dVerse Poetics – Razzle Dazzle

Today Lillian is giving us our prompt – we are to write spiffy sparkly razzle dazzle poetry – using the words razzle and or dazzle or something sparkling. Here is my tanka for the month of October – a month of meteor showers and huge moons. The 8th we have meteor showers (Draconids) from the constellation Draco and later in the month, the Orionids. The meteors appear to be coming straight out of the mouth of the Dragon! An unpredictable meteor shower.  Last year, over 600 meteors fell…per hour.   So let the night sky dazzle you. I’ll be out at sunset watching the meteor showers originating out of the dragon’s mouth. Come and be dazzled at: http://dversepoets.com/2016/10/04/razzle-dazzle-me/


from the mouth of the
dragon stars stream forth – lighting
the night sky – fire plumes
spiral to earth burned to cold
nothingness- a moment’s thrill

public domain photo

public domain photo – Draconids

34 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Marilyn Cavicchia
    Oct 04, 2016 @ 22:03:31

    Interesting! Cosmic yet fleeting razzle dazzle.


  2. andysmerdon
    Oct 04, 2016 @ 22:37:13

    Haihu (Senryu?): nights’ dark veil is pierced, fires burn across the heavens, whose god will claim this.


  3. sarahsouthwest
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 04:39:30

    Somebody was letting off fireworks last night while I was out for a run. This made me think of them. It’s dazzling!


  4. rosemawrites
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 04:57:22

    this is celestial!!! 🙂


  5. Misky
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 06:39:18

    How extraordinary: “burned to cold”


  6. Sanaa Rizvi
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 06:47:29

    Gosh this is incredible!! ❤


  7. kim881
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 09:09:21

    Sparkling dragon stars – with razzle dazzle! Cosmic!


  8. whimsygizmo
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 09:14:56

    Beautiful! The sky has the BEST razzle-dazzle, for sure – in her MANY moods.


  9. mother wintermoon
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 13:03:12

    Sparkling dragon stars! Woot! Beautiful imagery!


  10. Miss Stacy
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 14:13:54

    oh my!
    this is my favorite thing i’ve read today!!
    i am enamored with the sky.


  11. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 14:29:45

    Love the thought of the dragon coming alive… I need to go sky watching.


  12. whippetwisdom
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 15:18:56

    Sparkling and mysterious, love this :o)


  13. Glenn Buttkus
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 16:44:16

    Around here, our big meteor showers are in August.We go up into the Cascade foothills, set up beach chairs & blankets, & sit there for hours; freezing our butts off, but souls soar.


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 05, 2016 @ 16:55:49

      That sounds marvelous. We are far enough away from the light pollution that i often sig out at night watching the meteor showers or the stars. You are farther up on the curve of the globe, although in my salad days, I’d travel to the Mojave desrt to watch the leonids and other showers.

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  14. paulscribbles
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 17:39:11

    Beautifully written. I am close to a dark sky area here in Scotland and often get the chance to sit and gaze when the time is right. Whenever I hear about meteor showers though I immediately think of the movie Dark Star by John Carpenter.


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 05, 2016 @ 18:27:07

      Excellent movie! We are in a rural area away from light pollution from the city. So it is nice to sit out and watch the sky at night.

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  15. georgeplace2013
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 21:29:44

    This made me think of fireworks as well… I love their razzle dazzle


  16. sree
    Oct 05, 2016 @ 23:44:01



  17. Mish
    Oct 06, 2016 @ 01:04:56

    Such a beautiful flow to this, Toni. I am in envy of your night skies. The “piece of moon” as my son called it as a child, is glowing warmly tonight…so I am grateful for that. 🙂


  18. Bryan Ens
    Oct 06, 2016 @ 08:33:45

    Love the slant rhymes in the first part. Also, the brevity of your piece highlights the temporary beauty of a spring star.


  19. Imelda
    Oct 07, 2016 @ 09:33:02

    Shooting stars – so beautiful and so short lived.
    In a few lines, you reminded me again of the shooting stars I saw as a child but failed to make a wish on because they disappeared so quickly.


    • kanzensakura
      Oct 07, 2016 @ 15:07:50

      I still made wishes on them! I’d have a string of wishes already made in my head so I could just spit one out. I’m glad I could remind you of your childhood.


  20. freyathewriter
    Oct 09, 2016 @ 07:44:14

    I’ve never seen a meteor shower – I would love to!


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