Haibun: Golden Leaves

For Quadrille Monday at dVerse.  A poem in any form of exactly 44 words using the prompted word which Lillian has given us:  spoil or a variant of spoil, not a synonym.

Golden Leaves
“The journey is part of the experience – an expression of the seriousness of one’s intent.” Anthony Bourdain

Our woods are filled with golden trees – poplar, oak, hickory. The leaves begin to fall covering the road, spoiling the view of the blacktop. Spicy smells scent the air.
gold leaves swirl to earth –
squirrels hunt for hidden nuts –
hawks watch them with care

copyright kanzensakura

42 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. lillian
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:14:48

    Smiling I am at that last line “hawks watch them with care.” hmmmm
    and what might they be watching, waiting, planning for???? 🙂
    LOVE the scent of autumn….it really does create a scent when the leaves are upon the ground…and there’s a dampness…
    I can always SENSE your haibuns! 🙂


  2. kim881
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:28:45

    I love these little quadrille haibun. Toni! I can smell the trees and leaves in your woods from here 🙂


  3. V.J. Knutson
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:30:59

    ‘hawks watch with care’ – like it.


  4. Rob Kistner
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 17:35:02

    Nice write Toni… :-). Sorry for causing you distress with my errant link today. I had immediately entered the correct link directly below it and had already contacted Lillian about my blunder – but thank you for being so promptly vigilant.


  5. Glenn Buttkus
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 18:21:04

    Always brave and creative to squeeze a haibun out of 44 words. I might try it next time.. I’ll probably write the haiku first and work backwards; you inspire me!


    • kanzensakura
      Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:12:20

      I do that sometimes when writing the 44 word haibun. These are actually more in line with the original haibun instead of the longer drawn out haibun of modern days. ??

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  6. sanaarizvi
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 18:51:21

    Oh this is absolutely stunning! ❤ I can visualize those trees with their leaves covering the ground.. such vivid imagery and luscious use of diction, Toni 😊


  7. rivrvlogr
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:28:31

    A beautiful autumn scene.


  8. Frank Hubeny
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 20:45:35

    Nice sound in this description: “Our woods are filled with golden trees – poplar, oak, hickory. “


  9. qbit
    Nov 19, 2018 @ 21:07:10

    Doesn’t spoil the view at all! Sounds great!


  10. Jane Dougherty
    Nov 20, 2018 @ 04:38:09

    I agree with what you replied to Glenn. I much prefer your short and vivid haibun to the rambling prose that we often read (and write).


  11. Raivenne
    Nov 20, 2018 @ 09:57:08

    Sometimes one needs to walk a path that spoils the blacktop. Lovely nod to autumn.


  12. rainbow braids
    Nov 20, 2018 @ 13:58:06

    So beautiful, Toni.


  13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Nov 20, 2018 @ 14:32:27

    Love the haiku with that squirrel… may the hawk save his poor little soul.. the image of those leaves covering everything is so fitting.


  14. Lona Gynt
    Nov 20, 2018 @ 22:50:09

    Oh the Southern Woods. Feels like home. 🍁


  15. Vivian Zems
    Nov 21, 2018 @ 15:19:48

    A lovely image ..that the hawks watch all this from afar.


  16. Gina
    Nov 22, 2018 @ 00:11:04

    your words infuse sight and smell that enhance the beauty of leaves in autumn


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