Haibun: Hospitals

For my prompt at Real Toads: Write a haibun of 100 or fewer words. Any subject as long as it is true and directly reflects on you.  My contribution of 97 words.

Haibun: Hospitals
Hospitals are a cottony kind of place. You are insulated from the outside world yet, right outside your window, the world is happening. The sun is shining, rain or snow is falling. At night, the hospital is full of odd beeps and alarms. Not a good place to be when one wants to sleep.
hospitals –
no rest for the weary –
sun shines bright outside

Victorian era hospital approx. 1870

29 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Suzanne
    Feb 27, 2019 @ 18:00:49

    That captures that strange isolated feeling of being in hospital. Sleeping there is pretty much impossible, I agree. All those beeps and alarms are really disconcerting. The fact that it’s never fully dark also makes it difficult to sleep. It seems odd that places set up for healing are so loud and bright.


  2. annell4
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 09:34:57

    Unless you have a curable illness, hospitals aren’t a good place to be, at all. I am sorry you were there, glad you are home.


  3. Sherry Blue Sky
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 14:10:16

    I know! The one place where you need sleep, it is impossible! And the world outside goes on as usual. Loved this, Toni. Hope you are home now and feeling better.


  4. Jim
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 19:43:05

    And when you’ve been asleep for a bit they wake you up. For meds, itals, bathroom, and a zillion other reasons.
    Toni, I hope you didn’t have to go into the hospital for treatment of your recent illness.


  5. isadoragruye
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:33:24

    I really like how you mention that the hospital is insular and how life is happening on the outside. Calling that “cottony” is spot on. Thanks for the this piece!


  6. Vivian Zems
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 21:13:35

    A true depiction of a hospital stay. Love the haiku 🙂


  7. Susie Clevenger
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 03:09:09

    I so understand the feeling/mood you have created in this. Again I am walking hospital halls because my daughter is ill.


  8. anmol(alias HA)
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 04:53:54

    You have captured the atmosphere of the hospital so well — while isolated from the happenings of the world, it can be difficult to realize that things are happening outside that very window.
    I am glad that you are back home, Toni. Hope you feel completely well soon.


  9. lillian
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 13:58:25

    Just dropped by Toni….actually hunted to find the Real Toads prompts so I could reconnect with you. I miss you over at dVerse, my friend.
    Just so tired of Sabio — I had to reconnect with you! 🙂 I think I will no longer read his posts and then maybe he will go away from mine?
    I’m hosting next Tuesdays’ Poetics…hope you’ll stop by 🙂
    PS: I like the idea of a hospital being a cottony place.


    • kanzensakura
      Mar 01, 2019 @ 14:23:47

      Hi dear Lillian. Sabio is a major pia. I stopped commenting on him a couple of years ago. He still comments on my poetry at dverse. Ignore him. I had to block him from my webpage. There is no law that says you have to comment on every poem. Let Bjorn know if you are having problems with him. Glad you stopped by. Lol. I Don’t post on dverse with some of the forms. I miss you too. Cone by and visit!

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  10. Anonymous
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 15:25:48

    You have composed a realistic portrayal of life in the hospital. Nicely done and thrilled to know you are better!


  11. coalblack
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 18:14:47

    I went down to Saint James Infirmary…I saw my baby there…

    A horse-pital is no place for a good woman to be, if you ask me. As always, you caught the feeling.


  12. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Mar 02, 2019 @ 06:15:02

    I especially love ‘a cottony kind of place’ … and glad you are no longer in position to observe same!


  13. Frank J. Tassone
    Mar 04, 2019 @ 15:59:23

    When Mira had Frankie, she certainly didn’t get any sleep in the hospital! Your haibun brings back memories. 🙂


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