Heart Rains – tanka

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Heart rains

dry hot summer ends –
soft rain taps on leaves like sad
tears falling from the
grey sky – I lift my face and
whisper your name – can you hear
me – do you know my heart rains?

Tanka are poems with line syllables of 5-7-5-7-7. There is an extra line of 7 syllables making this form Bussoku-sekika – footprint of Buddha, a rare form of poetry, an early form of waka. It is written for my friend Peggie – Huntmode on wordpress, who died this past May.  I am linking to Poetry Pantry today for the first time:  http://poetryblogroll.blogspot.se/2015/09/poetry-pantry-271.html

 

 

47 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. robert okaji
    Sep 26, 2015 @ 23:16:35

    Beautiful, K. Stunning.

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  2. Bastet
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 03:39:16

    splendid!

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  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 13:35:40

    Love the thought of heart rains, there is something both soothing and sad at the same time, just like the fall… a band-aid for the scorch of summer.

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  4. Mary
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 14:01:23

    This is beautifully penned, Toni. I am especially struck by “do you know my heart reigns?” You are really in your element with tanka!

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  5. Mary
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 14:01:50

    (PS — and so nice to see you here!)

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  6. whimsygizmo
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 14:06:07

    I love the tanka, and you have done it beautiful justice.
    Love the double meaning in “rains” in the last line.

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  7. Nataša Dolenc
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 14:47:11

    beautiful images

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  8. Sherry Marr
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 15:48:19

    I love “can you hear me? do you know my heart rains?” Sorry about my polar bears – that’s why I put a warning. The photos about killed me dead, it took days for me to be able to write about them.

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 27, 2015 @ 15:53:52

      I was totally traumatized by Ol’ Yeller years ago. Can’t bear this sort of thing and being in a down cycle in my depression, I knew I would be ruined. But I will certainly find out what I can. Any animal or human in such distress causes me to sometimes go into fetal position and my meds cease to help me. So I avoid such things. I do thank you for showing this though.

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  9. Sanaa Rizvi
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 15:53:19

    Ah yes… the heart does rain.. wishing for someone to hear its pitter patter.
    As always lovely poem 😀

    Lots of love,
    Sanaa

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  10. Donna@Living From Happiness
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 16:51:55

    What a beautiful image in word and picture…the end is exquisite!

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  11. Jamztoma
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 19:52:36

    Hello there! thanks for the comment on my blog. the rain can enervate people…you’re right. thanks for this!

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  12. Myrna Rosa
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 20:06:45

    Welcome to Poetry Pantry. This is a very sweet poem for your friend. So sorry for your loss.

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  13. thotpurge
    Sep 27, 2015 @ 21:06:50

    So soft and lovely…

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  14. abinchakraborty
    Sep 28, 2015 @ 01:30:48

    I love these brief but poignant takes.so much in so little.beautiful.

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  15. macjam47
    Sep 28, 2015 @ 07:21:17

    A beautiful tribute to your friend. Lovely tanka.

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  16. Sumana Roy
    Sep 28, 2015 @ 09:07:17

    heart rains…so beautifully put…

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  17. Jae Rose
    Sep 28, 2015 @ 09:16:48

    I suppose some people will hear others will not..perhaps the wisdom is in choosing who? A beautiful, thoughtful poem

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  18. Steve King
    Sep 29, 2015 @ 09:53:55

    Wonderful work within the form. MIrroring nature in the heart. Well done.
    Steve K.

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  19. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
    Sep 29, 2015 @ 16:28:05

    I am reminded of a poet friend long ago telling me, re subject matter, ‘Sadness can be beautiful’. This certainly is a beautiful remembrance of your friend! (I am glad, also to learn of a form I had not previously encountered.)

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 29, 2015 @ 16:30:30

      Thank you. This used to be a common firm in the Heian period but fell out of common usage. I like ut because it lets me add another line! Peggie was a beautiful soul.

      Sent by Outlook for Android

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  20. humbird
    Sep 29, 2015 @ 16:40:59

    love the ‘heart rains’/reins…so much meaning, melancholy…god bless…

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  21. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Oct 02, 2015 @ 12:00:10

    “…do you know my heart rains?”
    Toni, this squeezed my heart and wrung it out. ❤ ❤ ❤

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  22. SAN_jeet
    Oct 31, 2015 @ 03:19:22

    awesome lines

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  23. greenspeckblogger
    Jan 12, 2016 @ 10:29:29

    Beautiful … tears and rain, always in sync 🙂

    Reply

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