Haibun: Winter Ocean

For De’s prompt at Quadrille Monday. The prompted word is kiss.  A quadrille is a poem of exactly 44 words and uses a prompted word.

Haibun: Winter Ocean

Walking along the shore, snow begins. The sky is grey overhead and golden sand becomes white. Broken shells roll in the surf. I hold my face up to the sky to be kissed.
lazy snowflakes kiss
the shore – ocean kisses back –
winter romance blooms

 

 

 

40 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. whimsygizmo
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 15:44:51

    This makes me COLD! 😉 But so so beautiful.

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  2. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 15:52:12

    I do remember the winter wind from the sea… so cold and raw, but O the scent is what I remember most.

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  3. Glenn Buttkus
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:05:53

    Strolling the Pacific coast beaches this time of year are also chilled and deserted; just left-handed to your right.

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  4. Carol J Forrester
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:05:58

    I’d have to agree with De. There’s certainly a chill to this poem, but in the best way. Beautiful write.

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  5. Ali Grimshaw
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:13:50

    I like the visual of holding your face to the sky to be kissed. Nice.

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  6. sarahsouthwest
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:17:50

    I love your pleasure in the moment. The haiku is cold but lovely.

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  7. rivrvlogr
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:17:53

    This has the air of a mysterious rendezvous.

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  8. Jane Dougherty
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:33:59

    You make the cold seem warm and fuzzy 🙂

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  9. Misky
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:40:48

    (shivering!)

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  10. msjadeli
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:51:20

    your poem takes you there, as witness to the cold bloom of winter’s love. sounds weird to type it that way, but it is what it is ❤

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  11. gypsy moon
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 16:52:23

    “Winter romance blooms.” I love that. 🙂

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  12. kim881
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 17:15:48

    Beautiful, Toni! I love the broken shells rolling in the surf, the lazy snowflakes kissing the shore and the ocean kissing back.

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  13. merrildsmith
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 17:46:52

    I’ve been to the seashore when it was cold, but never when it snowed. That seems special to me. “winter romance” Love that.

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  14. sanaarizvi
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 17:48:02

    Oh gosh this is absolutely breathtaking, Toni! ❤️ I love “lazy snowflakes kiss the shore.” 🙂

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  15. robtkistner
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 18:51:49

    I like this ménage à trios of the snowflakes, ocean, and shore. Very romantic Toni.

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  16. L. Stevens
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 21:23:46

    I loved this, I miss being near the ocean during winter 🖤

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  17. rothpoetry
    Feb 11, 2019 @ 22:52:33

    Great Haibun. I love the picture of the oceans romance! A lasting one that goes on and on,,,

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  18. anmol(alias HA)
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 02:32:32

    Ah, what a beautiful winter romance! This snowflake kiss is something so warming despite the cold touch. A lovely haibun, Toni.

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  19. maria
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 02:59:34

    “lazy snowflakes kiss…” such cool romance.

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  20. lillian
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 08:11:33

    “golden sand becomes white” —- oh my friend, you do have a way with words in a haibun. Just a beautiful description in its simplicity of 44 words. And we both have the idea of being kissed by snowflakes in our posts — although yours I would say is exquisite and mine is a ditty —- and therein lies the difference between our writing styles as well. Just beautiful, Toni!

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  21. annell4
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 13:24:24

    Yes!! Winter at the beach has its own special qualities.

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  22. Colleen@ LOOSELEAFNOTES
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 18:00:25

    Ah, and the sea meeting the shore is also a great romance! Love the image of a snowflake kiss and the ocean kissing back.

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  23. Vivian Zems
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 19:41:35

    Loving this winter romance

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  24. Frank Hubeny
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 21:27:14

    Nice description of winter romance in those kissing snowflakes.

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  25. thotpurge
    Feb 12, 2019 @ 22:58:34

    I hold my face up to the sky to be kissed… that is beautiful!!

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  26. Brendan
    Feb 13, 2019 @ 04:01:41

    Wonderful. Thanks for reminding us that winter blooms and sings … if we hold our face up to it!

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  27. mhmp77
    Feb 13, 2019 @ 10:37:59

    kaykuala

    When it comes to love and kisses whatever season will not be relevant. It is warmth all the way

    Hank

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  28. Susie Clevenger
    Feb 13, 2019 @ 13:30:59

    The poem makes me shiver, but also makes me wish I could walk that cold shore.

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  29. KB
    Feb 14, 2019 @ 17:30:20

    Snowflake kisses are lovely

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  30. Frank J. Tassone
    Feb 16, 2019 @ 10:22:35

    Ah, the Atlantic in winter! I hear an echo of Jimi Hendrix in the last line of your prose : “…Excuse me while I kiss the sky…”

    🙂

    Reply

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