a piece of the ocean

a piece of the ocean
“I am the shore and the ocean, awaiting myself on both sides.” ― Dejan Stojanovic, The Shape

here is a piece of the ocean –
this bit of blue,
this bit of gold,
this bit of green.
I love you with the serene brutality
of the ocean –
but we are two different oceans
apart from each other
on different coasts –
loving eternally but never meeting
on the sands –
kissing and missing by inches.
always apart.
without the gulls the sky is empty.

 

26 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    May 11, 2019 @ 16:42:01

    There is something so special with water… apart but always connected… I read it as a metaphor

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  2. erbiage
    May 11, 2019 @ 18:07:38

    I was immediately reminded of Rumi”break your pitcher against a rock.
    We no longer need to haul pieces of the ocean around”. Love the sound of green and serene. Really feel the longing, kissing and missing. The last line blows it all out of the water. Well done Toni!

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  3. sanaarizvi
    May 11, 2019 @ 18:32:33

    This is incredibly beautiful Toni! ❤️ I especially adore; “I love you with the serene brutality of the ocean – but we are two different oceans apart from each other.”

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  4. Magaly Guerrero
    May 11, 2019 @ 18:44:43

    This poem sings the melody of longing kissing resignation and continuing to want… and to love… while knowing that the perfect kiss, the one that feeds everything will never come. The 5th and 6th lines dance with such a gentle desperation. It makes me want to hold the speaker, not to say that everything it’s going to be all right–she already understand that it will never be–but to say, “I know, I know” while looking at the sky, still hoping for gulls…

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  5. Ron. Lavalette
    May 11, 2019 @ 22:31:37

    Fine work…and that last line’s a killer.

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  6. kim881
    May 12, 2019 @ 03:43:23

    I love how you started this poem with the colours of the ocean, Toni, and the way you evoke utter passion in the ‘serene brutality of the ocean’, longing in the lines:
    ‘loving eternally but never meeting
    on the sands –
    kissing and missing by inches’
    and the echo of the gulls in the final line.

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  7. Marian
    May 12, 2019 @ 10:10:41

    Oceans apart but missing by inches… tragic, really. This is lovely, especially the phrase “serene brutality,” so apt.

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  8. Kerry
    May 12, 2019 @ 10:14:48

    This is just such a wholly satisfying poem, Toni. I love every line and description.

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  9. coalblack
    May 12, 2019 @ 10:56:46

    And silent. This is almost too melancholy to take. (but that’s why I like it.)

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  10. Barbara MacKenzie
    May 12, 2019 @ 11:35:11

    loving eternally but never meeting
    on the sands –

    without the gulls the sky is empty.

    beautiful images that fill my mind.thank you…bkm

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  11. Mr. Walker
    May 12, 2019 @ 14:09:08

    I love “serene brutality” – it can appear one way but be another – and then the separation that follows casts this in a whole new light.

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  12. annell4
    May 12, 2019 @ 14:24:41

    Toni, I am touched by your poem. The last line, says it all!!

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  13. ZQ
    May 12, 2019 @ 15:51:03

    Oceans Love-ly Juxtaposition…

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  14. robtkistner
    May 12, 2019 @ 18:58:42

    I was drawn into the eternal separation essence of the two separate oceans. Always touching tge shore, but never the same shore. Mothers Day takes me to a sad place. I never knew my mother, never who she was. An nameless faceless unwed mother. An anonymous ocean from which I emerged. Always apart, ans always the sky is empty. Sad ending for your poem Toni.

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    • kanzensakura
      May 12, 2019 @ 19:48:37

      I am sorry Rob. If my parents were alive, I know they would “adopt” you. I had so many friends who were thrown awzy by their parents because they were gay, addicted, had mental issues. My parents loved them all. Listened to them talked to them, remembered their birthdays and graduations, loved them. They encouraged them. Their hearts were infinite in size and all were welcome.

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  15. Truedessa
    May 12, 2019 @ 19:05:28

    You may be of different oceans but, you still roll with the tide and moon.

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  16. Mary
    May 12, 2019 @ 19:12:25

    I really love how you characterized the ocean, Toni, and described your relationship with it.

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  17. Wendy Bourke
    May 12, 2019 @ 20:09:26

    Love it! There is something about absence and oceans that is … well … the stuff of poetry. A beautifully rendered piece of poetry.

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  18. Sherry Blue Sky
    May 12, 2019 @ 21:25:09

    Two different oceans on different coasts……..”without gulls the sky is empty…..” So full of love, longing and missing………..and very beautiful.

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  19. Charmed Chaos
    May 13, 2019 @ 10:34:09

    I love the title and the poem Toni.

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  20. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    May 13, 2019 @ 23:25:11

    …hope upon those seagulls – they touch both shores. Lovely, poem full of feeling.

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