Haibun: Moon Ladder

Today is quadrille Monday at dVerse. A quadrille is a poem of exactly 44 words sans title, using the word choice of the poet giving the prompt. Today Kim is our lovely pubtender and the word of her choice is “fret” or a form of the word.  I am writing a haibun – a Japanese prosimetric form consisting of a paragraph of non-fiction and ended with a seasonal haiku.

Haibun:  Moon Ladder
“Don’t tell me the moon is shining; show me the glint of light on broken glass.” ― Anton Chekhov

The night is warm – it’s the beginning of summer. The full strawberry moon glows slightly pink, reflected on the ocean. I wish I could climb the moon ladder to the stars.
warm summer night –
the ocean frets at the shore
slowly wearing it away

41 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Charmed Chaos
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 15:17:02

    So calming and peaceful Toni.


  2. kim881
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 15:18:12

    Thank you for the lovely epithet, Toni – I appreciate being referred to as a lovely pubtender – and you may have whatever drink your heart desires.
    I love the Chekhov quote would love to join you in climbing the moon ladder to the pink strawberry moon! I especially enjoyed the ocean fretting at the shore.


  3. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 15:49:27

    I so wish I could see the moon… but we have daylight almost all the time. It’s almost 10 PM at the moment and the sun has not yet set. Sunrise is at 3:30…


  4. Nathan AM Smith
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 16:13:19

    Lovely. Really lovely.


  5. map195
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 16:21:55

    really nice post


  6. msjadeli
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 16:43:42

    shrouded stillness of yearning, simply beautiful


  7. L.K.Middlebrook
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 16:50:44

    Ohhhhh I love this. The imagery is beautiful. The strawberry moon ! Absolutely wonderful 😊


  8. Dr. Crystal Grimes
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 16:55:14

    Beautiful, Toni!


  9. Glenn Buttkus
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 17:29:38

    Lovely Toni; as sweet as cherry blossoms, as peaceful as a stream running through a Japanese garden. Here in the Pac NW, it gets dark at 9:15 pm, daylight at 5:15am.


  10. larry trasciatti
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 18:14:41

    such a very nice soothing poem


  11. rothpoetry
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 18:41:31

    I really like your incorporated haiku of the ocean eroding away the shore!


  12. Arcadia Maria
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 20:01:29

    Beautiful words.


  13. Sascha Darlington
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 20:45:32

    I love “moon ladder”; how beautiful!


  14. lynn__
    Jun 17, 2019 @ 23:08:37

    Oh, to climb that ladder and pick the strawberry moon! Gorgeous haibun, Toni.


  15. robtkistner
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 03:39:17

    I really like this Toni! Well written. Lately I’ve ben followed by a moon shadow, moon shadow, moon shadow.


  16. Jane Dougherty
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 04:55:51

    I do like this, especially the ambiguity of the fretting of the moon.


  17. Kestril Trueseeker
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 08:37:28

    I’ve seen and dreamed of that ladder too, and imagined the trip across it.


  18. Xan
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 08:53:58

    “moon ladder” is a lovely, original concept. Thank you.


  19. Kerry
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 10:27:13

    That quote is one of my favourites. And I adore your beautiful description of the strawberry moon.


  20. lillian
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 11:40:39

    Beautiful! The strawberry moon was one I’d not heard of until I listened to our forecast last week. And oh my…what a wonderful sense of the ocean fretting at its shoreline gradually wearing away.


  21. sanaarizvi
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 11:52:57

    This is beyond beautiful, Toni 🙂


  22. Sherry Blue Sky
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 13:21:24

    This is extremely beautiful, Toni.


  23. memadtwo
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 14:51:48

    A moon ladder is a magical thing.(K)


  24. sdtp33
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 15:08:36

    Beautiful piece…I like the use of fret to describe the erosion of the shore line!


  25. Frank J. Tassone
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 17:41:41

    Sheer serenity, Toni! Thank you! 🙂


  26. Susie Clevenger
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 19:19:51

    This is beautiful. I wish I could climb the moon ladder to the stars..sounds wonderful


  27. Vivian Zems
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 20:55:51

    That moon ladder’s a good idea. I’m thinking of al the calories I could burn. 🙂


  28. gillena cox
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 22:06:50

    Luv the fantasy of the “moon ladder”



  29. ellaedge
    Jun 18, 2019 @ 22:46:54

    Bluetiful! I want a moon ladder, too~


  30. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Jun 19, 2019 @ 23:11:11

    the ocean fretting at the shoreline is a lovely image.


  31. Lona Gynt
    Jun 25, 2019 @ 18:00:28

    Wonderful, you follow Chekov’s advice (one of my favs) very well, you show instead of just telling. I love the idea of a moon ladder, climbing up and up into the smaller infinitudes…


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