dVerse Poetics: Mockingbird #2

Another entry for dVerse Poetics today: Mockingbird is the prompt. I have based this tanka on the battle scene of the Last Samurai.

pink as the spring
sunrise – cherry blossoms bloom
the next morning of
the last battle – forms lie still –
mocking birds sing their goodbye.


free image - Last Samurai, last battle

free image – Last Samurai, last battle

10 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. kelly
    Feb 23, 2016 @ 21:35:54

    A haunting verse, made even more so by the pinks and cherry blossom imagery in the beginning.


  2. whimsygizmo
    Feb 23, 2016 @ 22:01:53

    …sing their goodbye.

    oh, my. This choked me up.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Feb 24, 2016 @ 00:52:23

    Singing goodbye.. There is something so special with such beauty juxtaposed against a battle to come.


  4. Sanaa Rizvi
    Feb 24, 2016 @ 03:24:45

    Such a strong image!


  5. Misky
    Feb 24, 2016 @ 06:15:49

    I’m also caught up in that singing goodbye. Wonderful.


  6. ShirleyB
    Feb 24, 2016 @ 10:19:40

    What horror beneath cherry blossom gaze, and the sad lament of the mocking birds. Beautifully sad.


  7. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Feb 24, 2016 @ 16:42:49

    A full story in few words. Haunting, Kanzen. ❤ ❤ ❤


  8. lillian
    Feb 25, 2016 @ 07:22:42

    Wow! Full story indeed — and the fields are pink as the blood has faded with time. wow! Just wonderful.


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