dVerse Poets Pub: Quadrille Monday

I am linking this to dVerse Poets Pub, Quadrille Monday.  This is the second Quadrille.  The first one I will not be linking up as planned because….I was not happy with it.  Come join us at the virtual pub, dVerse Poets Pub for quick poems of exactly 44 words using the prompted word. http://dversepoets.com/2017/02/13/quadrille-25/  The concept of chinmoku on the top level means, silence or reticence.  It is more than that – it is a way of communication, of feeling the space or silence between the notes, like the scale played on a piano. One has to be totally immersed in the Japanese culture to truly understand chinmoku.

Chinmoku 沈黙
The silence between the notes
stretches out like long silk scarves
twisting around posts
fluttering in the winds
of now and then
of rain and sun.
like ghosts of long gone laughter
the silence between the words
wrap around your heart and pulls…tight.

20 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. kim881
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 17:30:08

    This is gorgeous, Toni, a delicately tactile Quadrille – I can almost feel the silk scarves fluttering and the words wrapping around my heart.


  2. Sanaa Rizvi (@rizvi_sanaa)
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 17:39:27

    like ghosts of long gone laughter
    the silence between the words
    wrap around your heart and pulls…tight.

    Beautiful lines, Toni ❤️


  3. ghostmmnc
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 18:29:32

    Really beautiful words as they wind around…then that last word ‘tight’, sure does grab you! 🙂


  4. Let's CUT the Crap!
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 18:31:18

    N.i.c.e. I love the last three lines best though I like the complete verse:
    “…like ghosts of long gone laughter
    the silence between the words
    wrap around your heart and pulls…tight.” ❤ ❤ ❤


  5. Grace
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 19:41:18

    I love that silence between words, the tightness in the ending ~ The sounds whisper in deep sadness ~


  6. Olga
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 19:49:38

    To feel the meaning of silence, to hear the unspoken… is to truly live each moment. Lovely chinmoku, Toni. ❤


  7. wolfsrosebud
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 19:58:02

    Beautiful! Never would have thought using the words ghost in this way.


  8. Linda Kruschke
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 20:35:44

    Beautiful! I particularly like: “fluttering in the winds / of now and then”.


  9. Glenn Buttkus
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 20:36:17

    Words wrapped in real & imaginary sense images are mantles for muses, and fuel for poetics. Add to that a vagabond poet with a camera, and words are expanded, exploded, morphed into new art.


  10. Victoria C. Slotto
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 20:59:04

    Oh, I so get it. In art there is the concept of negative space, in spirituality…need I say more. I love the image of the long silk scarfs.


  11. Dr. Crystal Howe
    Feb 13, 2017 @ 21:06:06

    Well done, Toni! I’m not too familiar with Japanese culture, but as a musician who meditates, I know and appreciate the silence between the notes. ❤


  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Feb 14, 2017 @ 00:29:24

    Oh love the way the silence in between mean so much more than words. The way you painted them as silk scarves is exquisite just like a scarf can both bring warmth and choke you.


  13. frankhubeny
    Feb 14, 2017 @ 08:23:09

    I liked the idea of silence wrapping tightly around the heart.


  14. Jane Dougherty
    Feb 14, 2017 @ 09:08:55

    Giving silence a form is a wonderful idea and you’ve chosen a beautiful image.


  15. karfunkelfee
    Feb 15, 2017 @ 05:47:21

    there would be nothing left for me to say about..
    only to wrap your beautiful silent picture
    between words
    like silky strips of a soft ghosty lightgrey
    fluttering in the wind

    Many greetings from Germany of the Karfunkel fairy


  16. Bryan Ens
    Feb 15, 2017 @ 07:46:53

    I may not be immersed in the Japanese culture, but I do understand music. ..and sometimes a period of silence can speak as strongly as a flurry of notes. Beautiful write!


  17. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Feb 16, 2017 @ 08:05:02

    A beautiful concept beautifully described.


  18. Imelda
    Feb 20, 2017 @ 19:40:01

    What beautiful imagery! 🙂


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