For Quadrille Monday at dVerse. A poem in any form of exactly 44 words using the prompted word which Lillian has given us: spoil or a variant of spoil, not a synonym.
Golden Leaves
“The journey is part of the experience – an expression of the seriousness of one’s intent.” Anthony Bourdain
Our woods are filled with golden trees – poplar, oak, hickory. The leaves begin to fall covering the road, spoiling the view of the blacktop. Spicy smells scent the air.
gold leaves swirl to earth –
squirrels hunt for hidden nuts –
hawks watch them with care
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Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:14:48
Smiling I am at that last line “hawks watch them with care.” hmmmm
and what might they be watching, waiting, planning for???? 🙂
LOVE the scent of autumn….it really does create a scent when the leaves are upon the ground…and there’s a dampness…
I can always SENSE your haibuns! 🙂
Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:16:26
Thank you Lillian. I imagine those hawks are searching for food! It is getting cold down here at last and hawks are cramming for the cold..
Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:28:45
I love these little quadrille haibun. Toni! I can smell the trees and leaves in your woods from here 🙂
Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:30:59
‘hawks watch with care’ – like it.
Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:35:02
Nice write Toni… :-). Sorry for causing you distress with my errant link today. I had immediately entered the correct link directly below it and had already contacted Lillian about my blunder – but thank you for being so promptly vigilant.
Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:12:56
Good. I am glad to revisit it and read.
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Nov 19, 2018 @ 18:21:04
Always brave and creative to squeeze a haibun out of 44 words. I might try it next time.. I’ll probably write the haiku first and work backwards; you inspire me!
Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:12:20
I do that sometimes when writing the 44 word haibun. These are actually more in line with the original haibun instead of the longer drawn out haibun of modern days. ??
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Nov 19, 2018 @ 18:51:21
Oh this is absolutely stunning! ❤ I can visualize those trees with their leaves covering the ground.. such vivid imagery and luscious use of diction, Toni 😊
Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:28:31
A beautiful autumn scene.
Nov 19, 2018 @ 22:18:56
Thank you!
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Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:45:35
Nice sound in this description: “Our woods are filled with golden trees – poplar, oak, hickory. “
Nov 19, 2018 @ 22:18:36
Thank you
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Nov 19, 2018 @ 21:07:10
Doesn’t spoil the view at all! Sounds great!
Nov 19, 2018 @ 22:18:05
I think so too!
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Nov 20, 2018 @ 04:38:09
I agree with what you replied to Glenn. I much prefer your short and vivid haibun to the rambling prose that we often read (and write).
Nov 20, 2018 @ 06:43:54
I remarked in one of the dverse discussions that I thought we (me included) wrote haibun too long. Even though they are supposed to write a true accounting, we treat it as flash fiction, rambling on. The original haibun were brief. I think I am going to continue to write these short haibun as the brevity forces one to write the important stuff, to focus on the more….can’t think of the word. I have been up all night unable to think and my brain is mush.
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Nov 20, 2018 @ 08:07:06
Try the ‘extreme haibun’ of 55 words haiku included. They concentrate the mind wonderfully.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 09:16:05
I was thinking of 55 words but mainly because of the 55 word poems at Imaginary Garden with Real Toads and the 55 word poems they offer at the end of the week
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Nov 20, 2018 @ 12:03:16
Maybe that’s where the extreme haibun idea came from. I don’t do the Toads.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 12:32:03
I am a member of Toads and have been for awhile. And you can’t get more extreme than 44 words! ??
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Nov 20, 2018 @ 12:50:10
No, 44 words is pushing it 🙂
Nov 20, 2018 @ 13:48:05
I have turned the 44 word haibun into an “art” form. ??
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Nov 20, 2018 @ 14:44:11
Looks like it. I’m going to try one now 🙂
Nov 20, 2018 @ 15:11:05
I like the 44 words because you cut down on extraneous, strain out the cross, make words matter. I tried a 44 word haibun last year and really enjoy them.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 15:40:25
Yes, verbosity is never good in a poem.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 15:48:25
No it isn’t. I know I sometimes rattle on…
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Nov 20, 2018 @ 15:50:40
I have never noticed that with your poems. They always seem so succinct to me.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 16:07:52
Thank you. My early Japanese training. LOL. I feel if I exceed more than 30 lines I am too verbose.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 16:23:11
It ends where it ends. Then the haiku softens it.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 16:23:54
That reply should have been in reply to your poem not my comment. I should go to bed…
Nov 20, 2018 @ 09:57:08
Sometimes one needs to walk a path that spoils the blacktop. Lovely nod to autumn.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 13:58:06
So beautiful, Toni.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 14:32:27
Love the haiku with that squirrel… may the hawk save his poor little soul.. the image of those leaves covering everything is so fitting.
Nov 20, 2018 @ 22:50:09
Oh the Southern Woods. Feels like home. 🍁
Nov 21, 2018 @ 09:33:22
I am glad!!
Nov 21, 2018 @ 15:19:48
A lovely image ..that the hawks watch all this from afar.
Nov 21, 2018 @ 15:43:29
Oh Vivian, it is si girgeiys seeing the hawks sailing up in the sky now. I think there are abiut 20 in this area. Some of them are huge.
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Nov 24, 2018 @ 13:27:04
Amazing!…but what’s ‘si girgeiys’?
Nov 24, 2018 @ 14:46:48
Lol…my bad typing. It is supposed to be so thrilling….don’t you know Southern bad typing? Lol
Nov 25, 2018 @ 03:19:42
Lol! I wasn’t sure. I thought “must be Spanish or something”…lol!
Nov 22, 2018 @ 00:11:04
your words infuse sight and smell that enhance the beauty of leaves in autumn