For Marian’s Fussy little forms prompt at Real Toads. A tricube form. three syllables per line, three lines per stanza, three stanzas per poem. Posted at Poets United Poetry Pantry
The Owl
full moon – an
owl glides in
the moonlight.
silent and
deadly – wings
extended.
mice scramble
for cover –
it’s too late.
Jul 14, 2018 @ 21:47:10
Fun form to work with
My baby robins have hatched…3 of them
I’m spending te watching them and getting nothing done
Tug of war with a worm yesterday 😊
Jul 14, 2018 @ 22:25:55
What a lovely way to spend the time. Three babies and a tug of war!
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Jul 16, 2018 @ 18:39:47
They are growing quickly–fluffing out their wings now (as I watch). Wonder if I’ll get to see their fledgling. Oh I love nature.
Jul 16, 2018 @ 18:52:25
I have seen the bluebirds twice, in all these years. Secretive little things. I ope you get to see them!
Jul 14, 2018 @ 22:25:15
owls are such amazing creatures – and I really like how you’ve taken this weird little form, and given it a zen quality – making it work for you, and the subject matter, with grace and a certain powerful elegance
Jul 14, 2018 @ 22:29:10
Thank you again Pat. It is an odd little form. As you said, constricting. It took me more to play with this form than it ever did a haiku. Like a fractious baby this form is.
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Jul 14, 2018 @ 22:41:40
I think it’s a bit too constricting, and this is coming from one who only dabbles a bit in Haiku etc. – but at least, that ancient form has reason for foundation!
Jul 14, 2018 @ 23:05:52
Yes it does. I have been writing Japanese forms for 30+ years. One thing as Shay can tell you is: I hate fauxku. I have the deepest respect for the form and the culture that birthed it.
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Jul 15, 2018 @ 01:16:46
I love it, Toni! Haiku-like, I think, in its simple, vivid clarity. I love owls too, though we have different kinds in Australia from the northern hemisphere varieties.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 01:50:01
You created flow in this very chopped form with the run-on lines. So the finale works the halt very cleverly.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 05:16:18
Wonderful flow in this one, Toni!💖 I love owls .. but sadly there aren’t any in my area.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 07:22:34
A lovely write. But the last line, “its too late.” Is never good, when “its too late,” can be applied.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 07:23:02
I love it Toni! You chose a night bird and I chose a morning one 🙂
Jul 15, 2018 @ 10:19:01
Uh oh, too late! Well, that is the natural order of things. I like how you presented this very much.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 11:22:37
Wow! very nice depiction of the night owl’s hunting games!!
Jul 15, 2018 @ 12:18:23
So well done Toni. A perfect little story.
Anna :o]
Jul 15, 2018 @ 14:57:54
This is just perfect!
Jul 15, 2018 @ 17:12:51
Yup! Excellent write, for me.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 18:39:37
That is the way of nature. Sad but true. Some live, some die. In this case, poor mouse.
Jul 15, 2018 @ 19:00:26
But fed owl!
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Jul 15, 2018 @ 19:36:53
Owls have been symbolic in my life. I take notice when one enters my life.
Jul 16, 2018 @ 03:37:15
A powerful prey indeed. Magnificent creature and strong ode to the owl.
Jul 16, 2018 @ 09:04:37
places, camera/action! Beautifully captured.
Jul 16, 2018 @ 09:18:09
I love this – owls are amazing!
Jul 16, 2018 @ 11:12:51
Nice picture of predator and prey !
Jul 16, 2018 @ 19:58:44
Poor little mice. That photo is majestic!
Jul 16, 2018 @ 20:00:13
I fell in love with it!
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