dVerse Poetics – Goodbye too soon – harunoshimo

Abhra is the host for todays’s prompt which is saying goodbye too soon or saying goodbye when you didn’t/don’t mean it. Interesting prompt. Last year, I said goodbye to winter too soon and then BAM!!!! Major frost. So here is the tanka I wrote at that time because I said it too soon. Come join us over at dVerse for some what I know will be interesting and different takes on this prompt. Have you ever said goodbye and didn’t mean it?

Tanka for Spring Frost (春の霜 harunoshimo)
warm spring day – cherry
blossoms – clouds of pink and white
under bright blue skies –
in the night frost silently
covers and kills all
winter is not yet gone – too
soon goodbye said to winter

free public domain image frost damage

free public domain image frost damage



32 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 24, 2016 @ 14:22:45

    Oh that devious winter has it’s way to come back and suck up all the bloom again…


  2. MarinaSofia
    May 24, 2016 @ 14:25:16

    It’s been a bit of an up-and-down spring, hasn’t it? We keep getting a few days of really balmy weather and then bam, it rains and snows and the temperature drops by half… This may be a slightly different interpretation of the prompt, but in my case I complain of the lilac passing far too quickly – what with strong rains and winds, it seems I only enjoyed their scent for about two days!


    • kanzensakura
      May 24, 2016 @ 16:26:51

      It has been so rainy here. I can’t get my garden put in which is frustrating. Today it seems early summer is here, but I am not holding my breath. I hope you are well!


  3. Glenn Buttkus
    May 24, 2016 @ 15:04:01

    Here in WA state it was the rhoderdendrians that came & went too quickly. For my wife, it was frustrating to wait until May to plant her tomatoes; fearing a freak frost.


    • kanzensakura
      May 24, 2016 @ 16:09:27

      no fear of frost but too damned much rain. If it stays sunny for a week, I’ll be able to put in my garden. the guy I hire to plow my field area is losing money because of the wet ground. In Auguest, I’ll be doing rain dances.

      Sent from Windows Mail


  4. Misky
    May 24, 2016 @ 15:27:40

    I always have trouble with winter; it messes with my mental equilibrium. So I’m always glad when spring arrives. 🙂


  5. Abhra
    May 24, 2016 @ 15:56:35

    That’s really reach and beautiful – thank you Tony…


  6. The Literary Doc
    May 24, 2016 @ 16:19:46

    It is… I really like the vivid images you provide. I feel like I can see all of this.


  7. Sanaa Rizvi
    May 24, 2016 @ 17:04:51

    Beautiful ❤ and yes winter does tend to sneak back sometimes before its final departure 🙂

    Lots of love,


  8. whimsygizmo
    May 24, 2016 @ 17:56:24

    Isn’t the word “frost” just so sinister, and so delicious? 😉


    • kanzensakura
      May 24, 2016 @ 18:06:27

      And then add in that throat clearing haruno…

      Frosted cakes are happy. Frost killed flowers are not. Frost Frrrroooooodssssssst. Like, pernicious…

      I wonder about a haibun just using words that sound a certain way to make a mood like slither or chuckle.


  9. Arcadia Maria
    May 24, 2016 @ 19:56:30

    Ah yes the seasons have minds of their own.


  10. Waltermarks
    May 24, 2016 @ 22:55:30

    I hate to see Winter go down here. It’s at least cool for a while


  11. thotpurge
    May 25, 2016 @ 02:06:23

    Goodbyes said too early do come back to haunt us as nameless regrets…


  12. lillian
    May 25, 2016 @ 08:10:55

    Oh I understand! I always say spring is fickle. Perhaps I should add that winter can be evil! 🙂


  13. Bryan Ens
    May 25, 2016 @ 08:34:58

    Winter’s departure is often fickle. She is a guest that has overstayed her welcome, but doesn’t get that , and keeps coming back for “one more goodbye”


  14. petrujviljoen
    May 25, 2016 @ 13:42:06

    Enjoyed the write. Winter always does that I think – a last blast to remind us she’ll be back.


  15. freyathewriter
    May 25, 2016 @ 15:34:59

    Ah, that winter does like to give us a bit of a shock sometimes doesn’t it! Lovely poem.


  16. Walt Wojtanik
    May 25, 2016 @ 16:27:41

    In Western New York winter takes its sweet old time and I sometimes wonder if it ever really goes away. Love your tanka, a beautifully expressive form.


    • kanzensakura
      May 25, 2016 @ 22:04:58

      Here in the South, summer has taken its sweet time. We finally had, after 48 straight days of cold weather and daily rain, a sunny day yesterday and today, about 90F. Supposed to be the hottest summer on record here in the US. I am already missing snow.


  17. kaykuala (@hankkaykuala)
    May 25, 2016 @ 18:50:03

    Winter may be abhorrent to some. But winter will be missed for things that one can appreciate or accomplish during winter. Rightly so Toni!



  18. http://vivinfrance.wordpress.com
    May 26, 2016 @ 03:23:50

    I think your tanka strikes a chort with most of the Northern hemisphere readers this year.


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