For the Meeting the Bar segment of Dverse Poets Pub. Bjorn gives the prompt today to write from a different perspective.
In Plain Sight
“When composing a verse let there not be a hair’s breath separating your mind from what you write; composition of a poem must be done in an instant, like a woodcutter felling a huge tree or a swordsman leaping at a dangerous enemy.” ― Bashō
well folks, here she is:
a woman who loves the ocean
and howls at the moon.
she observes the passing of the seasons
in the Japanese manner
and makes her own udon.
She has studied extensively Bartitsu
and is an expert at la canne.
She believes in brevity in poetry.
She hides in plain sight.
autumn moon –
the night is gone –
a crow awakens
Nov 07, 2019 @ 17:57:06
Wow, /a crow awakens/–I wrote about being /a red cardinal in a murder of crows/. And you presented your self (wonderfully), as I attempted to do for/with my self. What a lovely day when our minds toil in tandem.
Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:11:53
Yeppers!
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Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:19:36
I think I know this woman. Is she the one who kicks snakes on her path? The one who writes excellent poetry? And the one who is a master with the sword?
Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:21:12
LOL, yeppers. She is the one who kicks snakes…..And thank you for the kind words about the poetry.
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Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:37:06
🙏🏽
Nov 08, 2019 @ 17:08:31
😊- my comment box is open now😊
Nov 08, 2019 @ 17:21:25
Great! I was wondering abiut that.
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Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:32:39
A portrait of an enigmatic character if there ever was one. You’d made a wonderful protagonist in a series of novels, which would then be made into films. Who would you choose to play you in movies? And who would be your sidekick?
Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:38:28
I would choose you to play me and choose Glenn to be my sidekick
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Nov 07, 2019 @ 18:46:20
I like that idea! 🙂
Nov 07, 2019 @ 20:11:17
Hey, I laughed myself into a charly-horse! Imagination R us.
Nov 07, 2019 @ 20:32:18
😄😄😄
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Nov 07, 2019 @ 20:54:57
Hiding in plain sight…an apt summary. And any poem that mentions crows is a good one. (K)
Nov 07, 2019 @ 20:55:38
Yes it is if I do say so myself.
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Nov 07, 2019 @ 22:00:01
A great description. Love the cute photo!
Nov 08, 2019 @ 01:33:06
Interesting – using 3rd person cools it a little, makes it more analytical.
Nov 08, 2019 @ 05:53:01
This act is more analytical. When the curtain comes up next time, the actress will be playing with more passion. And the key line, “brevity in poetry”.
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Nov 08, 2019 @ 03:07:44
I love the opening line, Toni, a theatrical introduction, and the third person approach makes your poem biographical rather than autobiographical – you’ve taken a step back, while standing on the stage. Hiding in plain sight, haiku, crows…It’s all the things I like about you! The one thing I missed was you playing violin up a tree.
Nov 08, 2019 @ 05:48:19
Thank you Kim. Yhe playing the violin is in the next act. 😊
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Nov 08, 2019 @ 12:52:42
😊
Nov 08, 2019 @ 10:05:43
I so enjoyed this Toni!
Nov 08, 2019 @ 10:06:45
Thank you!
Nov 08, 2019 @ 10:39:38
🙂
Nov 08, 2019 @ 13:10:06
All these titles and yet there is more….
Nov 08, 2019 @ 13:12:31
LOL, these are the older titles. I accumulate like crows picking shiny things with which to line their nests.
Nov 08, 2019 @ 17:34:41
Wonderfully unique, Toni! I enjoyed reading about “this woman” and seeing her girlhood photo…and agree with the brevity in poetry!
Nov 09, 2019 @ 10:08:49
I actually finds writing it in third person, thus distancing yourself makes it easier to see you as a part of what you belong to in the concluding haiku.
Nov 09, 2019 @ 10:31:33
Yeppers. The haiku is the key.
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Nov 09, 2019 @ 22:10:11
I was rolling along with this lightly until ‘hiding in plain sight’ which is what I do all the time. Thanks for the mirror
Nov 13, 2019 @ 19:59:03
“She believes in brevity in poetry/She hides in plain sight”
This is so well written, and I love the perspective!
Nov 14, 2019 @ 12:37:49
Thank you so much
Nov 15, 2019 @ 18:37:01
Simple elegance! Bravo!