dVerse OLN 172 – spring stars – haru no hoshi

For dVerse Poets Pub #172. Poets submit one poem of their choice for this. All kinds of poems will be linked by talented poets. Come find your new favorite poet. My poem, a daring (for me) break of Japanese poetic form – a tanka and haiku together. Come join us at: http://dversepoets.com/2016/05/12/open-link-night-171/

haru no hoshi
spring night sky – wet stars
falling silent as dust. lights
dim out one by one
glowing moon breathes – blackberry
blooms are born – earthbound stars.

blackberry blooms in
dark night – dreams of summer wine
entice sleeping birds


copyright kanzensakura

copyright kanzensakura

32 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. therisa
    May 12, 2016 @ 16:46:13

    So love blackberries, one of my favourite berries, to eat wild. Both your tanka and haiku grace these berries. Can wait, until I can start eating them, from local sources, and not distance producers, in Latin America.


  2. Sanaa Rizvi
    May 12, 2016 @ 17:31:46

    Simply breathtaking… ❤ ❤


  3. charliezero1.wordpress.com
    May 12, 2016 @ 18:04:59

    Holy! wow! okay these lines got me:

    glowing moon breathes – blackberry
    blooms are born – earthbound stars.

    Glowing moon breathes? Man, where did that line come from? Genius!

    I picture this poem as visual and so artistic. 🙂 Beautiful my friend. 🙂


  4. Glenn Buttkus
    May 12, 2016 @ 18:09:44

    In my part of the world, blackberries, though tasty, are very thorny & hearty; hard to get rid of them once they encroach on some edge of the yard. For some reason I liked the haiku better, though both were marvelous.


  5. SilverGardenia
    May 12, 2016 @ 18:45:03

    What a beautiful scene you paint!


  6. Charley
    May 12, 2016 @ 20:09:57

    dreams of summer wine
    entice sleeping birds

    Beautifully crafted line to end the picture. Bravo!


  7. Linda Kruschke
    May 12, 2016 @ 20:18:10

    So very peaceful.


  8. Grace
    May 12, 2016 @ 20:47:07

    Earthbound stars, a stunning write Toni ~ Love spring night sky ~


  9. Let's CUT the Crap!
    May 12, 2016 @ 21:13:17

    Wow. Haven’t read you in ages Kanzen. This is brilliant. My heart soars. You had me at, ‘wet stars’ Magnificent. ❤ ❤ ❤
    Worn out, coming back, but in increments. o_O


  10. whimsygizmo
    May 12, 2016 @ 22:17:02

    Delicious. Simply delicious.


  11. Bodhirose
    May 12, 2016 @ 23:27:14

    Love the “earthbound stars”…and your exquisite haiku, Toni.


  12. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    May 13, 2016 @ 02:20:46

    A lovely theme. Blackberries cheer me as Autumn approaches: shelves full of summer in winter.


    • kanzensakura
      May 15, 2016 @ 15:50:54

      Yes indeed. Our blackberries come about mid-July. I can and freeze a mix of the wild and domesticated along with making jelly of them and desserts while they are still fresh. Sassy fruit, they are!


  13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 13, 2016 @ 04:35:11

    I do love this.. and blackberries are one of my favorite berries to eat… Earthbound stars I so love that.


    • kanzensakura
      May 15, 2016 @ 15:49:42

      I have a fixation with earthbound stars. I love blackberries as well. We have quite a few farms that grow domesticated ones – bigger and sweeter. I like to mix the wild and the domesticated ones together to eat or make jelly of or cook with.


  14. petrujviljoen
    May 13, 2016 @ 12:24:02

    loved the repetition of ‘blackberry blooms’ from the tanka to the haiku, tying the two forms together. Thought of music.


  15. PSC
    May 13, 2016 @ 18:52:30

    They DO look like earthbound stars — your beautiful photo proves it. Lovely!


  16. lillian
    May 14, 2016 @ 08:58:15

    Oh Toni…..I can always count on your beautiful words! So gentle, so peaceful, blackberry wine and start that shower us. Just doing my reading today….and think now I must take a break to savor your words and the gentle feeling that always comes within.


  17. Imelda
    May 14, 2016 @ 14:14:57

    Very nice!


  18. Mish
    May 14, 2016 @ 14:19:08

    The alliterations are lovely…and I am now dreaming of blackberry wine…mmm.
    I enjoyed the haiku and tanka together.


  19. Magaly Guerrero
    May 15, 2016 @ 16:31:06

    Soothing and smooth. Good enough to sip at twilight, while dreaming sweet tomorrows. Just delicious.


  20. Nan Mykel
    May 15, 2016 @ 17:02:48

    Wet stars…blackberry blooms …so sensual…


  21. Barry D.
    May 15, 2016 @ 20:49:47

    This poem is so sensual, so vivid that I can smell the fragrances when I close my eyes. Wonderful.


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