Haibun: Snow like fire

Today is Quadrille Monday at dVerse. A quadrille is a poem in any form with exactly 44 words (excluding the title) and using the prompted word. Dee (Whimzy Gizmo) is the pubtender at dVerse Poets Pub. She has given us the world “fire” to use in the quadrille. I am actually doing non-traditional in the ending haiku with not keeping to the 5-7-5 syllable count.  I am publishing on dVerse Poets Pub

Snow like Fire
It started out as rain but quickly turned into heavy snow. Daffodils show like flames against the white. My flowering quince smolders like a slow fire in the falling snow.

snow falls like freezing fire–
flowers show against white –
burns slowly in the cold

copyright kanzensakura



27 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. whimsygizmo
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 18:27:19

    Snow fire, slow fire. Wonderful.


  2. BeckiesMentalMess.wordpress.com
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 18:37:37

    I love this. Although, really sick of the white crap already. Looking forward to writing about Spring. LOL! 🙂


  3. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 20:01:14

    quince smoldering – those sweet pink blooms covered in snow! – it is beautiful …


  4. rothpoetry
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 21:22:34

    Love the freezing fire along with the flowers pushing through the snow!


  5. Frank Hubeny
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 21:36:34

    That’s a beautiful photo. The hope the trees are OK. It should warm up soon.


    • kanzensakura
      Mar 12, 2018 @ 21:59:46

      Thank you Frank. The trees are fine and the quince is beyond hardy. It came from England many ancestors ago and through cuttings, have birthed hundreds of itself. ??


  6. Sherry Blue sky
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 00:02:05

    I love “snow falls like freezing fire.” Wonderful.


  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 01:25:38

    What hardy little flowers. Maybe it’s the fire in them making them so hardy


  8. sarahsouthwest
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 02:36:58

    Delightful. Life burns on as candles and as fire. Lovely contrasts here.


  9. sanaarizvi
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 03:48:34

    This is stunning!💖 I love “snow falls like freezing fire.” 


  10. kim881
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 04:07:45

    I love the flower fire of daffodils and quince, Toni. I have both in my garden but no flowers as yet. Apparently we’re expecting more snow to fall like freezing fire at the weekend.


  11. merrildsmith
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 08:04:39

    Snow falling like fire and burning cold–I love it. Hope the flowers are OK. This is a crazy winter/spring!


    • kanzensakura
      Mar 13, 2018 @ 13:19:36

      Down this way, it is actually pretty typical! Sometimes we have a warm early spring but mostly it is this snow one day, 65 degrees the next kind of affair. I’d prefer the early warm spring myself.


  12. annell4
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 10:42:33

    Yes! The strong heart of the quince, he who comes first. Love this.


  13. Vivian Zems
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 11:12:50

    ….quince smolders like a slow fire… I like this. You made me think of snow-fire- burning (a great connection)


  14. Gospel Isosceles
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 18:25:47

    “burns slowly in the cold”
    The flora teaching us much about too lofty expectations.


  15. qbit
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 21:31:05

    Beautiful! I love the photo and the writing of the smoldering quince!


  16. rosemawrites
    Mar 13, 2018 @ 22:43:37

    snow falls like freezing fire — geeeez. this phrase is too beautiful! so as the entire poem and that photo!


  17. Mish
    Mar 14, 2018 @ 00:09:43

    A perspective I needed after driving home in similar weather today. I especially love…
    ” Daffodils show like flames against the white.” I am always intrigued by winter’s insistence on interrupting spring.


  18. Sumana Roy
    Mar 15, 2018 @ 02:52:29

    This one’s a beauty Toni.


  19. Robert
    Mar 15, 2018 @ 10:45:04

    love the imagery in the words…it picked me up out of the winter doldrums…


  20. Victoria C. Slotto
    Mar 15, 2018 @ 20:56:59

    The image of a smoldering quince tells the whole story. Evocative write, Toni.


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