Cold Stars

For Amaya’s prompt at dVerse which has some strange rules. I hope I fulfilled them all. If not, oh well.

Cold Stars
“You care so much you feel as though you will bleed to death with the pain of it.” ― J.K. Rowling, Harry Potter and the Order of the Phoenix

I look at the impersonal stars in
the cold night sky
and I wonder –
do they know you died and left my sky?
do they care?
they shine all the time you know.
you just can only see them at night.
How can I care about the end of civilization
when my life changed so drastically?
Is that why you stars shine on in the cold darkness?
Not caring?
You stars suffered an unfathomable loss
eons ago?
And still burn with the pain of it?

35 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Sherry Marr
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 12:59:45

    Toni, this is brilliant. The stars feeling the pain of loss, as we do, down here, looking up. You have written this so beautifully.


  2. Michelle Denness
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 14:12:57

    Beautiful ❤️


  3. Frank Hubeny
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 14:16:24

    I like the description at the end of the stars themselves possibly burning with the pain of a loss.


  4. Glenn A. Buttkus
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 18:35:43

    When I look at the stars, I have to remind myself it is a sky full of ghosts, long dead, and still shining in the void. Loved your quote. Kudos and hugs for continuing to participate at the Pub.


  5. revivedwriter
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 21:20:43

    Those last two questions hit right in the heart!


  6. Lona Gynt
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 21:59:30

    Toni this is a beautiful poem and it really moved me, especially the comparison between a grieving heart and the light that shines down through the dark sky is amazing I read this with my friend Carly and she said the following which I thought was a beautiful appraisal.

    “There are times in our lives when our problems are the biggest thing in the world but yet it other times we see how large the world in the universe is and realize how small we really are. We are the center of our own universe however we are the ones at the center.”


  7. Lona Gynt
    Feb 14, 2020 @ 22:08:09

    I also like the idea that the end of civilization doesn’t matter as much as the grief of a person, what we have going on inside is more vital, tangible, and real.

    Civilization is just used to beat people over the head or control them More often than not
    Toni, is an amazing poem and it’s perfect for the prompt, well done!


    • kanzensakura
      Feb 14, 2020 @ 22:16:05

      Thank you Lona. I am with you. What difference does the “fall of civilization” make when a loved one dies.

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  8. Gospel Isosceles
    Feb 15, 2020 @ 14:17:11

    One can probably not see (or care about) the end of civilization when one is in the eternal black hole of the end. I like the ending and how you tied the Harry Potter quote into it, asking the stars, the only ones that may relate. Thanks for sharing. Toni.


  9. thotpurge
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 11:04:49

    That close is so good, Toni!


  10. Beverly Crawford
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 12:39:17

    I like that you are able to write through your pain … a blessed release of pent-up emotion. I send healing thoughts.


  11. Anthony North
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 13:15:05

    I don’t think anything is more important than personal loss. You reflect this perfectly.


  12. sanaarizvi
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 13:18:12

    This is so beautiful! The image of the “impersonal stars,” really tugs upon my heart. I am sure they see, observe and listen..


  13. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 13:51:15

    Part of me wants the stars to care… but another part of me knows that they are themselves no matter of us.


  14. kim881
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 14:18:21

    It’s heartbreaking that the stars in the opening line are impersonal and, at the end, they burn with the pain of an unfathomable loss. I imagine you, in the garden at night, pouring your heart out to the stars, and then playing your violin. How could anyone care about the end of civilization after such a loss?


  15. Rosemary Nissen-Wade
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 16:49:13

    A beautiful expression of grief. The pain is palpable.


  16. Kestril Trueseeker
    Feb 16, 2020 @ 18:16:01

    I feel like anything I say just will seem trite after this eloquent and raw expression of grief. I am so sorry.


  17. Audrey M Howitt
    Feb 17, 2020 @ 00:40:07

    Toni–I like how the stars feel pain here and how that translates and compares to our pain–beautifully crafted!


  18. oldegg
    Feb 17, 2020 @ 01:37:50

    I accept everything has a life span,but sadly humans appear keen to accelerate this for no good whatsoever. The more clever we think we are the more stupid we become.


  19. hypercryptical
    Feb 17, 2020 @ 08:31:55

    This is quite beautiful Toni and very moving, filled as it is with sadness and loss and (you) trying to fathom it all out, make sense of it..
    The closing question made me tremendously sad.


  20. Linda Lee Lyberg
    Feb 17, 2020 @ 10:46:56

    Profound and beautiful Toni. Sending love and light to you.


  21. Susie Clevenger
    Feb 17, 2020 @ 17:25:00

    Oh, this makes me cry. I wish the stars could answer, could bring comfort.


  22. purplepeninportland
    Feb 19, 2020 @ 16:49:45

    A unique way of looking at the universe, Toni.


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