Haibun: Autumn Leaves III

Haibun: Autumn Leaves III
“Autumn’s the mellow time.” William Allingham

The dead leaves drift in faded tatters. I can see their spirits rising in the rain. The green leaves are now gone. Leaves float in the river of goodbye.
trees wave in the wind
saying goodbye to their leaves
half past autumn has arrived

32 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Jane Dougherty
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:08:02

    Half-past autumn, I like that. It’s more like the stroke of winter here though.

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  2. whimsygizmo
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:15:40

    I love those “faded tatters,” especially! And that “river of goodbye.”

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  3. kim881
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:21:40

    I love this, Toni! It reminds me of our garden, and I love the idea of seeing the leaf spirits rising in the rain – we’ve had lots of that lately – and the phrase ‘the river of goodbye’ made me tearful.

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  4. lillian
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:30:43

    Loving this . . . most especially the last line of the prose and the last line of the haiku! I also think there’s sort of a fermenting smell when you’re in the woods at the tail end of autumn…all the leaves on the ground, wet from rain or snow. Faded tatters and leaf spirits….wonderful descriptive imagery!

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  5. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:36:54

    I hope that winter is here now… we have at least had the first snow and a few frozen days…

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  6. Linda Lee Lyberg
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:41:43

    This is truly beautiful Toni.

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  7. sarahsouthwest
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 15:42:51

    “half past autumn” – love that.

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  8. msjadeli
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 16:02:28

    Such an honorable poem to the trees and their lost leaves. leaves’ “spirits rising in the rain” is exquisite and i can see them through your words

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  9. Ali Grimshaw
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 16:05:55

    I really like this line, “Leaves float in the river of goodbye.” I wish I could paint the picture it brings to my mind.

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  10. Glenn A. Buttkus
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 16:23:49

    An excellent haibun, and /the river of goodbye/ is, as noted, a mastery of word-smithing.We’re right on the edge of our first snowfall here; it often snows before winter begins.

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  11. Gillena Cox
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 16:32:08

    “half past Autumn, a nice time image. Happy Monday

    much love…

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  12. Rob Kistner
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 18:25:43

    Half past autumn on the river of goodbye. Wonderful image Toni.

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  13. The Abject Muse
    Dec 02, 2019 @ 19:35:09

    Good writing! I love the trees saying goodbye to their leaves. And “half past autumn” is brilliant!

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  14. memadtwo
    Dec 03, 2019 @ 09:28:27

    I like the way this feels like time standing still. Autumn is often like that. (K)

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  15. rivrvlogr
    Dec 03, 2019 @ 10:11:50

    “half past autumn” – I like that phrase.

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  16. Sascha Darlington
    Dec 03, 2019 @ 12:01:25

    wow: leaves float in a river of goodbye

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  17. qbit
    Dec 03, 2019 @ 19:02:17

    “half past autumn” — Nice!

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  18. merrildsmith
    Dec 03, 2019 @ 19:47:45

    I like “half-past autumn” and the faded tatters.

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  19. purplepeninportland
    Dec 03, 2019 @ 20:49:33

    Love, “half past autumn”.

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  20. Frank Hubeny
    Dec 04, 2019 @ 00:09:14

    I like the thought of spirits rising in the rain.

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