Frozen Stars: a tanka

Today for Tuesday’s Platform at Real Toads: A tanka.  Tanka are not titled.

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December night sky –
snow like frozen stars silent
as dust falls to earth –
no wishes on these lost stars –
summer photo fades with time

 

 

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13 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Victoria C. Slotto
    Dec 19, 2017 @ 15:36:18

    Stellar! The last line does just what it is supposed to do.

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  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Dec 19, 2017 @ 16:29:54

    Indeed that last line gives a meaning to the imagery… love it.

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  3. sanaarizvi
    Dec 19, 2017 @ 17:51:03

    Beautifully evocative write, Toni!❤️

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  4. mhmp77
    Dec 19, 2017 @ 19:28:41

    kaykuala

    no wishes on these lost stars –
    summer photo fades with time

    The stars might not be an encouraging factor for support. They are of divergent properties that make them different and difficult to read!

    Hank

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  5. Magaly Guerrero
    Dec 19, 2017 @ 20:01:47

    Time changes (and often takes away) so many things.

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  6. thotpurge
    Dec 19, 2017 @ 20:48:06

    Nice ending with that poignant line!

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  7. Cressida
    Dec 20, 2017 @ 09:10:27

    Everything fades with time. Tis the season to be merry….Enjoy your Christmas !

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    • kanzensakura
      Dec 20, 2017 @ 12:42:18

      I wrote this last year when my mother was dying. Now my husband is not well so it is hard to be merry. But I am ever hopeful. Merry Christmas and New Year’s blessings to you.

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  8. Trådløs
    Dec 20, 2017 @ 10:17:19

    Snow like frozen stars is my favourite line here. You did a wonderful job capturing the atmosphere – the sadness of fading and change

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  9. purplepeninportland
    Dec 21, 2017 @ 20:35:58

    I love, “snow like frozen stars”.

    Reply

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