Quadrille: Bubble Lives

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I missed the Monday Quadrille De Jackson (WhimsyGizmo) had for us.  Poems have to use the prompt word and be exactly 44 words in length.  The prompt word was “Bubble”. So I am submitting this for dVerse’s Open Link Night – in which poets can submit one of any of their original poems on any subject in any form. Come join us for a wonderful time of reading creative poets!

Bubble Lives
cherry blossoms bloom at dawn –
fade, fall before noon
scattering in the wind.
dew evaporates with the sun –
the song of a bird breaks the silence
then fades again into the silence.
our lives are but bubbles on the surface
of a pond.

45 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:09:18

    What a beautiful poem… love the thought of bubbles on a pond… wonderful

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  2. Linda Kruschke
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:15:13

    I see a beautiful hint of spring in this, and you know I do love spring. 🙂 Peace, Linda

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:20:33

      Yes you do! 🙂

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:29:08

      And actually, this isn’t about spring. It is about intransience and the brevity of our lives. I learned today my “twin” cousin has lung cancer and this was the result.

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      • Linda Kruschke
        Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:32:42

        Rereading it I can see that aspect of the poem. Perhaps I saw spring because I so want it to come. But even in the back of my mind as I wrote my comment I thought, and then will come summer and fall and winter again. Subconsciously I did catch on to the fleeting nature of life that you were conveying. I am sorry to hear about your cousin. This is a beautiful tribute. Peace, Linda

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  3. Glenn Buttkus
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:20:39

    Spring is the most popular theme out here on the trail tonight; & well it should be. Adieu to hoary frost & snow drifts, tire chains, & bone chills–hello to gestation & new life.

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:28:52

      And actually, this isn’t about spring. It is about intransience and the brevity of our lives. I learned today my “twin” cousin has lung cancer and this was the result. I grieve for him.

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  4. Sanaa Rizvi
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:41:49

    This is such an elegant quadrille ❤ ❤

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  5. summerstommy2
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 16:54:35

    Lovely metaphor on life. Beautifully done.

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  6. Mary
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 17:01:14

    This is good. Quite profound….. I like the idea of each life being a bubble floating on a pond. The pond = the earth. We each have just a bit of impact in this wide, wide world. (Ha, sometimes individual bubbles think they are more important than they are.)

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  7. navasolanature
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 17:12:50

    Beautifully expressed and do hope your cousin can be treated and recover. Life is fragile and the bubbles express that .

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  8. Grace
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 18:06:46

    I am looking forward to seeing those cherry blooms ~ But this part is full of wisdom:

    our lives are but bubbles on the surface
    of a pond.

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  9. Bodhirose
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 22:09:00

    I’m sorry for your sad news, Toni. And how true that our lives are so very fragile…like those bubbles. Beautifully told in a short 44 words!

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  10. cayn
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 22:20:56

    This is fantastic!

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  11. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Mar 03, 2016 @ 23:26:48

    I have no words. Sigh. ❤ ❤ ❤

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  12. MarinaSofia
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 01:58:33

    So easily destroyed, and somewhat illusory. I love the comparison! Quadrille suits you.

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 15, 2016 @ 17:19:20

      Catching up on some comments! out of town with iffy internet….thank you so much. I like the form – expanded haiku, uncounted tanka….that is how I think of this 44 word wonder Bjorn came up with.

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  13. Al The Author
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 02:56:07

    This is wonderful. It takes the “classic” haiku concept, and expands it beautifully, even if the overall message is less than positive (or realistic, depending on your viewpoint)

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  14. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 03:12:27

    Life is so short, so ephemeral – like your bubbles on a pond. A lovely poem.

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  15. kim881
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 03:31:46

    Ephemeral bubbles and cherry blossom on a pond – sublime.

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  16. Raivenne
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 13:17:12

    So beautifully put, kanzensakura. The likening to the oh so brief lives of Cherry Blossom blooms and bubbles was heartfelt and heartbreaking. I really felt this.

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    • kanzensakura
      Mar 15, 2016 @ 17:13:16

      Catching up on some comments! out of town with iffy internet..Thank you. I feel this deeply. I have been out of town taking care of my mother who is frail and not doing well…so this one truly was from the heart

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  17. Victoria C. Slotto
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 18:24:16

    You are skilled at bringing the feeling of a Japanese poem into so many beautiful poems. So much to love about this one–the kind I wish I’d written.

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  18. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Mar 04, 2016 @ 20:53:36

    Our life is comprised of moments. Yes. Beautiful

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  19. Abhra
    Mar 05, 2016 @ 00:12:42

    Breaking silence and then fading into silence – very soulful piece Toni. Have a good weekend.

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  20. lillian
    Mar 05, 2016 @ 07:03:29

    Ah….I’m so glad you came back to this prompt. This is bubble-licious! The moments of time that pop — like the small bubbles……..really enjoyed this. A quiet poem…serene…..still…..and yet, we just barely here that bubble pop on the surface of the pond. Great metaphor for our lives in the space of time.

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  21. Bryan Ens
    Mar 06, 2016 @ 09:02:25

    Those last two lines are brilliant! A short proverb to cap of your poem.

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  22. Shivani
    Mar 07, 2016 @ 13:50:32

    loved the last line “our lives are but bubbles on the surface of a pond”.

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