Haibun: January

For Kim’s prompt for Haibun Monday. Although she asks for a limit of three tight paragraphs, I have revered to the original form created by Basho – one brief and to the point paragraph along with a seasonal haiku to close instead of the long haibun with much despcription.

The Christmas tree is put away for another year. Darkness covers the earth in early afternoon. Cold settles about the house like a snowy shawl. It seems dull without the lit Christmas tree. We sip slow simmered bean soup for dinner.
feral cats gather –
they mass together for warmth –
feeding them is joy

snowy yard

43 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 15:57:42

    I love how you bring in the warmth with that bean soup… otherwise January is a lot like a wet grey shawl


  2. ladynyo
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:00:59

    cats and kittens can make the environment cozy and warm. The bean soup helps.


  3. Suzanne
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:03:57

    You have used the form well. I like the movement from outer cold to interior warmth and joy.


  4. V.J. Knutson
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:10:03

    Warmth despite the cold – love the contrast.


  5. Jane Dougherty
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:20:02

    I like how you bring the feral cats into the sheltering warmth. Winter is hard on wild things.


  6. Gina
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:23:33

    i miss the twinkling lights once the tree is down. feral cats are beautiful creatures


  7. kim881
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:30:37

    The scene is so well encapsulated in your short paragraph, Toni. I love the simile ‘Cold settles about the house like a snowy shawl’ and the feeding of the feral cats. My tree is also down. I like slow simmered bean soup – I made cheese and potato pie this evening – comfort food!


  8. Carol J Forrester
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:44:45

    I haven’t got around to putting away the tree yet, but I love the imagery in this. You’ve packed a lot of punch into that one paragraph.


  9. msjadeli
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:54:16

    “darkness covers the earth” it does seem that way doesn’t it


  10. Frank Hubeny
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 16:58:49

    I can imagine how the Christmas tree adds brightness and color to the room. I also liked the joy in feeding the feral cats.


  11. Grace
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 18:16:10

    Love the warmth in the snowy cold winter with that soup and feeding the cats.


  12. Glenn Buttkus
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 18:27:17

    If I had, or knew a feral cat, I would name it Errol. I like your point that snow on the house seems onerous and plain without the holiday decor.


  13. Beverly Crawford
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 18:42:10

    I’m still chuckling at Glenn’s Errol feral! I so agree that everything seems rather bland when the tree and lights are put away. Well written!


  14. rothpoetry
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 19:34:28

    Great Haibun! I agree… less is more! Beautiful Photo… Snowy home for the cats!


  15. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 20:50:02

    feral cats and bean soup. We had cats that would curl around each other on the coldest of nights – the little one so happy being snuggled with his “hero”. But come warmer days, he was ignored (poor little guy). As for bean soup… turkey and white bean soup was eaten for DAYS after Christmas… 🙂


    • kanzensakura
      Jan 07, 2019 @ 21:00:09

      We are great lovers of smoked ham hock and bean soup. I share with my mother-in-law. I also make up a recipe of yeasty butter rolls. So good!

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  16. rob kistner
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 23:45:28

    It is the time for bean soup, with the bone from the Christmas ham… YUMMMM!
    The home can be grey and eoolen this time if year…


  17. rob kistner
    Jan 07, 2019 @ 23:45:56



  18. Kathy Reed
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 06:45:44

    Brief but you encompass all and more a winter day signifies.


  19. coalblack
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 08:01:03

    The ferals should be made stars. This is a start in that direction! 😉


  20. Charmed Chaos
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 10:24:16

    Toni- you capture the moment in a beautiful sparse way. I love that you care for the feral cats.


  21. lynn__
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 11:22:10

    Wonderful winter haibun, Toni…warms my heart.


  22. Sherry Marr
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 15:16:32

    Bean soup for comfort. Lovely. I am happy you feed the cats. They must be dreaming of spring.


  23. sanaarizvi
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 15:30:25

    The image of bean soup and snowy shawl is beautiful and warms my heart! Such a gorgeous haibun, Toni! ❤️


  24. Mish
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 19:28:56

    You bring much into this with your expertise in writing a concise haibun. The gloominess of winter, the emptiness without the tree, the warmth of the bean soup and another layer of “joy” in feeding the feral cats. Love it, Toni.


  25. Vicki
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 20:03:29

    This really warmed my heart. Lovely written.


  26. anmol(alias HA)
    Jan 08, 2019 @ 23:35:59

    There’s something to be cherished — this feeding and sharing — even when the festivities are over. A lovely haibun! 🙂


  27. Kerry
    Jan 09, 2019 @ 08:39:21

    And i worry about the feral cats in my summer garden!!


  28. annell4
    Jan 09, 2019 @ 10:57:11

    Warm soup in winter…bears hibernate, and maybe we do too, once the Christmas tree is put away. Love this.


  29. Nora
    Jan 13, 2019 @ 18:01:16

    Love the warmth of community found in a colony of cats huddling together and the we who are sipping slow simmered soup.


  30. Jim
    Jan 14, 2019 @ 16:12:02

    Love you for thinking of the feral cats. Mom generally kept several families and generations of them on the farm. After we stopped raising pigs she used one of the smaller hog houses for a cat house, getting them out of the cold and snowy Nebraska weather. I.e. I love your Haibun, it reminds me of a lot. Thank you.


    • kanzensakura
      Jan 14, 2019 @ 16:31:31

      Bless your mother for her kindness to these creatures. I was always taught to show kindness to animals, the old Bible verse, what you do to the least of these…thank you for sharing about your mother. She seemed to be a rare kind of person.


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