Writing Poetry

A double alphabet sestet with a loop for Brendan’s prompt at Real Toads – Resistance.

Writing Poetry
Resistance is futile – let it all go.
Quit trying to write – you will never make a poem.
Poetry is for sentimental fools.
Obey the naysayers and keep your heart to yourself.
Never write what you really feel.
Make war not love.

Make love not war.
Never give up trying to improve society and yourself.
Obey your heart and write your soul and share it.
Persist in seeing love in the world around you.
Quietly shout out your truth to the skies, the trees, the water.
Resistance is futile – let it all go.

26 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. sarahsouthwest
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 03:35:06

    Nice looping!

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 15, 2018 @ 09:00:21

      Thank you Sarah. It is not one of my better poems, mainly one line aphorisms. I was not particularly inspired but wrote it as an exercise. I imagine I will rewrite, maybe even change the form. I wanted to show a difference between the top portion and the bottom portion but it seems too cut and dried for me. Thank you for finding one good thing about it!. ??

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  2. Janice
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 09:21:27

    I like how you’ve established two meanings for the same words in your first and last lines.

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  3. annell4
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 10:18:41

    Love this!!!

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  4. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 16:27:02

    Yes I love how you turned it around… too many are saying what you say in the first verse.

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  5. Brendan
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 16:34:55

    That’s the yin and yang of it — saying such different things with the same words. Loved it!

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  6. sanaarizvi
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 19:42:02

    I love this! ❤ A double alphabet sestet worked so well here 😍

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  7. MrsBednar
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 23:04:27

    BE the change – “write your soul” is a nice phrase…

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 16, 2018 @ 00:43:18

      Yes ma’am. Thank you. It is something I learned in the 1960’s and then in 1969 when little quiet, plain me was the Valedictorian of my class. And that is what I told my class mates then – don’t judge on someone’s outward appearance and how popular they are. To not judge people at all, to get to know them and…to be the change In the world that makes it a better place. Except for a turbulent time in my university days, I was always a rather serene person. Who didn’t give a rat’s butt what people thought of me as long as I was doing the right thing and being true to myself. My mother taught me this. I was always behind the scenes in school plays, I was always the quiet person playing duets in orchestra, I was always the one that drifted off to myself and usually walked alone. It can make for a hard road sometimes, but mostly, it has been satisfying. I went through university on an academic scholarship and got a scholarship to obtain my MS. I have never regretted a bit of it. I have tried to always be the change.

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  8. Pat: willow88switches
    Sep 15, 2018 @ 23:39:53

    Interesting poetic devices, the alphabet sestet, and reversed too, and the loop – because it makes for fascinating word play and double meaning – and although, as you’ve mentioned in your comments, it relies mostly on aphorisms and cliché, it does actually drive the force and impact of the words home really well; [sometimes simple and tried and tested is the best means of “proving a point” and turning something on its ear] – so I think the effect is well done – and actually showcases the dueling nature of creation, of being, of existing – the yin/yang principle – and also, highlights the truth – of choice.

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    • kanzensakura
      Sep 16, 2018 @ 00:54:17

      Wow. Thank you Pat. This means a lot to me because I am a simple person, I am not an intellectual. I rely on tried and true. I am was an engineer when I retired and that is part of being an engineer – being a bit of a stick in the mud with an ounce of creativity.

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      • Pat: willow88switches
        Sep 16, 2018 @ 01:20:47

        some of the most powerful and enduring things, in poems, are simply worded – and there is nothing wrong with that at all; the skill I think, comes with knowing when to shift something slightly so that someone stops and says, “wait a minute” … so simple is more than fine. Simple choices. simple meals. simple moments … it’s all good. 🙂

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        • kanzensakura
          Sep 16, 2018 @ 01:49:25

          I agree. I am still learning that, after all these years. I am actually a very simple person. I do not put on airs or pontificate to show my knowledge. I did that a couple of times when I was in university but a dearly loved professor popped my bubble big time. I will never look at Annabelle Lee the same, lol. But there is much wisdom in what you say. Some of the most powerful poems have been the most simple and made me step back and ponder.

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  9. kim881
    Sep 16, 2018 @ 01:36:56

    An alphabet sestet, reversed, with loop and a hint of via negative! Toni, you are on a roll!

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  10. Kerry
    Sep 16, 2018 @ 07:31:44

    What a very interesting poem, Toni.. I like the way the second stanza mirrors the first with an opposite view. Cleverly done.

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  11. anmol(alias HA)
    Sep 16, 2018 @ 07:44:27

    Ah, that is quite an intriguing form — I like how the loop works here. The parallel viewpoint becomes very meaningful in this structure.
    -HA

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  12. Sherry Marr
    Sep 16, 2018 @ 17:21:24

    I LOVE this! Especially “persist in seeing love in the world around you.” WONDERFUL!

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  13. peterfrankiswrites
    Sep 17, 2018 @ 15:11:29

    Like others, the form of this piece works well to show both sides of creativity – as both are balanced – the yin & the yang – rather than concluding, it shows the tension between light and dark – and takes the work beyond the aphorisms. Very nice.

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  14. purplepeninportland
    Sep 18, 2018 @ 08:46:40

    This is well balanced, perhaps because of the form you chose. Works perfectly here, with a cool loop!

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  15. Roger Bussey
    Oct 15, 2018 @ 13:16:37

    Enjoyed your poem… Thanks

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  16. Poem Beach
    Oct 19, 2018 @ 04:58:32

    Poetry for the dreamers! Let’s keep on living our dreams.

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