a gogyoshi for Open Link Night at dVerse. A gogyoshi has five lines like a cinquain or tanka. However – that is the only “rule” for this Japanese poetic form. No syllable count, no rhyme or rhythm required. Exactly five lines, any style.

cedars in the meadow
lined up in a row –
all is silent in the snow
except for the lonely call
of a crow.

Cedar – Ansel Adams 1956

33 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Frank J. Tassone
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 15:05:08

    Beautifully done, Toni! 🙂


  2. sanaarizvi
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 15:19:58

    I believe the Crow symbolizes a new phase in one’s life… Beautifully penned, Toni 💖


  3. Frank Hubeny
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 15:25:23

    I like the lack of constraints except for five lines in the gogyoshi also the calm feeling I get from reading your description of the cedars and the crow.


  4. annell4
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 15:28:19

    Perfect!!! At least for me!


  5. Carol J Forrester
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 15:28:34

    Very solemn, made me shiver slightly.


  6. Vivian Zems
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 15:35:28

    Kind of haunting! I’m always greedy for new forms. I like this one and the way you painted the scene.


  7. Linda Kruschke
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 16:10:53



  8. kim881
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 16:16:46

    Another new and interesting form, Toni! I’d not come across the gogyoshi before.
    I love the ‘oh’ sounds in this and, of course, the cedars and the crow.


  9. charliezero1.wordpress.com
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 16:34:38

    Amazing and perfectly well written. 🙂


  10. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 16:35:40

    Love the sense of presence… that call of the crow fills the silence perfectly.


  11. alisonhankinson
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 16:48:04

    What a fabulous tree. XXXXXX and I like the form. XX


  12. Grace
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 17:32:48

    Love the simplicity and beauty of this Toni!


  13. merrildsmith
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 17:47:06

    Lovely poetic image–and interesting 5 lines and no other rules.


  14. Beverly Crawford
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 18:16:30

    So beautifully descriptive!


  15. mhmp77
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 19:01:00


    all is silent in the snow
    except for the lonely call
    of a crow.

    The lingering cold is an appropriate send-off to meet the impending spring morning



  16. Candy
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 22:16:32

    I love the crows in winter. This is enchanting! A new form for me.


  17. rothpoetry
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 22:59:55

    Reminds me of children in the school hall ….all lined up and silent! Beautiful photo and word photo as well.


  18. ladynyo
    Feb 23, 2018 @ 05:47:21

    Lovely, Toni. You bring us another lovely Japanese form. Delightful!


  19. Pursewarden
    Feb 23, 2018 @ 15:41:16

    Your poem is so like a photo, the Ansel Adams picture was redundant.


  20. Sascha Darlington
    Feb 23, 2018 @ 16:06:55

    This is beautiful. Crows tend to be familial-type birds so this has an echo of sadness.


  21. MarinaSofia
    Feb 24, 2018 @ 06:46:52

    Ah, reading your poems is always like stepping into the pages of one of the classical Japanese novels. I can imagine you being a lady or a samurai at court or perhaps a monk penning your morning observations with beautiful calligraphy.


    • kanzensakura
      Feb 24, 2018 @ 10:41:20

      Wow. Thank you! More likely a samurai or a monk. This is such a lovely comment. I do get onto a meditative state when I pen my haiku. Bless you.

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  22. Victoria C. Slotto
    Feb 24, 2018 @ 19:52:52

    I love the simplicity of this form–and so much contained within.


    • kanzensakura
      Feb 25, 2018 @ 14:02:00

      It is a great form! Five lines, that is it. lots of freedom unlike a lot of other sticky picky forms. And it causes brevity, which I like but sometimes, I have to write about dead raccoons.


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