Haibun: aki fukashi – Autumn Deepens

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秋深し (あきふかし Autumn Deepens
Meigetsu: the harvest moon is fading. Bright gold coin in the black sky dims and wanes to a partial dish of cream. Hatsu grashi – the first storm of autumn has washed the sky clean. Aki simu – autumn is clearing – a brilliant blue with luminous white clouds drifting, silent, peace. Aki no koe – the voice of autumn whispers – a breeze across dry leaves on the grass, wind in the reeds at the creek, the little priest cricket delicately moves his legs, a small voice among the pine and bell crickets, alto to the larger cicada and their metallic thrum.

Shinryoo – a new coolness in the air. The coming of autumn is somnolent today – no rise or fall, a steady tone of almost silence. Morning glory twines lovingly around my plum tree and shows her blue face reflecting her sister the brilliant autumn sky – aki no sora. The small grey tabby across the way sits beneath an oak tree watching the occasional slow falling leaf. Her eyes stay upward and she does not move for she wants to see the leaves as they float and fall around her. An early leaf burning: smoke wanders and its incense drifts to heaven. I sit entranced in the midst of the haiku I wish I could write.

voice of cicadas
silent now in the stand of
pine trees on the hill.

painting Tani Bucho 1817

painting Tani Bucho 1817

36 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Mary
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 13:54:48

    You have really given us a lot of images in nature to visualize. My favorites are the little ‘priest cricket’ and ‘the small grey tabby.’ Your haiku is so vivid. I can hear the cicadas. Nice to see you again this Sunday.


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 04, 2015 @ 14:22:42

      Nice to be here! The Japanese have named the small cricket that because its sound is like the sound of the small bells often heard and carried by the priests when they walk. Thank you for liking this. It is one of the favorite haibun I have written. I pulled it out to clean up and tighten about a month ago.


  2. Sanaa Rizvi
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 14:42:13

    This is absolutely fantastic 😀 such a powerhouse of talent you are!!


  3. moondustwriter
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 15:09:07

    Beauty in the true haibun spirit – thanks so much for coloring our day with autumn.


  4. Mama Zen
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 15:09:11

    Oh, this is lovely! So much gorgeous imagery delivered clean and crisp.


  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 15:31:30

    There is something very zen in that grey tabby.. You are right that many days of autumn is very silent.. there is something quite solemn in this before the autumn storms hit, and the leaves come down in cascades, rivulets of soggy leaves that fill the street.. we have to live in these soft moments.


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 04, 2015 @ 18:07:10

      The little tabby’s name actually is Zennie, named after her human’s mother, Zenobia.  She is a little mischief maker but sometimes, she goes into mediation mode.  I enjoy watching her prowl about looking for trouble.

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  6. scotthastiepoet
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 15:53:37

    Lovely share, you have lifted my evening.. So thank you and Yes, I have sat out and gazed over that very same meditation garden featured at the top of your page on a recent trip to Japan! With Best Wishes Scott http://www.scotthastie.com


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 04, 2015 @ 18:03:55

      Ryoanji is my heart home. Ii actually have three rotating headers and am glad this one came up for you. I am considering taking out an old haibun and shaping it up about first snow as I sat on the platform in dead winter.

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  7. ZQ
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 16:26:14

    Excellent !


  8. Sherry Marr
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 17:15:00

    This is so visually lovely to read. I especially love the little priest cricket, the faces of the morning glories, and the little cat with her head turned up watching the leaves. This was a delight to read.


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 04, 2015 @ 18:01:14

      Thank you. I so love this time of year! The Japanese call that smaller cricket lLittle Priest because the sound it makes is similar to the bells the priests often wear as they walk about. I love it when it is their season. I’m not sure what it’s scientific name is.

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  9. Donna@Living From Happiness
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 19:33:41

    What a beautiful image of autumn you paint with your words!


  10. kaykuala h
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 22:16:28

    Aki no koe – the voice of autumn whispers –
    a breeze across dry leaves on the grass,

    Fall is most apparent and the colors are loud brown and golden on the ground. How nice, Toni!



  11. Myrna Rosa
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 22:35:30

    Your words have captured the beauty, the chill, the colors and movement of fall. What a beautiful poem you’ve written!


  12. lynn__
    Oct 04, 2015 @ 23:10:09

    I admire this haibun, Toni…you’ve captured autumn expertly!


  13. Claire
    Oct 05, 2015 @ 02:51:28

    Wow ~ that was masterful. What a delight to read!


  14. Sumana Roy
    Oct 05, 2015 @ 03:12:49

    visual and aural…a beautiful autumn treat…thanks for the share….


  15. 1sojournal
    Oct 05, 2015 @ 08:42:43

    Loved this quiet stroll through your lush and vivid imagery. Thanks for explaining the “priest cricket” and the haiku is perfect,



  16. macjam47
    Oct 05, 2015 @ 08:58:01

    Beautiful autumn treat. Lovely haibun.


  17. Panchali
    Oct 05, 2015 @ 10:31:45



  18. glmeisner
    Oct 05, 2015 @ 17:21:48

    Great poem.


  19. Snakypoet (Rosemary Nissen-Wade)
    Oct 06, 2015 @ 03:12:58

    Absolutely beautiful, all of it!


  20. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Oct 06, 2015 @ 09:37:27

    Every word, a color, a smell, a scene, a memory. I love how you’ve captured autumn, from bright to stark to ashes. Your paintbrush of words is golden. ❤ ❤


  21. humbird
    Oct 06, 2015 @ 15:18:15

    Ah, mighty pine trees! Love the haibun and haiku.


  22. Magaly Guerrero
    Oct 06, 2015 @ 16:16:10

    If I read this poem in July, I would still feel autumn in my heart. Love the images in the prose, and the haiku makes those images stronger.

    I can hear the song of the cicadas… 🙂


  23. tsdwords
    Oct 10, 2015 @ 18:01:40

    This is such a lovely meditation and the imagery so well penned. It made me peaceful and happy thank you


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 10, 2015 @ 18:14:43

      Thank you. This is one of the reasons the only award I have accepted and posted on my blog is The Inner Peace Award. A lovely person gave it to me because she said my site made her feel peaceful inside. This makes me happy.


  24. Francina
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 11:05:14



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