The Moon on the ocean

For Bjorn’s prompt on dVerse Poets Pub. Today he explores the sonnet. I have written a modern free form sonnet for the prompt as rhymes and I don’t play well together.Also posting on Poets United Poetry Pantry.

The Moon on the Ocean
The moon lies upon the ocean –
a sleeping dragon curled about itself,
one eye half open observing the world below.
Snow falls like meteors – a shower of cold fire
doused in the black water heaving itself
Upon the shore. This moon is red as blood –
The dragon’s eye carnelian in its glow.
Bits of phosphorus twinkle on the sand.
A crab washes ashore and walks a few paces
before being swept back into the blackness again.
Farther from the shore early breaking waves
show white in the blackness and ladders
from the moonshine track back to the moon
undulating gently upon the water. The
moon on the ocean is a mysterious thing.

26 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Mish
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 01:10:21

    I really enjoyed the imagery of the dragon…and the “ladders from the moonshine track”.


  2. rob kistner
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 03:51:51

    Love the mystery of the moon, and loved this writing Toni…


  3. kim881
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 04:30:00

    A stunning sonnet, Toni, with imaginative imagery. I especially enjoyed the ‘…sleeping dragon curled about itself,
    one eye half open observing the world below’
    and the tiny details of the bits of phosphorus twinkling on the sand and the crab.


  4. merrildsmith
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 08:33:45

    I love the imagery of this, Toni. So vivid. This sonnet is beautiful!


  5. rothpoetry
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 10:00:26

    I love the imagery of the dragon ocean curled up with one eye watching… The sonnet flowed very well even without rhyme. The moon on the ocean really is a mysterious thing.


  6. Frank Hubeny
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 10:10:08

    Nice line of contrasts: “Snow falls like meteors – a shower of cold fire”


  7. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 10:48:32

    Oh yes… a sonnet is a wonderful form also when made free like you did here… the imagery of the dragon and the reflection is excellent.


  8. Glenn Buttkus
    Jan 04, 2019 @ 17:50:38

    I applaud your creativity and this fine poem. I, too, like /the shower of cold fire/. It may be the most modern of sonnets I encounter.


  9. Gina
    Jan 05, 2019 @ 18:24:20

    like the start and the end where the moon is still the enigma, an ode to the mystery and beauty of things we see but do not understand its power yet


  10. Sherry Blue Sky
    Jan 06, 2019 @ 13:25:55

    The moon on the ocean is mysterious indeed. I love the scene you captured here. Love the line Frank quoted!


  11. sanaarizvi
    Jan 06, 2019 @ 14:25:01

    This is absolutely breathtaking in its language and imagery, Toni! ❤️


  12. Mary
    Jan 06, 2019 @ 14:40:54

    This is beautiful, Toni. You have really captured in poetry JUST the way it looks.


  13. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 00:11:34

    Oh, how I love this wonderful description!


  14. gillena cox
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 00:17:08

    Observer dragon moon is a lovely image. Giant and gentle in her love of beach /ocean crabs.
    Thanks for dropping by my sumie Sunday Toni. Happy Nee Year



  15. thotpurge
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 00:23:56

    Snow falls like meteors – a shower of cold fire.. that contrast is so great!


  16. dsnake1
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 10:19:09

    vivid imagery.
    i like the image of the moonlight reflecting on water as ‘ladders’.


  17. Myrna Rosa
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 13:25:06

    Reading your poem gave me a moment of serenity. This is a lovely Sonnet and I love how you describe this scene.


  18. Wendy Bourke
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 15:10:12

    Love it! Mesmeric imagery beautifully rendered.


  19. Susanne - WY/USA
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 15:37:37

    I love the lines about the crab. So many things happen in our world that we don’t know about unless we are there to see or imagine them.


  20. Magaly Guerrero
    Jan 09, 2019 @ 18:25:32

    Mysterious, indeed… showing so many wonders, as your poem presents line after line. Line 4 and 5 are delicious.


  21. Grace
    Jan 10, 2019 @ 21:43:11

    I love the colors and the imagery of: a sleeping dragon curled about itself.


  22. Lona Gynt
    Jan 21, 2019 @ 23:55:51

    Every single word is so precise and beautiful, this is I think my favorite of yours I have seen. A circle of silver light in the darkness, twice reflected. Like the waves, it pulls us shimmering


  23. memadtwo
    Jan 23, 2019 @ 20:44:04

    It is indeed. (K)


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