d’Verse Poetics – Complicated Heart: haibun

Tuesday at d’Verse Poetics, Anthony is our pub tender. He has gifted us with eight original lines of poetry. He wants us to write a poem using three lines of our choice from the eight Please come visit us, read the original, amazing lines from this talented young man, read the poems linked and….link one of your own! Mr. Linky is good for 33 hours so you have plenty of time to submit one of your poems. The lines I have used are bolded and italicized. My submission for this is a haibun. October 5 is another special Haibun Monday!& If you enjoy writing this form or are curious about it, come visit us then as well. Hamish Gunn will the guest host along with our fearless leader and poet extraordinaire – Bjorn.

Complicated Heart
Sakura Matsuri –under the cherry trees I wandered alone. The petals of pink and white blew in the fitful breeze or caught in the grass. I looked at the patterns they made, there beneath the trees and craved images of you. The tree limbs, danced with grace against the blue sky. My heart wept remembering the fluidity of your presence.

Hanami in Hakone was almost past. In memory I saw the petals falling on your black hair, saw your elegant hands catching the petals in the wind and holding them to my lips to lightly kiss before you again scattered them to the wind. A lost love found in you awakened my heart. Years passed. Japan called you home. I should have gone with you. You should have stayed. The heart makes the simplest things so damn complicated.

cherry blossom rain –
pink and white petals – flower
tears – blue sky dims.

copyright kanzensakura

copyright kanzensakura

 

36 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 09:09:16

    Those moments when we have to make the most difficult decision, and there is such sadness in the falling of cherry-bloom petals, a true sadness, and a parting of sorts. You have blended the sentences so well into the prose making them your own.

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  2. Glenn Buttkus
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 14:38:25

    Very impressed with the way you weaved Anthony’s sentences into your own world & words. Inspired m to write a Haibun as well, & use 5 of his sentences in mine.

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  3. MarinaSofia
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 15:17:44

    Such an elegant use of haibun – a nostalgic one, with those cherry blossoms symbolising the far too swift passing of a great love.

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  4. Desmond, Anthony (@iamEPanthony)
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 15:35:59

    My heart wept remembering the fluidity of your presence. that is sooo lovely! I also enjoyed your end, you should’ve stayed, I should’ve went with… complicated indeed. Lvoed your use of the lines!

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  5. Hannah Gosselin
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 15:55:33

    You’ve woven in your lines of choice so well…a wonderful haibun. I love the graceful dancing motions of the tree. 🙂

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  6. Grace
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 17:16:15

    What a beautiful haibun on the heart’s affairs ~ Too bad, the lovers made different decisions ~

    I so love the flower tears in haiku, wow ~

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 22, 2015 @ 17:51:51

      Too bad indeed. We would have been grandparents, probably.

      Reply

    • kanzensakura
      Sep 23, 2015 @ 15:51:19

      2 1/2 cups grated zucchini (small or medium squash work best)
      1 egg, beaten
      2 tablespoons butter, melted
      1 cup bread crumbs
      1/4 cup minced onion
      1 teaspoon Old Bay Seasoning
      1/4 cup all-purpose flour
      1/2 cup vegetable oil for frying

      Grate zucchini into a colander. Lightly salt and allow to drain for about an hour and then using paper towels, squeeze out excess moisture. In a large bowl, combine zucchini, egg, and butter or margarine. Stir in seasoned crumbs, minced onion, and seasoning. Mix well. Shape mixture into patties. Dredge in flour. In a medium skillet, heat oil over medium high heat until hot. Fry patties in oil until golden brown on both sides.

      I make a double batch of these (to freeze for later use), and bake them on a lightly oiled baking sheet. 400 degree oven, turning once after 12 – 15 minutes then baking an additional 12-15 minutes.

      if you don’t have Old Bay, use equal parts of ground bay leaves, sweet paprika, dashes of ground nutmeg, ginger, some salt, pepper, if you like heat, cayenne. these do not taste of crab, but….the patties make a good sandwich or served with a side of pasta and a fresh chunky marinara.

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  7. Victoria C. Slotto
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 17:42:21

    The form lends itself so perfectly to the prompt. Your use of the lines is all but unnoticeable. The poem is poignant and evocative. I always look forward to reading your work.

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  8. charliezero1.wordpress.com
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 18:05:09

    Impressive images, especially the way you used Anthony’s sentences.

    Incredible work my friend.

    🙂

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  9. enthusiasticallydawn
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 18:28:43

    This is tender and beautiful. It flows and breathes naturally, I am amazed at the way you did that…can I be a little jealous on this one? It just seems completely as if you wrote the lines instead of Anthony!

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  10. Mary
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 20:20:13

    Toni, this is such a beautifully gentle poem. I found Anthony’s phrases slightly harsh, but you used them in an elegant and wistful way!

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 23, 2015 @ 15:44:49

      Thank you so much. I was not as imaginative as so many others. Like you, I have a despair about commenters. I have some I always comment on but who never ever return the courtesy. Oh well….I do appreciate your kind words on this little effort of mine.

      Reply

  11. lynn__
    Sep 22, 2015 @ 21:12:48

    A beautifully romantic write…sigh.

    Reply

  12. georgeplace2013
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 07:20:04

    Wonderful, sweetly bittersweet

    Reply

  13. Misky
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 07:43:31

    Gorgeous haibun.

    Reply

  14. sreejaharikrishnan
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 07:56:04

    beautiful…..!!!

    Reply

  15. Kathy Reed
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 14:42:14

    Cherry blossoms evoke such beautiful images and lend a lot to Anthony’s words that you incorporated. They blend in perfecly!

    Reply

  16. whimsygizmo
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 15:42:27

    Love those flower tears. So much gorgeous imagery here.

    Reply

  17. X
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 16:25:39

    The cherry blossom rain makes for a beautiful image. I found the looking at the fallen petals and searching for their image in them to be quite evocative. Decisions made have lasting impact – to leave and everything that falls along with that. The softness of the petals as well comes into play there in that second stanza.

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 23, 2015 @ 16:30:24

      Thank you for reading and commenting. The time of cherry blossoms changed in its meaning, forever after that decision. Truly added deeper meaning to mono no aware.

      Reply

  18. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 16:57:45

    The haibun is the perfect form for Anthony’s prompt. Bravo.

    Reply

  19. Anna
    Sep 23, 2015 @ 21:37:56

    Beautiful poem, collaboration, love story, and photograph!

    Reply

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