The Moon at 5 a.m.

At Real Toads we are giving the prompt to use a line from one of our poems – “Out of your own words” and provide a link to the poem. The first line is from a haiku I wrote several years ago
here is the link for Real Toads:  I am also linking this to Poets United, Poetry Pantry:

The Moon at 5 a.m.
summer half moon drifts in a sea of blue –
the moon sits close to the horizon
getting ready to go to sleep.
the coming of day –
the smell of a new morning
just stirring and getting ready to rise.
the moon at 5 a.m. is a mysterious thing.
summer is winding down –
the moon Is a mystery –
at 5 a.m. the world is still asleep.
I sit on my back steps and watch
the world awakening.
the moon at 7 a.m. is a baroque pearl
Misshapen and beautiful.
but I love the mystery of the moon at 5 a.m.
in the cool of grey dusk
when it is just a floating sliver of silver
in the cobalt sky.
the moon is a mysterious thing at 5 a.m.

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copyright kanzensakura

41 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. alisonhankinson
    Aug 12, 2017 @ 16:28:00

    I love that the moon is a baroque pearl….and the cobalt sky. Beautiful words and images.


  2. Sanaa Rizvi (@rizvi_sanaa)
    Aug 12, 2017 @ 16:38:25

    Such gorgeous imagery in this one, Toni!❤️ Especially love; “the smell of a new morning just stirring and getting ready to rise. the moon at 5 a.m. is a mysterious thing” .. sigh.. Beautifully executed!!❤️


  3. Magaly Guerrero
    Aug 12, 2017 @ 17:53:26

    This poem is a beauty on its own. After reading the haiku that inspired it, the poem becomes a miracle of dawn. The moon in a sea of blue is a fantastic image, a soothing one… The feelings shared after the image is placed in our minds is just lovely.


  4. Jim
    Aug 12, 2017 @ 17:58:01

    Some people like things the way they were earlier. I am one of those persons in the main. Very pretty writing.


  5. Jae Rose
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 03:21:37

    A magical time – sometimes it feels the world is our own in the early hours..


  6. kim881
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 04:18:08

    From one early riser to another, I love that summer half moo and the way you’ve captured that 5 a.m. feeling, especially in the lines:.
    ‘the smell of a new morning
    just stirring and getting ready to rise’
    ‘in the cool of grey dusk
    when it is just a floating sliver of silver
    in the cobalt sky’..


  7. Mama Zen
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 10:59:57



  8. Kerry
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 11:13:39

    I noticed that same misshapen moon at 7 am on Thursday morning – a day moon is a wondrous thing.


  9. georgeplace2013
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 15:11:28

    I love your observations of the moon at different times. Peaceful and sweet


  10. sarahrussellpoetry
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 17:01:54

    I love the moon as a baroque pearl. Perfect!


  11. Sherry Blue Sky
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 17:08:54

    This is so so beautiful! I especially love that “baroque pearl” and the lovely feeling of early morning, watching the world wake up.


  12. coalblack
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 18:14:49

    it really is. I take my dog for a dawn walk every morning, and we love that time of day when everything is fresh and still. I love the image of the speaker sitting on her steps and watching the moon.

    –coal (Fireblossom)


    • kanzensakura
      Aug 13, 2017 @ 18:33:04

      Thank you. I miss walking my dog. The morning at 5 am, even in the winter when it is coal black (!) outside. I often sit on my steps even in the rain or the snow.


  13. Candy
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 18:18:01

    the moon as a barouque pearl is such a beautiful image


  14. Donna@LivingFromHappiness
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 19:56:10

    Absolutely adore this…I have sat on my steps watching that same moon at 5 am and marveled at it.


  15. purplepeninportland
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 20:17:30

    It is a magical time, when you feel like you are the only one to witness something so spectacular. The image of a ‘baroque pearl’ is exquisite.


  16. Beverly Crawford
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 20:35:15

    The world at 5 a.m. has a magic all its own. Thank you for taking us there!


  17. thotpurge
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 21:07:55

    That 5am line is captivating…


  18. Mary
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 21:20:38

    Ah, I love the early morning as well. All seems possible at 5 a.m.; and it is wonderful to be able to greet a new day….seeing the moon retreat and the sun on the horizon. Beautiful poem!


  19. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Aug 13, 2017 @ 22:42:34

    A beautiful extension of your original haiku.


  20. Sumana Roy
    Aug 14, 2017 @ 02:14:35

    “when it is just a floating sliver of silver / in the cobalt sky.”…So gorgeous. 5 a.m. moon with a tinge of dawn touch appears mysterious indeed.


  21. Suyash
    Aug 14, 2017 @ 05:00:33

    Fantastic write!


  22. ayala zarfjian (@ayalazarfjian)
    Aug 14, 2017 @ 06:42:33

    Beautiful poem!


  23. Victoria C. Slotto
    Aug 14, 2017 @ 20:02:04

    The mysterious/mystical atmosphere that the moon offers us must be, in part, the reason behind her feminine attributes. Good use of repetition in this.


  24. Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)
    Aug 16, 2017 @ 13:52:07

    “the moon at 7 a.m. is a baroque pearl Misshapen and beautiful” What a beautiful description of the moon. I too love to watch the moon disappear into morning.


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