Quadrille Monday #32

At dVerse Poets Pub, De is hosting our quadrille. A quadrille is a poem of 44 words exactly, not including the title and usually includes a prompt word. Today the word is “echo”. this is my last post for awhile as my mother is not doing well and I am taking a hiatus away from dVerse Poets Pub. Blessings on all of you. I will be seeing you all again next month. http://dversepoets.com/2017/05/08/quadrille-32/

Room 214
the elderly woman sits in her wheelchair
looking out the window at the birds
on the birdfeeder.
her mind is filled with echoes and shadows
of years, times, and people past.
her daughter brushes her hair.
voices echo from other rooms.
she drifts asleep.

18 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. whimsygizmo
    May 08, 2017 @ 18:48:57

    Ohhhhh. SO beautiful, Toni. Sending many prayers.


  2. frankhubeny
    May 08, 2017 @ 19:09:40

    Best wishes to you and your mother, Toni. Nice description of you combing her hair while her mind is filled with echos and shadows of the past.


  3. Walter J. Wojtanik
    May 08, 2017 @ 19:17:36

    Heart wrenching and gripping, Toni! I’ve seen this scene too many times and you have captured the very essence of that echo! Spectacular!


  4. merrildsmith
    May 08, 2017 @ 19:48:54

    So poignant, and so much captured in these few words. I’m sorry to hear about your mother. My thoughts are with you.


  5. Victoria C. Slotto
    May 08, 2017 @ 20:18:57

    Tears. How many times I’ve seen this scene replayed. God bless you and Mama and all the mothers who are there in such situations.


  6. Tim Philippart
    May 08, 2017 @ 20:43:11

    Well captured


  7. Singledust
    May 08, 2017 @ 20:56:47

    tenderness in the lines Toni, so much tenderness!


  8. Arcadia Maria
    May 08, 2017 @ 21:04:36

    I agree with Singledust. there is tenderness in these lines. A lovely quadrille.


  9. Sanaa Rizvi (@rizvi_sanaa)
    May 08, 2017 @ 21:58:48

    Beautifully tender and deep❤️


  10. purplepeninportland
    May 08, 2017 @ 23:47:21

    I have been through this sadness. Beautiful writing, Toni.


  11. sarahrussellpoetry
    May 09, 2017 @ 00:19:35

    Just lovely. We’ll welcome you back.


  12. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 09, 2017 @ 00:35:02

    And hopefully she knows how blessed she is to feel the presence of her daughter…. so sad when only echoes are alive


  13. Waltermarks
    May 09, 2017 @ 11:51:39

    I am sorry your mom is ill. Her thought echoing from the past are a beautiful reminder. That she has you and them is a saving grace at that moment.


  14. whippetwisdom
    May 09, 2017 @ 11:55:14

    You brushing her hair is such a sensory echo from when she was a little girl and her mother brushed her hair – sending love to you both Toni xxx


  15. ghostmmnc
    May 09, 2017 @ 12:00:13

    Yes, echoes and shadows, and the whispers of time passing, sometimes are loud in our hearts. You have captured the feelings. ❤


  16. Jane Dougherty
    May 09, 2017 @ 15:07:15

    Brushing the hair. One of the last things we can do. So tender.


  17. Grace
    May 09, 2017 @ 18:36:37

    Love how the echoes are different for the old woman, and the daughter ~ A tender gesture, but speaks volume ~


  18. Raivenne
    May 09, 2017 @ 20:28:40

    Tender capture of a moment. Echoes of time passing in circles.

    Prayers for your mother and you, Toni.


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