Real Toads – Buildings

Kim is hosting the weekend challenge on Real Toads – http://withrealtoads.blogspot.com/ Kim says: “What I like about it (Philip Larkin’s poem The Building) is the way in which the poem conveys the physical appearance and atmosphere of a hospital without once using the term ‘hospital’, through the use of certain words and connotations.
Today’s challenge is to write about a building. It could be a specific building with a name that we would all know without directly naming it. It could be a church, a school or a building in which you have lived. It could be a department store, a government building or a concert hall. It is up to the reader to work out what the building is. Your She wants us to write about buildings without naming the building specifically or using the term of building.”

The Flowerbox
it’s a yellow flowerbox –
floralled with fresh and fast fading blooms.
it’s a yellow flowerbox
buzzed by bees butterflies ladybugs –
it’s a yellow flowerbox
watered and fed well –
it’s a yellow flowerbox
plucked and weeded –
it’s a yellow flowerbox
neglected and forgotten –
filled with fast fading blooms

8 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. sarahrussellpoetry
    Jul 23, 2017 @ 19:24:20

    Love your yellow flower box with all its colorful inhabitants and insect visitors.

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  2. Victoria C. Slotto
    Jul 23, 2017 @ 19:55:19

    Such a poignant memory, I suspect. Perhaps your childhood home…or maybe where your sweet mama lived before she came to you. Real atmosphere here.

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  3. kim881
    Jul 24, 2017 @ 03:28:54

    A wonderful building for bees, butterflies and ladybugs, Toni! But a shame it’s neglected and forgotten in the end.I like the repetition, child-like and appealing to the senses.

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  4. Kerry
    Jul 24, 2017 @ 09:38:47

    The repetition works well in this visual description.

    Reply

  5. Susie Clevenger (@wingsobutterfly)
    Jul 24, 2017 @ 16:11:44

    How quickly we plant perfect, well attended and then watch life chew it away.

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  6. hayesspencer
    Jul 24, 2017 @ 16:19:38

    Especially when those fading flowers are the elderly. Truly sad.

    Reply

  7. arsenios
    Sep 12, 2017 @ 07:50:27


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