Double Confession

For Anmol’s Confession prompt over at dVerse Poets Pub.

Double Confession

“In my midnight confessions
When I tell all the world that I love you” The Grass Roots

A smoldering hot August night,
Cicadas sawing and humming bird moths
circling the cleomes.
End of season honeysuckle perfuming the air
and gardenias gleaming in the moonlight.
You came over for dinner and I spilled lemonade
in your lap because I loved you so much
and my hand refused to be steady.
We had been to a kendo demonstration
and you were one of the demonstrators.
In the living room your katana rested on the coffee table.
I loved you so much.
I wanted to tell you but I was afraid of losing you
as a friend –
I loved you so much.
We sat in the glider desultorily moving back and forth
When you said to me,
as if in an afterthought –
Watashi wa kokoromara anata o ashitemiasu*.
I thought I understood you but…
What did you just tell me?
I love you with all my heart,
you whispered.
I sat up straight and glared at you.
You laughed and pulled me close.
I have been wanting to tell you that since we met.
I leaned against you.
I loved you so much.

old snapshot taken in Duke U Medical Library 1979

*Japanese for I love you will all my heart

31 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Hélène - Willow Poetry
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 18:26:29

    Exquisite poem. Your love is dancing on the page.

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  2. sanaarizvi
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 18:40:05

    Oh this is incredibly romantic! ❤️

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  3. Frank Hubeny
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 18:59:33

    Nice description: “You came over for dinner and I spilled lemonade
    in your lap because I loved you so much
    and my hand refused to be steady.”

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  4. Sherry Blue Sky
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 20:01:07

    Oh yes. You loved him that much. Sigh. Some loves never fade away.

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  5. msjadeli
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 20:49:41

    your mutual tentativeness is precious

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  6. Grace
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 21:09:10

    What a sweet and touching story. Your love smoulders and burns through the screen, smiles.

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  7. Violet Lentz
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 21:14:07

    This is perfection. How fortunate you are to have known such love.

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  8. V.J. Knutson
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 21:35:46

    Beautiful.

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  9. lynn__
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 22:21:14

    A sweet, intoxicating love story, Toni!

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  10. robtkistner
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 22:37:10

    Rolls right off the tongue… if you are from Tokyo. 😉 That was a very cool write Toni, touching and memorable… TYFS,

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  11. sarahsouthwest
    Jan 15, 2019 @ 22:59:32

    The repetition adds to the intensity of the moment.

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  12. M
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 00:57:36

    the lemon spill belies the grace and tenderness of you both, and of this moving pen ~

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  13. kim881
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 03:27:28

    I love how the words of the quotation echo throughout your ‘Double Confession’, Toni. It’s a stunning confession of love, with a beautiful setting and a tender anecdote about your Japanese lover.

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  14. anmol(alias HA)
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 04:00:30

    Oh, so tender and so very emotive, Toni! The repetition of “I loved you so much” makes me feel that yearning to know, to acknowledge, and to share this love. 🙂

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  15. kislaya
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 07:03:27

    Loved the Japanese vocab in this – Kendo, Katana and ‘Watashi wa kokoromara anata o ashitemias’ – I have memorised this last one 🙂
    Beautiful poetry filled with love, speaks of love and admiration.

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  16. Charmed Chaos
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 09:23:48

    So very beautiful Toni.

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  17. Herotomost
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 11:25:34

    So awesome when it works like that…I love this romantic front porch romp. I especially like it when there is a happy ending. Great writing!!

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  18. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 16, 2019 @ 14:15:34

    This is so beautiful… a wonderful and sweet beginning, and how hard it is to take the first step… to lose a friend can be a terrible thing if you are not successful.

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  19. Nora
    Jan 17, 2019 @ 11:09:24

    Oh, my heart. I’m captured from the very start.

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  20. memadtwo
    Jan 17, 2019 @ 18:07:08

    a confession of joy! The love is palpable. (K)

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  21. oldegg
    Jan 17, 2019 @ 19:20:43

    Total honesty is the best way when you are with someone you love; hoping of course that it is reciprocated!

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  22. Cressida
    Jan 18, 2019 @ 00:17:43

    Magical encounter…lovely to read.

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  23. Misky
    Jan 18, 2019 @ 10:57:50

    So lovely.

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  24. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Jan 18, 2019 @ 16:57:15

    … simple and oh so heart-wrenching. Very dear. Loved it.

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  25. Kerry
    Jan 19, 2019 @ 10:13:53

    I love this poem so much, Toni. The authenticity of the moment is so touching.

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