Hana o dekishi

Today at Real Toads, Shay is asking us to write a descriptive poem, poetic imagery.


Hana o dekishi
*
heavy blossoms pull down the branches
of trees by the river.
higher blossoms weep down their petals
upon the surface of the river
in which the submerged blossoms drown.
dead leaves cover the earth
beneath the trees.
Sharp winds blow
removing the corpses of winter.

*Japanese for drowned flowers

shutterstock image

12 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Sherry Blue sky
    Mar 29, 2018 @ 22:24:04

    Beautiful, Toni. I can see those blooms weighing down the branches.

    Reply

  2. Kerry O'Connor
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 02:31:12

    You captured the image very clearly. How good it must be to enjoy the rain as it cleans up after winter.

    Reply

  3. grapeling
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 03:00:58

    less stark than clear-eyed; vivid and sharp ~

    Reply

  4. kim881
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 03:08:24

    ‘Drowned flowers’ is so romantic, Toni. It reminds me of Ophelia. This is a photographic poem, so detailed and realistic. I especially love
    ‘higher blossoms weep down their petals’
    and
    ‘Sharp winds blow
    removing the corpses of winter’.

    Reply

  5. hedgewitch
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 07:58:21

    A perfect reflection of so many things–spring is not all about unalloyed growth and rejuvenation, it has such brevity, such poignancy, reflected in your sharp imagery, however submerged the blossoms.

    Reply

  6. coalblack
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 08:18:08

    What a perfect description of early spring, Toni! Windy and still brisk, but with blossoms and buds appearing, and magnificent May just around the corner.

    Reply

  7. Rommy
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 09:27:44

    I agree with Shay. It’s a spot on observation of an early spring day.

    Reply

  8. Magaly Guerrero
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 11:00:12

    “April is the cruellest month”, and March is her terrible sister… in beauty and necessary horrors. This poem makes me think of that. About how spring can’t show the glory and gentleness of her blossoms, without sucking on the bones of winter.

    Reply

  9. Björn Rudberg (brudberg)
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 11:24:18

    The corpses of winter… just love that with all the imagery of spring…

    Reply

  10. Margaret Elizabeth Bednar
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 11:57:39

    weep down their petals! Gorgeous – it drips spring!

    Reply

  11. Vivian Zems
    Mar 30, 2018 @ 20:15:07

    Perfect…sharp winds remove the corpses of winter. I wish I’d thought of that.

    Reply

Thank you for reading! I try to reciprocate all comments. If you want me to visit a particular post, please direct me directly to that post.

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Google photo

You are commenting using your Google account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.

%d bloggers like this: