dVerse Poets Pub: Haibun Monday – Night Sky

Today I am the pubtender over at dVerse Poet’s Pub and it is Haibun Monday!  Today we will be writing about the night sky – watching the stars, meteor showers, making love under the night sky, the creatures of the night under the sky, dreams of the night sky, how it affects us – in other words, the night sky!  We’ve written about the day sky, the moon, and now we are writing about the night sky.  I hope you all will enjoy and will take the time to travel over to dVerse Poets Pub for some most excellent reading.  A haibun is a non-fiction prosimetric form based on the original works of Basho and his travelogue, Road to the Northwest.  It is usually a short paragraph or two ended with a real haiku (not just a 5-7-5 or Americanized sentences).  They can be varied and so very interesting.  The Pub opens today at 3:00 pm EST. https://dversepoets.com/2016/09/05/twinkle-twinkle/

Bathing in a Meteor Shower
It was almost 35 years to the day since I had been in the Mojave Desert gazing up at the night sky watching the Perseid meteor showers. Now here I was lying in my lawn chair looking up at the night sky, gazing and waiting for the showers to come. They were supposed to be at their peak tonight between 1:00 and 4:00 a.m. I had been sitting in the lawn chair for about an hour and my eyes were fully adjusted to the night. Around me the hot summer night hummed and thrummed with the sound of insects and the peeping of tree frogs and the bwaaaaaamp of the the larger frogs. I noticed a delicate clucking sound coming from the large oak tree at the base of our property – the family of owls were awake and ready to start on their nightly hunts for food. A high pitched squeaking let me know the bats were out and about with their nightly insect eating activities. How different from the extreme silence of the Mojave!

I patiently lay there looking up. Distant gray clouds ghosted against the black sky reminding me that the clouds were always out, anytime of day. The sky was clear, black, and full of stars. I saw the first meteor streak towards the line of the horizon. A few moments, another flash. And then – one after the other, meteors were flashing and falling several at once every few seconds. I was excited and sat up straighter so I could better watch the display. After a couple of hours, the display died down. I was amazed that a meteor the size of a grain of sand could create such a display. I was always amazed at how the debris from the Swift-Tuttle Comet could cause such zinging about of light and how this year, 35 years later, it was again a peak showing of the Perseids. In the 35 years since I had last viewed this display, I had loved and lost an incredible Samurai lover, changed my vocation, and gotten married to a man as amazing as the spectacular meteor showers I was once again watching. I smiled in the darkness. Life was good. Life was amazing.

from the vast ocean
of the summer sky – bits of
sand lit the night sky.

free public domain NASA photo Perseid meteor showers

free public domain NASA photo Perseid meteor showers

47 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 14:42:09

    I do love what you did here.. that memory and tying together a life’s journey with that meteor shower… you know I have said that star gazing is so difficult here… and just the possibility to sit up in a lawn chair in this spectacular exhibition… wonderful


  2. petrujviljoen
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 15:07:09

    Lovely topic and haibun. Thanks for hosting again.


  3. Josslyn Rae Turner
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 15:07:47

    Wonderful story, Toni! ❤


  4. Joon
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 15:08:07

    I love that little “bite soft” hiding in your haiku. 🙂

    Also the last line of the ‘ku. It makes me think of those fun swirly-sand games, and the sky being made of that.


  5. Carol J Forrester
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 15:27:20

    Beautiful. Meteor showers here generally involve shivering in numerous layers, Sean seeing everything and me wondering if he’s making it all up.
    I love your haibun though.


  6. ladyleemanila
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 15:54:50

    lovely haibun 🙂 thanks for taking us with you ❤


  7. sarahsouthwest
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 16:20:47

    What a lovely recollection. You write in such beautiful detail. I like the link between ocean and sand in your haiku. I’ve never seen a proper meteor shower – they seem to come at a cloudy time of year – but now I feel I’ve been there with you. Thank you!


  8. Nan Mykel
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 19:44:34

    I’m so happy for others’ enjoyment! The sky and stars and planets and comets–oh my! Thanks for sharing this lovely experience.


