mast inthe woods is deteriorating too quickly, which means less food for the wildlife.

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  14. lynn__
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 18:17:12

    Toni, thanks for this cool combo winter poem… i needed something bone chilling today (yay)!

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  15. katiemiafrederick
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 18:37:19

    Fall breeze Whispers Summer cool
    Fuel
    Human energy abounds
    Around
    Break in North Florida Heat
    Beats..:)

    It is actually 65 this
    morning in the Panhandle
    of Florida.. and what a cool
    breeze that is.. smiles..:)

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  16. Linda Kruschke
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 19:53:44

    Okay, this one didn’t make me want to like cold, but I do love the poem. Your use of the echo is superb. Very nice. Peace, Linda

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  17. kanzensakura
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 20:10:20

    They really do. It can be rather disconcerting to hear the branches cracking or knocking about against the others.

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  18. kanzensakura
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 20:10:59

    Happy to oblige 🙂

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  19. kanzensakura
    Aug 14, 2015 @ 20:11:44

    Perfect weather.

    Reply

  20. Abhra
    Aug 15, 2015 @ 00:25:11

    Tony, some lovely rich visuals you have in here – I love this.

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  21. macjam47
    Aug 15, 2015 @ 21:27:56

    Love your tanka.

    Reply

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