Quadrille Monday: Free

I have written a haibun for dVerse Poets Pub Monday’s  quadrille. A quadrille is a poem of exactly 44 words (excluding the title) which uses the prompted word. In this case the word is “free”.  Come and join in the fun.

Everywhere Blue – (for De)
Oh! To be a cloud in the sky floating lazily or waves in a cerulean lake washing upon the shore . High mountains topped with snow standing guard and smiling.

clouds in autumn blue
sky drifting free – waves below
laughing like children

Lake Tahoe – public domain photo.

56 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. qbit
    Sep 10, 2017 @ 19:39:01

    I love the Haiku. Your pivot in the last line is perfect.

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  2. Sangbad
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 01:03:44

    I tried but never got in grasp this quadrille…yours is captivating describing the autumn beautifully

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 11, 2017 @ 14:40:18

      Hi. the quadrille poetic form only has two rules: the poem must consist of exactly 44 words and it must contain the word prompted for that quadrille segment. It was created by the staff members of dVerse several years ago when we were trying to come up with something to make our site unique. the poem can be in any form, it can be on any subject, it can rhyme or not, it can have rhythm or not. I chose to write a haibun because that is one of the most difficult forms to get into 44 words. Please visit our post today to ask questions of other staff members. They will be happy to answer any questions you may have. Also, before writing your poem, you can click on the links of quadrilles already submitted to read what other poets have written. the pub opens at pm EST

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    • whimsygizmo
      Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:09:51

      Sangbad, just give it a try! We’d love to have you!

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  3. paul scribbles
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:11:32

    Lovely…I think you might have room for a couple more words though 😉

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  4. sarahsouthwest
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:13:12

    You conjure such beautiful blues. The sky, the sea, the essence of freedom. I think there may be a tiny typo in your haiku, but it’s gorgeous.

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:28:09

    I really love this one… and the last line the most… waves laughing like children.

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  6. lillian
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:35:34

    Toni, you are amazing! A quadrille haibun — and beautifully done. One doesn’t usually think of the color blue in the autumn….but it appears so naturally here. 🙂 And of course, in Provincetown as I sit looking at the ocean meeting the sky, knowing we come here every September, of course the color blue fits well into our autumn too!

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:38:24

      aki no sora – Japanese for autumn sky. The autumn sky is such a deep and distinct blue. I love the autumn sky so very much. Oh to be on the coast and sit looking at it.

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  7. Laura Bloomsbury
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:37:41

    two sounds of one hand clapping are hidden in your blue quadrille – no wonder the waves are laughing. Delightful!

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  8. whippetwisdom
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:40:22

    A beautiful haibun quadrille Toni! I love all the shades of blue, the smiling mountains and waves laughing like children – Eivor and Pearl would love this kind of place :o) xxx

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  9. annell4
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:43:31

    I hope one day I will have the courage to try a hiabun for a quadrilla one day. Great job! Even if it is only “42.”

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 11, 2017 @ 15:45:40

      LOL. We are (normally) not word counters here at dVerse and only hold tight to the 44 when they go over of course. It takes a lot of trimming down to get it. I’m surprised I have the patience!

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  10. dianadevlinblog
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 16:20:52

    Oh, another beauty! I love the waves laughing like children!

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  11. Frank Hubeny
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 16:28:01

    I liked the waves laughing like children and the mountains standing guard and smiling.

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  12. kim881
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 16:41:36

    A gorgeous title, Toni, and what a wonderful haiku!

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  13. Vivian Zems
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 17:54:54

    This haibun was elegant. Loved the flow of words 🙂

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  14. nosaintaugustine
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 18:55:29

    Very nice haibun! I liked the unexpected pairing of “autumn blue”

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  15. Dr. Crystal Howe
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 20:26:46

    This is truly beautiful, in its imagery and as both a haibun and a quadrille. Well done!

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  16. maria
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 20:53:20

    Love this haibun, Toni. There’s gentleness and calm in this piece that soothes the hearts of us readers. Ah, the beauty of nature. ❤️

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  17. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 21:03:59

    thinking of waves and water (hurricanes) – how quickly the sound of children’s laughter can change to something very sinister!

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  18. Arcadia Maria
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 21:33:20

    Lovely

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  19. Candy
    Sep 11, 2017 @ 22:23:27

    this is a beauty!

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  20. Walter J. Wojtanik
    Sep 12, 2017 @ 07:36:54

    Only you as only you can, Toni! A haibun quadrille? Great economy of words and forms. Always impressive!

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  21. Francina
    Sep 12, 2017 @ 13:30:03

    Very lovely!

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  22. MarinaSofia
    Sep 13, 2017 @ 17:38:57

    Ah, very dreamy! This one refreshed me like a glacier lake.

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  23. Imelda
    Sep 14, 2017 @ 12:29:26

    lovely tribute to clouds. 🙂

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