copyright kanzensakura
leaves like fallen flags –
tattered banners sodden by
all day rain stick to
the asphalt – shades of brown and
dull gold – dreams of red still
clinging to branches – a cold
fire burning away gray day.
akai aki – red autumn
07 Nov 2015 23 Comments
in General Poetry, Haiku Tags: autumn, gray day, poetry, rainy day, red leaves
Nov 08, 2015 @ 09:38:06
Beautiful. I like thinking of leaves as fallen flags & also the dreams of red still clinging to the branches….resisting for a short time the pull to the dullness of fall. The last image is interesting…cold fire. On such days I would like to be sitting inside with a warm fire. Smiles.
Nov 08, 2015 @ 14:49:27
there is a specific Japanese word that refers to these fallen leaves as fallen or tattered banners. Yesterday my road was carpeted by these leaves, sodden and sticking to everything! and then, there are the last two bushes flaming pure red with still some green leaves and holding firm in the face of falling fall. I look forward to those days of sitting inside with a warm fire and reading. and hopefully snowing outside!
Nov 08, 2015 @ 12:35:35
What lovely imagery.
Nov 08, 2015 @ 13:26:44
Thank you!
Nov 08, 2015 @ 14:59:38
Fabulous imagery of autumns chilly wet days…love the fire on those days…its warmth and smell.
Nov 08, 2015 @ 15:40:12
I think during this weekend the leaves left… now only the bare branches, I truly love how you describe those bold colors against the autumn grey…
Nov 08, 2015 @ 17:08:36
This is absolutely stunning both in words and image 🙂
Nov 08, 2015 @ 20:15:19
We feast our eyes on the last of the colour before the grey takes over………your photo is glorious.
Nov 08, 2015 @ 22:00:39
Thank you!
Nov 09, 2015 @ 05:52:45
not easy to write this moment of autumn without cliché but you’d done it beautifully – I like the idea of tattered banners – (like bunting in the rain)
Nov 09, 2015 @ 16:08:22
Thank you. Autumn is my favorite season and I have had a true love affair with it all my life. Like love, seasons are often done to death. I try hard to put a different perception of seasons. Thank you.
Nov 09, 2015 @ 08:04:39
The opening line is indeed captivating and unfolds beautifully in this poem
Nov 09, 2015 @ 16:06:42
Thank you!
Nov 09, 2015 @ 13:42:06
A lovely progression here and wonderful description of autumn colors. Very nice.
Nov 09, 2015 @ 16:05:36
Thank you!
Nov 09, 2015 @ 21:26:48
those “dreams of red that refuse to fall, are still valiant and defiant. 🙂
interesting imagery.
Nov 10, 2015 @ 17:51:10
Beautiful imagery ~ I like the fallen flags and dreams still clinging to branches.
Nov 10, 2015 @ 17:54:28
Lovely photo, too.
Nov 10, 2015 @ 17:56:43
Thank you are on both counts!
Nov 10, 2015 @ 22:46:26
Lovely imagery.
Nov 11, 2015 @ 01:20:18
Thank you so much for your kind comments.
Nov 11, 2015 @ 06:36:53
Beautiful! And beautifully crafted.
Nov 11, 2015 @ 20:38:48
Thank you.