For Poets United Midweek Motif – Silence
Afterwards
The silence after the argument between us was devastating –
like the silence after an F-5 tornado –
trailers were coming to that last roll,
electrical wires were still buzzing and popping.
We sat on opposite sides of the fireplace –
burning its warmest friendliest best
but we were not to be lured into its trap.
We were imprisoned inside my house by the snow –
I wanted you gone and you wanted to be gone.
All civility between us was shattered.
I made myself a cup of hot chocolate –
with a bit of bourbon and offered you none.
The snow fell silently
and steadily outside.
I sipped from my mug.
At last the cats came out of hiding.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 15:40:17
This kind of silence I could do without!
Nov 08, 2017 @ 15:42:32
and lizards and big cats…LOL. I love all the night sounds of the desert. And the snake is just moving from one place to the next, she isn’t rattling.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 15:44:32
Oy. I hate that kind of silence. And you know you should probably apologize. And they should probably apologize but no one wants to give. Pride. Ugh.
It was a cute touch to include the cats coming out of hiding. Ha. I wonder what they think of us at times.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 15:45:51
I think they think we are barbarians. And no, as soon as he was able he left. At last.
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Nov 08, 2017 @ 15:54:08
Wow! That cup of chocolate hurts, it really hurts. Fine poem!
Nov 08, 2017 @ 16:09:25
Oh…I hate that silence after…sometimes there is no way back. Later, we wonder what was that all about? It was of so little importance, yet, I knew I could have killed you and you could have killed me.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 16:21:12
Yeppers…
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Nov 08, 2017 @ 17:36:43
I can feel that prickly silence……….and love that the cats finally came out from under the furniture……..
Nov 08, 2017 @ 17:36:59
p.s. and now I want some hot chocolate!
Nov 08, 2017 @ 17:40:17
Lol…my drug of choice…a mug of hot Ovaltine and a shot of bourbon dumped in it.
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Nov 08, 2017 @ 17:42:16
Ouch. Don’t need that kind of silence. Hopefully the cat eased tensions a bit. Our dogs seem to know when we are a bit at odds and do something to break the ice–which always melts quickly anyway. The problem with that kind of silence is the noise that is going on inside.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 17:49:12
Yes it is that inner noise. I was well shut of him anyway!
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Nov 08, 2017 @ 20:39:48
That was loud silence the one I know too I love your last line ” At last the cats came out of hiding which speaks volumes
Nov 08, 2017 @ 22:32:16
They were very peaceful cats and any discord upset them terribly.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 20:40:34
That ovaltine with bourbon sounds perfect for that terrible situation!
Nov 08, 2017 @ 20:44:41
It is! ??
Nov 08, 2017 @ 23:20:30
It appears that there was no doubt that the two should part, made more urgent by the weather preventing that from happening. Better a break like this which appears to be final than a long drawn out separation where so much time and effort would be wasted.
Nov 08, 2017 @ 23:22:11
Thank you. I totally agree(d) with you.
Nov 09, 2017 @ 00:23:17
civility shattered. even with a warm mug in front of a toasty fire. ah, what a shame.
Nov 09, 2017 @ 05:40:43
Perhaps. But I met somebody better – my husband!
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Nov 09, 2017 @ 00:36:12
You did a good thing by having that hot chocolate, & ignoring the other one, if it was the final parting. Must say that the cat had a good sense of time. lol!!
Nov 09, 2017 @ 00:39:12
Awkward silence usually feel like a lifetime. What a pity that even when the weather could not produce some kind of civility between the two characters!
Nov 09, 2017 @ 11:56:39
Wow, you paint the picture so well, superb.
Nov 09, 2017 @ 12:04:01
Thank you John
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Nov 10, 2017 @ 14:12:59
Oh those awful silences that make your chest wall ache as you seethe with anger, and nothing seems forgivable.
Clever cats waiting until the time was right.
Anna :o]
Nov 17, 2017 @ 13:14:20
wow, pretty strong. good writing!
Nov 17, 2017 @ 18:10:08
Thank you!