Sevenling: This Amazing Man

A sevenling for Frank’s prompt – write a poem of seven lines.  I wrote a Sevenling poem.  A Sevenling poem form is simple – yet complicated. Lines one to three should contain three connected or contrasting statements, or a list of three details, names or possibilities. This can take up all of the three lines or be contained anywhere within them. Lines four to six should similarly have three elements (statements, details, names, or possibilities) connected directly or indirectly or not at all. The seventh line should act as a narrative summary or punchline or an unusual juxtaposition.

 

Sevenling:  This Amazing Man
“God gave us memory that we might have roses in December.” – J. M. Barrie

He disliked three things:
People who were cruel to children and animals,
People who were wealthy and did not share it to feed the hungry,
and people with no sense of humor.

He loved hybrid tea roses,
his stinky basset hound Chester,
and the smell of rain on newly cut grass.

This amazing man asked me to marry him and I said yes.

 

 

 

 

36 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Glenn A. Buttkus
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 16:37:08

    Lovely, lyrical and touching. Some of us like the smell of rain on concrete and on maple leaves, and hay mixed with horse shit, only matched by the sound and feel of rain.

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  2. Stine Writing
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 16:41:55

    That is so super sweet! I’m not crazy about Bassett Hounds but I do love dogs!!

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  3. rothpoetry
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 16:57:05

    What a very nice tribute! Sounds like someone worth knowing!

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  4. Frank Hubeny
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 17:12:53

    That is the first time I heard of a Sevenling. I like the memory of your husband in those lines.

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  5. memadtwo
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 18:12:03

    Left me smiling. (K)

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  6. anthonyborderline
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 18:58:15

    Good write and a clever add the sevenling, like a perfect example of what you described it to be. So I learned yet another thing today! 🙂

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  7. RedCat
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 18:58:47

    Beautiful and touching. And a new poetry form for me. Intriguing!

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  8. Sherry Marr
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 19:23:19

    You were lucky, Toni. How you must miss him!

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  9. peterfrankiswrites
    Apr 09, 2020 @ 21:18:24

    Witty & clever piece – and what an interesting form…(I might give this a whirl myself) – Thank you

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  10. susanstoo
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 01:33:19

    Sounds wonderful–except for the dog. But who wants perfection? I’m so glad you had such a fine love.

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    • kanzensakura
      Apr 10, 2020 @ 01:42:58

      Chester was more of a brother to Brad than his own brother. Brad and Chester were quite a pair. Bassetts were bred to run under horses in the hunt. They had tough skin that enables them to go through briers and an oily skin that allows them to go into water. They are intelligent as cats and as lazy. Chester actually turned me onto dogs!

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  11. kim881
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 04:19:13

    A lovely sevenling tribute to Brad, Toni! Tea roses and Basset hounds – he sounds great.

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  12. sarahsouthwest
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 04:34:58

    What a nice form. It suits you – very clean, imagistic – and what a lovely tribute to Brad. He sounds great.

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  13. merrildsmith
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 08:29:44

    Lovely, touching. I agree with Sarah that it’s a great form for you–and also for sharing this memory of/tribute to your husband.

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  14. Bodhirose
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 08:47:55

    You lucky woman to have found such a long-time love. My thoughts go out to your heart. The sevenling suited this prompt perfectly, Toni. I love the sevenling! xoxo

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  15. georgeplace2013
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 10:22:55

    Love your sevenling. Lovely tribute to your husband and I think I would like Chester very much.

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  16. Victoria Stuart
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 10:31:51

    This is so sweet! The last line surprised and delighted me.

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  17. Frank J. Tassone
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 13:25:39

    Beautiful!

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  18. Truedessa
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 13:43:19

    Truly heartfelt…

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  19. Raivenne
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 14:17:45

    So lovely and sweet! The final line nails it.

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  20. erbiage
    Apr 10, 2020 @ 22:46:57

    Delightful

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  21. Linda Lee Lyberg
    Apr 11, 2020 @ 16:48:11

    This is touching and beautiful Toni.

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  22. David Emeron
    Apr 18, 2020 @ 04:15:30

    I am beyond remiss. Still I am glad to see you are still here.

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    • kanzensakura
      Apr 18, 2020 @ 06:19:34

      Hello David. It is good to see you here. I was wondering what had happened to you. My husband died suddenly in December from myotonic muscular dystrophy.

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