Coming of Snow

For Real Toads, Marian’s Fussy Little Forms Prompt:  Puente is a rewarding form created by James Rasmusson. The word puente means bridge in Spanish, and–naturally–this lovely form features a bridge. It is a simple idea:  Three stanzas – First and third stanzas have equal number of lines (your choice how many) Middle bridge stanza is one line, enclosed in dashes or tildes.  Middle bridge stanza serves as last line for first stanza and first line for last stanza. I used classic haiku for my stanzas, combining two forms. I am in an odd emotionless time at this point and it is reflected in my poetry.

Coming of Snow
bitter cold morning –
quick whiff of wood smoke before
nostrils become numb

the smell of snow in the air – sharp and sweet

frost forms on window –
moon stays warm among the stars –
quiet night sleeps

20 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Marian
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 12:35:30

    Ahhhh… so pretty.


  2. Magaly Guerrero
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 13:19:26

    The numbness and the sleep bridge very well with each other. And it’s emphasized by the way in which warmth is so far away…


  3. sanaarizvi
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 13:38:10

    Love the contrast between ‘bitter cold morning’ and the ‘moon’ which manages to stay warm among the stars. Beautifully rendered, Toni ❤️


  4. Sherry Blue Sky
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 13:50:05

    I can feel the quiet of this time of winter……..I love your warm moon!


  5. coalblack
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 14:46:27

    The use of the sensual aspects makes this very immediate and put sthe reader right there. As one who lives a third of the year with snow, I love it.


    • kanzensakura
      Dec 09, 2018 @ 14:55:00

      I am also known for my love of snow and winter. I have been walking around in it all bundled up. I love the sound of snow falling

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  6. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 15:43:27

    Altogether a vivid recreation of winter!


  7. Jim
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 16:08:24

    This is a “pretty” poem to me, Toni, with the falling snow. The double Haiku/Senryū reads nice too. Thank you for seeing my spelling error. I’m not sure if my brain or the Galaxy smart phone was to blame. I do most of my composing using the phone


  8. Shawna
    Dec 09, 2018 @ 18:33:46

    This is beautiful, T.


  9. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Dec 10, 2018 @ 01:30:00

    A time for self-reflection, almost a hibernation. Lovely.


  10. Kerry
    Dec 10, 2018 @ 02:16:39

    My favourite line is the one about the moon!


  11. annell4
    Dec 10, 2018 @ 10:19:03

    Maybe snow has a smell, but for sure, there is silence after.


  12. Helen
    Dec 10, 2018 @ 13:27:00

    This is SOOOO Pacific NW, I love it!


  13. kanzensakura
    Dec 10, 2018 @ 14:18:12

    Thank you. Lol. I am a southern poet but I am glad at the universality of my piem.


  14. purplepeninportland
    Dec 10, 2018 @ 15:47:14

    “moon stays warm among the stars” – How lovely!


  15. grapeling
    Dec 12, 2018 @ 03:23:17

    Spanish maybe, but also very much in tenor with your Japanese bent ~


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