The Moon in the Water

For Marian’s prompt at Real Toads today – “and you and I” is the prompt.

The Moon in the Water
A hot august night –
We’re sitting on the rocks by the creek.
here in this spot the creek has wandered
and just before plunging over the branches
And rocks and such
the water has pooled into a small pond
about eight feet wide and two feet deep.
Pebbles and rocks and sand
form our own private beach.
Except for the night visitors –
We are alone.
We are silent and so still a raccoon
comes up and drinks and then starts
and waddles away when he sees us.
We quietly laugh and agree
“He’ll be back” said ala Ahhhnold.
The moon flutters on the surface
of the pool – pure white on pure black.
I put my feet into the water and the moon
ripples even more, as it were laughing.
You put your arm around my shoulder
and I reach into my small shoulder bag
and give us another spray of insect repellant.
The cicadas whir and click,
an owl hoots.
A soft flutter of wings as it drifts overhead
and a soft rustling as it lands on a branch.
You and me and the moon in the night sky
and the moon in the water
and the owl in tree
and the night creatures –
Oh yes, and the neighbor’s dog
that followed us down the hill.

stock photo

12 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Mar 22, 2018 @ 23:18:32

    So enjoy the coziness of this poem and that very necessary squirt of insect repellent – I understand as without it you two would be running for the house. I grew up in Northern Illinois and this sounds like it could take place there – I remember lathering on the repellent all summer long.


    • kanzensakura
      Mar 22, 2018 @ 23:42:19

      We’re in the South Margaret. Land of the eagle sized skeeters! We both wear those hanging repellants but I spray just in case because I am so allergic to skeeters and such. Dratted beasties.

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  2. cindy knoke
    Mar 23, 2018 @ 01:28:32

    So lovely~


  3. Jim
    Mar 23, 2018 @ 01:44:24

    A beautiful evening, especially when you’re in love. I loved the “you and me (and the neighbor’s dog)” ending. Thanks for telling of your ’63 Beatle. I too loved mine, no one jumped/fell on it but my kids killed it. I gave it to them and their step-father painted it Orange for them. It was a nice school car, too bad no one taught them to check oil now and then.


  4. Vivian Zems
    Mar 23, 2018 @ 10:47:03

    What a sublime evening. Moments that stay in your memory for ever.


  5. sanaarizvi
    Mar 23, 2018 @ 12:33:55

    A most exquisite write, Toni 💜 I love “The moon flutters on the surface of the pool – pure white on pure black.”


  6. Sherry Marr
    Mar 23, 2018 @ 15:52:50

    Oh my goodness, you took me into the most beautiful moment……………I loved everything about it. Wonderful!


  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Mar 23, 2018 @ 16:40:48

    I love the touch of reality with that insect repellent and the neighbor’s dog.. the best moment in life are always almost perfect. It’s the nick in the bowl that makes it a loved one.


    • kanzensakura
      Mar 23, 2018 @ 16:51:46

      Yeppers. I have a cloth sling bag I take with me on all my woodland wanderings. There is always insect repellent in the bag. I hate skeeters although they are good bat food.


  8. Kerry
    Mar 24, 2018 @ 11:18:01

    I really like the way you temper the romantic with a few doses of reality.


  9. Marian
    Mar 25, 2018 @ 10:55:37

    So many details in here that anchor this image in reality, I just adore it. Arnold, insect repellent, the dog, it’s all perfect. I’m so happy you shared it.


  10. Bekkie Sanchez
    Mar 26, 2018 @ 13:10:53

    It’s like I was there!


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