ko no ha no ame: falling leaves sounding like rain

Today at d’Verse, Victoria is doing our weekly poetics on the weather – Weather You Like it or Not! Drop by and visit Link your own poem and read those of other talented writers. We all may have different things in our cultures but we all have weather!  http://dversepoets.com/2015/11/10/weather-you-like-it-or-not-dverse-poetics/

ko no ha no ame
rainy autumn day –
a burial of dead leaves
swept from branches by –
bitter wind – even the crows
are silent – only the howls
of a stray dog breaks the grey
silence – I walk with the weight
of the heavens on my mind.
leaves fall – sorrow on sorrow.

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free public domain image


34 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. MarinaSofia
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 02:27:54

    I hate it when the leaves start to fall and leave the trees all bare – so gorgeous in those moments when they are all multicoloured and still on the tree. Of course, fits in so well with the Japanese concepts of transience and evanescence.


  2. Laura Bloomsbury
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 04:05:20

    the depth of feeling measured in the depth of leaf litter & encapsulated beautifully in those last lines


  3. Mary
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 07:59:41

    I can feel the oppressiveness in this poem, Toni. You chose excellent images – silent crows, howling of dog, bitter wind… Sometimes those feelings of sorrow upon sorrow are as heavy as the weight of the world.


  4. Sanaa Rizvi
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 08:02:52

    The images here add to the sorrow of the falling leaves.. Beautifully poignant 🙂


  5. Grace
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 09:27:36

    Specially love:

    leaves fall – sorrow on sorrow.

    A beautiful autumn poem Toni ~


  6. Victoria C. Slotto
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 11:32:05

    This is so atmospheric. Even with snow on the ground outside, I am feeling that sorrow on sorrow of fall. I knew you would bring something special to the bar today. Enjoy that melancholy beauty of autumn.


  7. Bryan Ens
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 12:33:21

    There certainly is a sorrowful aspect to those falling leaves.


  8. lynn__
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 16:12:10

    Tears of rain falling here today… on leaves of sorrow. This poem aches, Toni.


  9. writersdream9
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 17:02:25

    There is a kind of heaviness about this time of year and you have portrayed it perfectly!


  10. Oliana
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 19:52:18

    Oh we can feel the sadness of this season …even the crow is silent!! wow!


  11. Glenn Buttkus
    Nov 11, 2015 @ 22:26:46

    Silent crows & howling dogs; heavy totems. It is always difficult to witness death, natural or otherwise, because in the now you are waist deep in chilly leaf corpses, which hums a windy dirge, & we dismiss the fact that we know there will be fecund
    rebirth in spring. Very nice work here.


  12. vbholmes
    Nov 12, 2015 @ 12:21:38

    “only the howls
    of a stray dog breaks the grey
    silence” This image conjures up memories of early morning walks on bleak late Autumn days–some pleasant for the solitude, some sad for the times. Lovely poem.


  13. Bodhirose
    Nov 12, 2015 @ 13:45:08

    I can feel the heaviness in your heart, Toni. You portrayed the loss of growth, greenery and life with striking imagery in spite of that…or maybe because of it.


  14. othermary
    Nov 12, 2015 @ 14:59:38

    I beautiful, melancholy piece. Your closing lines are so complete in their sadness.


  15. Sherry Marr
    Nov 12, 2015 @ 15:15:57

    So poignant – “leaves fall, sorrow on sorrow.”


  16. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Nov 14, 2015 @ 16:08:54

    Oh the sorrow on the sorrow.. what a wonderful image of those leaves… I always finf the double meaning in leaves so important… there is so much weight in falling leaves.


  17. macjam47
    Nov 17, 2015 @ 08:40:07

    Your poem perfectly captures the way I feel when the leaves fall and my world looks bleak and barren.


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