Weight of Crows

or Angies prompt at Real Toads. We are to choose a list and write a poem from the words.
solace trace pause over
inwardness sweat reflect beginning
need forgiveness unfolding back
thanks weight years ahead

Weight of Crows
Today is the umpteenth anniversary
of your decision to return to Japan.
My words are like a weight around my neck,
a murder of crows hanging upside down
their feet tied with pink ribbons.
A trace of sweat sneaks down my face
And dribbles down onto my keyboard.
I look for forgiveness from you.
I truly loved you but now I must
let you go.
I should have done this years ago
but the love hangs around my neck
Like a murder of crows.

public domain photo

13 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Sherry Blue sky
    Jan 26, 2018 @ 19:10:33

    I really feel the weight of that love around one’s neck, having to let the beloved go. Sigh. Beautiful, Toni.


  2. angie reinspired
    Jan 26, 2018 @ 22:48:53

    oh. why is it so hard to say goodbye? what is it in us that makes it feel like a murder? in the heaviness, i focused on the pink ribbons you slipped into the middle. i needed that. thanks for linking up Toni


  3. lifeinkarolingston
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 01:29:13



  4. paul scribbles
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 05:41:17

    Ouch. I feel the weight in this. So tough to do. So tough. I wish you lightness of being.


  5. merrildsmith
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 06:24:20

    Such weight dragging upon you, but a bittersweet relief to finally let it go, I imagine.


  6. coalblack
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 09:04:55

    The details only make the loss more immediate to the reader.


  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 11:55:13

    It’s so hard to part… after all there is just an ocean separating.. the image of the crows really adds to this


  8. Victoria C. Slotto
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 19:39:29

    Crows and loss go hand in hand, it seems, in the world of so many cultures. The power is in the letting go.


  9. Sanaa Rizvi
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 10:36:29

    I can feel the emotions in this. It’s difficult letting go of someone whom we loved so dearly.


  10. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 22:29:43

    A murder of crows is usually quite raucous and loud. Me thinks there was a LOT of reluctance to let go and a bit of complaining 🙂


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