  9. Arcadia Maria
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 19:56:39

    Great story. I enjoyed this read. 🙂


  10. thotpurge
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 19:58:50

    The end is great where you’ve tied it in to life experiences… what a beautiful show it must have been.


  11. Grace
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 21:07:54

    Wow, I have not seen one so this is an amazing experience Toni! So many years have passed but indeed life is good. And that haiku is stunning with the sky as the ocean ~


    • kanzensakura
      Sep 05, 2016 @ 21:51:42

      Thank you Grace! Meteor showers are phenomenal to watch. I am a frequent stargazer at any time of the year. I have been in love with thevstars since I was a small child.


  12. Brian
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 21:17:15

    Your words bring the desert sounds and scents to life.


  13. Sherry Marr
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 23:19:35

    Sigh. Life IS amazing! And your story proves it. Loved every word.


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  15. rosemawrites
    Sep 05, 2016 @ 23:36:08

    vivid and deep! it’s as if I am there with you, Toni! ❤


  16. Sumana Roy
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 00:49:35

    the beautiful haibun reminds me of watching another sky display of Leonid Meteor shower with my mother and husband…such was the media hype our whole town was awake…love the end haiku…..


  17. kim881
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 01:34:19

    I not only enjoyed reading your haibun, I also learned a lot from it. I didn’t know the Mojave Desert was silent at night and I’m amazed at all the sounds you could hear from your lawn chair – the most I hear at night is the barking of Muntjak deer and the hoot and shriek of owls – oh yes, and the occasional fox. I agree with Bjorn about the way you tied together events in your life with the meteor shower. And then the haiku ! Thanks for the prompt and this haibun, Toni!


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  19. maria
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 06:50:46

    Ah, how lovely would it be if we all could go back to see the magic you’ve witnessed. Thank you for taking us with you through your words, Toni. I, too, smiled in the darkness. ❤


  20. lillian
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 12:07:37

    Oh Toni. This is so beautiful. You’ve let me sit with you during this special evening. I hear the sounds and feel your expectation waiting for these shooting stars. And then the shift, the explanation of all that has befelled your life in those 35 years. Just beautiful writing. And the haiku….equating the sky with the ocean….lovely indeed.


  21. Victoria C. Slotto
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 14:38:03

    Ah, that image of the stars as bits of sand…somehow that gives me a sense of the immensity of things and our own seeming insignificance. Beautiful.


  22. whimsygizmo
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 17:36:27

    Hey, the Mojave is my neck of the woods. 😉 I love this, Toni. We have tried to catch meteor showers once or twice, but just haven’t gotten far enough from the light “noise” of the city to see much. I was with you, watching this. Gorgeous. And love the journey of time within.


    • kanzensakura
      Sep 07, 2016 @ 11:09:54

      Thank you! I figured the Mojave was part of your wheelhouse. You have to go deep into the desrt and there are always people around you seeking the same thing so they can watch the various showers. I’d done several different showers during my misspent youth.

      Sent from my Samsung Galaxy Tab®|PRO


  23. whimsygizmo
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 17:36:46

    Also sky as ocean = perfection, in my book. ❤


  24. Dr. Crystal Howe
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 20:17:40

    I know those night critters. Not the meteors, but you describe them so well that I can appreciate them. I wonder if they make a sound – they must, outside our hearing, but some vibration or other. Thanks for hosting, and sharing this beautiful haibun!


  25. ladynyo
    Sep 06, 2016 @ 21:16:19

    You had me pinned to the wall. This was haunting, evocative and thrilling reading. The loss of the Samurai lover but then balanced by the husband, as wonderful as the meteor showers! Life is indeed good. And the haiku….perfect ending.



  26. lynn__
    Sep 07, 2016 @ 00:29:52

    Amazing experience to witness meteor shower! I admire your stellar haiku…of ocean and sand 🙂


  27. blissobirds
    Sep 07, 2016 @ 17:14:57

    My husband and I may have watched the same meteor shower. Your description captures that moment as if you had been there as well. I really enjoyed reading the experience through your perspective. Thank you for sharing!


  28. phoartetry
    Sep 07, 2016 @ 18:22:43

    An absolutely wonderful Haibun. The haiku ended the prose quite nicely.


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