Haibun: Do I Dare Disturb the Universe?

A haibun for day 26 of NAPIWRIMO. A haibun is a Japanese poery form that is prosimetic – part autobiographical (non-fiction, tight paragraph, ended with a seasonal haiku). The western style is long with much description; the Japanese is brief and to the point.

Do I Dare Disturb the Universe?
“Do I dare
Disturb the universe?…
Do I dare to eat a peach?” T. S. Eliot Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock

It was hot July. I was midpoint to age 13. I had earlier raided the kitchen for a couple of peaches for breakfast and sat down in the library to read. So immersed, I didn’t hear the calls to breakfast by my grandmother. I had just read the line about the peach. You know the one. My grandmother pops her head in and says it is time for breakfast. I looked up and said “I have had my mind totally blown”. She sniffed. “It is still your day to wash the breakfast dishes”.
hot July morning –
eating a peach
will never be the same

18 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. ManicDdaily
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 09:30:58

    Lovely! Much enjoyed! k.


  2. coalblack
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 10:24:00

    That poem blew MY mind early on, too! Funny how things that move us tremendously on a personal level don’t translate to the every day goings-on that continue regardless. But as we attend to them, the mind-blowing thing takes root and stays, for as long as we breathe.


  3. annell4
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 10:34:36

    One joy of July!!!


  4. Charmed Chaos
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 12:02:31

    Oh, I just love every tasty morsel of this Toni!


  5. sanaarizvi
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 12:07:44

    It’s an incredibly riveting poem “T. S. Eliot Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock,” I remember the time when I first read it 🙂 Such a wonderfully nostalgic Haibun, Toni!


  6. Ron.
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 12:17:13

    Peaches, like this haibun, are delicious.


  7. Kerry
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 12:28:34

    Just peachy!


  8. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Apr 26, 2019 @ 22:02:09

    Luckily, poets do (and must) dare disturb the universe.

    I like Mr Eliot very well, but Mr Yeats is the great love of my life. 🙂


    • kanzensakura
      Apr 26, 2019 @ 23:18:51

      Dear Irish Willie…. How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face;

      One of my faves by him

      Sent from Mail for Windows 10



  9. kim881
    Apr 27, 2019 @ 02:52:09

    Great title, Toni – Eliot’s work offers so many excellent lines. I’m not surprised he blew your mind! But then, eating a peach is a moment to savour, even when you’ve done it many times before.


  10. Susie Clevenger
    Apr 27, 2019 @ 19:02:50

    I love everything from your quote to the moment you were so immersed in the poem nothing else mattered. Beautiful… Thank you for your kind comments on my poem. I am fine. It was written from my experience in 2006 after a car accident.


  11. Frank J. Tassone
    Apr 28, 2019 @ 09:53:46

    Reblogged this on Frank J. Tassone and commented:
    #Haiku Happenings #5: Toni Spencer’s latest #haibun!


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