Haibun: Canoeing in the Pine Barrens

For Mish’s prompt at dVerse. Today is Quadrille Monday. A quadrille is a poem of exactly 44 words using the word prompted for the day. The word today is “steep” or variants of the word. I have taken you all to my beloved Pine Barrens in New Jersey. The creek and river water is colored with the tannins leached from the roots of the pine and cedar trees.  I have done a haibun in the manner of the original created by Basho – brief and to the point ended with a seasonal haiku.

Haibun: Canoeing in the Pine Barrens
Canoeing through the Pine Barrens is peaceful – floating on crystal clear water the color of tea leaves steeped in a glass pitcher. Silence. Slight shush of the canoe on water soothes us.
sounds of birds and wind –
umber colored water flows
through the Barrens

creek in the Pine Barrens

39 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. sarahsouthwest
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 16:11:45

    Lovely soft alliteration, and anyone who uses the word umber…❤️


  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 16:13:07

    What a wonderful place… I long for summer and canoeing…


    • kanzensakura
      Jan 28, 2019 @ 16:16:31

      The smell of the water is wonderful – like cedar and pine. I miss living up North and in close proximity to the Barrens. Drifting under the trees is always so cool and calm.


  3. Gina
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 16:20:15

    the sound of that slush is so calming


  4. msjadeli
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 16:37:58

    wouldn’t it be wonderful to have a river of tea to dip into whenever thirsty. looks like a magical place


  5. kim881
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 16:57:36

    A quiet quadrille, Toni, and a beautiful canoe experience. I love the ‘water the color of tea leaves steeped in a glass pitcher’ and the ‘slight shush of the canoe on water’.


  6. Glenn Buttkus
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 17:17:06

    I love your bare bones haibun; down to the essentials. I’ve never been in a canoe or a kayak; sounds beauteous.


    • kanzensakura
      Jan 28, 2019 @ 17:36:30

      It is sonderful Glenn. Especially when one is the middle and two at each end paddling and going along with the current. the water is often shallow enough that at my short height, I can climb overboard and cool off in the water, walking along beside the canoe.


  7. Frank J. Tassone
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 17:57:48

    Majestic and serene! Thanks for inviting us to such a special locale, Toni! 🙂


  8. sanaarizvi
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 18:11:03

    Such exquisite use of alliteration in this one, Toni! ❤️ I love that “umber colored water.” 😀


  9. Mish
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 19:48:41

    I share your love of canoeing, something I haven’t done in a few years. How imaginative to compare the umber colour of the water to steeped tea. 🙂


  10. Arcadia Maria
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 20:17:44

    Lovely poem. 🙂


  11. rothpoetry
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 21:07:05

    Love the photo… and your poem shares the intensity of your love for this place!


  12. V.J. Knutson
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 21:21:44

    Such calming image and words.


  13. Frank Hubeny
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 21:24:49

    I can hear that soothing sound of the canoe.


  14. Nora
    Jan 28, 2019 @ 22:54:55

    Your alliteration lulls with the swish of water and wind and blades, and in lovely form. Thank you for reminding me of the meditation of canoeing.


  15. robtkistner
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 03:31:28

    This was excellent Toni. Made me want to dip my paddle and venture downstream! 🙂


  16. merrildsmith
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 07:44:30

    Lovely and peaceful, Toni. I love the water the color of tea leaves. . .and I agree with Sarah that umber is great.
    I’m not that far away, but I haven’t really explored the Pine Barrens.


  17. Jane Dougherty
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 11:36:26

    Such peaceful imagery.


  18. Sherry Marr
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 12:20:48

    So colourful and lovely, Toni!


  19. qbit
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 12:43:29

    “the Barrens” that are anything but barren in your lovely Haibun!


  20. annell4
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 12:49:01

    Dear Toni, this is so beautiful, both in the way you have written, and the view you have shared!!


  21. lillian
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 14:47:56

    Absolutely stunning! The amber water….use of steeping…the silence and the slight shush that I can actually hear in your words. Wondrous traditional haibun!


  22. whimsygizmo
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 19:59:53

    As one who LOVES to kayak, I cannot resist this phrase/sound/feeling:
    “Slight shush of the canoe on water”

    Ahhhhhh. Perfection.


  23. thotpurge
    Jan 29, 2019 @ 20:25:37

    How peaceful that sounds!


  24. Jim
    Jan 30, 2019 @ 04:50:17

    You made this sound sooo pretty a canoe outing. I want to come along. Toni, I snapped your picture, should I give you credit?


  25. Susie Clevenger
    Jan 30, 2019 @ 11:07:53

    Your poem is a delightful visual. I can see and hear the water, feel the peace. Such wonderful comfort for my Wednesday.


  26. Lona Gynt
    Jan 30, 2019 @ 15:04:37

    Slight shush soothing. Thanks for this


  27. Frank J. Tassone
    Feb 02, 2019 @ 12:57:12

    Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
    #Haiku Happenings #9: Toni Spencer’s #quadrille #haibun for #dversepoets!


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