dVerse: Snow Fell

for dVerse Poets Pub

Snow Fell
snow fell –
covered the ground in dry white drifts.
snow fell
next morning footprints in the snow.
snow fell –
snow fell

……snow…fell…………………….

snow

fell…

…snow…

                                …

 

copyright kanzen sakura

41 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. kim881
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:21:14

    That’s a modefrn, experimental poem for you, Toni. I like it!

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  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:21:51

    Actually snow is one of the most silent matters I know…. I have slept in snow, and I have never experienced a deeper silence than deep inside snow.

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    • kanzensakura
      Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:26:08

      Yes. Sleeping in snow is the epitome of silence to me. I once slept in a snow/ice house while it was snowing outside. Wow.

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  3. Blue Ivy
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:22:18

    Yay. A little Emily D. dashery. I find it most effective.

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  4. Blue Ivy
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:23:40

    This is really exquisite. I need to hear you read it.

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  5. Jane Dougherty
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:37:06

    And all is silence.

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  6. erbiage
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:52:38

    i too would like to hear you read it Toni. and to sleep in snow, my my!

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    • kanzensakura
      Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:56:45

      Not gonna happen! I used to backpack and camp in the Wilderness region of the NC mountains years and years ago. I also slept in slow there as well. Lovely by the fire at night.

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  7. Frank J. Tassone
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:56:35

    Love how your ellipses and spacing emulate the silence of snowfall so brilliantly! Great write, Toni!

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  8. jillys2016
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 15:58:49

    Wonderful visual! Very effective.

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  9. little learner
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 16:22:50

    Your poem is beautiful in its simplicity.

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  10. Frank Hubeny
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 18:36:03

    Rhythmic snow falling reminds me of silence.

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  11. Vivian Zems
    Jan 04, 2018 @ 19:36:39

    You picked the right seasonal element that denotes silence. And I filled the silence with my own words. By the way, reading previous comments…southern drawl??? (Why have I always imagined you as a little Japanese woman in a kimono !!??)

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    • kanzensakura
      Jan 04, 2018 @ 20:42:25

      Because of my screen and blog name and my immersion into the Japanese culture. Year’s ago I had a Japanese lover for over 13 years. I have always loved Japan, it’s culture, people,…everything. so! I am American and raised in the deep South. That is it probably. I also live by the Japanese code of honor and I use a katana for martial arts and also, to protect myself and loved ones, if necessary. I wear kimono but prefer shorts in the summer because they are cooler. ??

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  12. annell4
    Jan 05, 2018 @ 11:06:32

    I love snow, it transforms everything. Brings about that beautiful “winter white.”

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    • kanzensakura
      Jan 05, 2018 @ 11:14:33

      Yes ma’am but this snow also broughtbrecird lows… temp hasn’t been above 16F since New Year’s Eve….brrrrr

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  13. alisonhankinson
    Jan 05, 2018 @ 15:41:11

    Who/what did the prints belong to?

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    • kanzensakura
      Jan 05, 2018 @ 16:20:12

      The prints belong to one of several feral cats who prowl the neighborhood. I’ve tried to trace the tracks to where they live but they apparently have several places where they live.

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  14. Laura Bloomsbury
    Jan 05, 2018 @ 15:57:57

    visually and spatially silent – the zen of snow – lovely

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  15. Bryan Ens
    Jan 05, 2018 @ 15:58:56

    the way this is written, it reminds me of those snowfalls with the giant flakes that seem in no hurry to reach the ground

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  16. Victoria C. Slotto
    Jan 05, 2018 @ 20:53:55

    I like to see you reaching out and trying something new. Though this still has a Zen-like feel to it, the form and repetition changes it up a bit. Peaceful. (It was 80 here today. Ahhh.)

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  17. sreeja Harikrishnan
    Jan 06, 2018 @ 01:23:01

    Can’t imagine a better way to experience and express silence…even if I am not familiar with so much snow-experience….!

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  18. memadtwo
    Jan 06, 2018 @ 06:18:46

    It did. And it has its own rhythm. (K)

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  19. jazzytower
    Jan 06, 2018 @ 21:00:41

    I find this very peaceful. I like to sit and watch the snow fall. It always feel like new beginnings to me. Nicely done😊.

    Pat

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