dVerse Poetics: The Smell of Chrysanthemums

Today Kim is prompting for dVerse Poetics: Autumn. I never get enough of autumn. Come join us and read. https://dversepoets.com/2017/10/17/poetics-the-smell-of-chrysanthemums/ This is also posted for Real Toads: http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/2017/10/the-tuesday-platform_17.html

Silence of autumn
I sit on my back porch steps –
Autumn is silent this year –
insects are quiet at night –
The moon is a thin s(l)hiver
in the black sky.
I smell autumn coming –
I see autumn coming –
but this year
autumn is silent.
Golden leaves among the green
drop to the ground – dead
from a dry spring and summer.
Autumn is silent this year.
The first frost is not yet singing –
It waits in the clouds
for a cold dark night.
Autumn is silent.
Too many losses –
Too many tears.
The moon is a thin s(h)liver
in the black sky.
Autumn is silent this year.
My mother loved chrysanthemums.

30 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. kim881
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 10:52:42

    Wow, Toni, your atmospheric poem and the view from my window were made for each other, except for the moon, which hasn’t appeared yet. I can definitely smell
    autumn and there are already leaves in the grass. My favourite lines have to be:
    ‘The first frost is not yet singing –
    It waits in the clouds
    for a cold dark night’.

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  2. annell4
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 10:59:05

    I am touched by your poem, you brought tears to my eyes, I have so much loss in my life associated with autumn. My Mother also loved chrysanthemums, my Father, roses. I do not know what flower my Husband or my Son, loved? I wish I knew…but there is no one to ask. It is in that silence after when you realize there are so many questions you would like to ask.

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  3. whippetwisdom
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 11:47:21

    A beautiful poem Toni and I can feel the sadness of this first autumn without your mother. ‘The first frost is not yet singing – It waits in the clouds for a cold dark night’ is my favourite line too xxx

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  4. Jane Dougherty
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 12:41:23

    Think of her in the chrysanthemums.

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 15:15:17

    I love it so much how you summed up the silence and sorrow in that last line.. the repetition worked so well

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  6. Magaly Guerrero
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 16:08:28

    The repetition works like a charm, enthralling us to feel what the speak feels… And your last line comes a the falling of the last leaf–shocking and heartbreaking.

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  7. welshstream
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 16:10:54

    Nicely done. Love the contrast between a silent autumn and the frost waiting to start its song.

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  8. ladynyo
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 17:07:39

    Oh, a lovely and mournful poem. Graciously elegant.

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  9. Cara Hartley
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 19:38:28

    This is wonderful, a beautiful tribute poem.
    My father died on November 28, 2017. He always loved the holidays. His death was a mercy. He’d been through a long period of decline. There weren’t a lot of tears on my part. I knew it was coming and I was numb. Still, that year I felt that the holiday lights were painfully beautiful. Seeing the lights and decorations will never again hold the same feeling of hope and wonder for me.

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    • kanzensakura
      Oct 17, 2017 @ 19:41:30

      Thank you. I am so sorry for your loss. My mother died a long, slow, painful death. She died this past june. I have shed many tears because I miss her so much.

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  10. Grace
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 19:50:40

    Autumn is silent yet we can all feel its approaching footsteps and see all its colors in due time ~ The ending line just sums up the poignancy of the season with: My mother loved chrysanthemums.

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  11. thotpurge
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 20:03:38

    That last line is crushing in it poignancy… the silence, the smell…the remembrance…

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  12. Frank Hubeny
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 20:35:10

    Beautiful remembrance of your mother in the silence of autumn.

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  13. Sherry Marr
    Oct 17, 2017 @ 23:40:23

    Too many losses and too many tears….that is for certain. I love the last line which sets the reader off on yet another flight of poignant remembering.

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  14. Sanaa Rizvi (@rizvi_sanaa)
    Oct 18, 2017 @ 03:36:16

    I am so sorry for your loss Toni 😦 this is a beautiful and poignant write.

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  15. coalblack
    Oct 18, 2017 @ 08:42:42

    I love chrysanthemums too.

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  16. kaykuala (@hankkaykuala)
    Oct 19, 2017 @ 10:31:26

    from a dry spring and summer.
    Autumn is silent this year.

    The impact of an adverse spring and summer months are telling!

    Hank

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  17. revivedwriter
    Oct 19, 2017 @ 12:29:59

    Masterfully written! I love it.

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  18. alisonhankinson
    Oct 19, 2017 @ 15:47:37

    This is beautiful and very sad. I am sorry for the silence. Much love to you. XX

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  19. Just Barry
    Oct 22, 2017 @ 04:43:13

    This is so beautiful and painfully silent. I felt the ominous chill.

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